The Heir Apparent
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Comment from RebelRose
"She's been under a lot of stress the past few days."
Boy, talk about putting it mildly. I guess it is hard to sum the situation up in a few words, although James did a good job of it in his mind, LOL. Another great chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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"She's been under a lot of stress the past few days."
Boy, talk about putting it mildly. I guess it is hard to sum the situation up in a few words, although James did a good job of it in his mind, LOL. Another great chapter.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Personally, I find humor the best way to relieve stress. Glad you enjoyed this on.
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I find humor a good way to relieve almost anything. I couldn't live without a sense of humor. If you have one, you'll get your feelings hurt a lot, LOL.
Comment from hyway94
I remember this part of the story. But it's so good that I don't care if I read it ten times. So I'll stay with it but Sunday I've got to go to work and if everything goes ok I'll be back Wed.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I remember this part of the story. But it's so good that I don't care if I read it ten times. So I'll stay with it but Sunday I've got to go to work and if everything goes ok I'll be back Wed.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I made a few changes in this one but I don't anticipate posting more than three chapters between now and Wednesday. I am so pleased you are still enjoying this.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Sasha, I'm so happy with your notes. You are very proud of your home town, Seattle... And of course you are also proud of 'your other self', James. This is exciting and I'm glad I don't have to wait too long...:) Tomorrow is more than okay.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Hi, Sasha, I'm so happy with your notes. You are very proud of your home town, Seattle... And of course you are also proud of 'your other self', James. This is exciting and I'm glad I don't have to wait too long...:) Tomorrow is more than okay.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Yes, I have no plans of ever returning to Seattle but it is known for a lot more than Starbucks. I am so pleased you don't mind waiting until tomorrow to find out what Charlie is up to.
Comment from Joan E.
Thanks for noting the distinction between an aid car and an ambulance. But I'm not sure if I'm ready to learn how to do a tracheotomy with a straw and steak knife! I liked your pointing out that "June Cleaver" was back. I admired James' standing his ground, but I do wonder about the impact on Charlie. -Joan
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thanks for noting the distinction between an aid car and an ambulance. But I'm not sure if I'm ready to learn how to do a tracheotomy with a straw and steak knife! I liked your pointing out that "June Cleaver" was back. I admired James' standing his ground, but I do wonder about the impact on Charlie. -Joan
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I felt poor Charlie played too passive a role in the previous version and have changed his role considerably in this one. Poor Mom is a lot like a ping-pong ball...okay one minute and back to June Cleaver the next. Glad you liked this one.
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I am enjoying Charlie's broadened role and Mom's roller coaster. -Joan
Comment from Veronica Grace
That Charlie! You have been a busy girl with so many chapters and putting them out in perfect structure for an enjoyable read. Looking forward to the next installment. Why not be you?
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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That Charlie! You have been a busy girl with so many chapters and putting them out in perfect structure for an enjoyable read. Looking forward to the next installment. Why not be you?
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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In the previous version, Charlie sat in the background. I felt he needed more attention so changed his role a bit. I am pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Smurph,
This is a fast chapter that is emotionally charged. Poor Susan, I am sure she thinks her life is over. Thanks heavens they got her to the hospital before it was too late. James has had to grow up fast and take charge as the head of the family. I understand why their mom shut down, I have a tendency to do that too. Sometimes it is the only thing that saves your sanity. I can't wait to read about James meeting with his father. Good writing here....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Hi Smurph,
This is a fast chapter that is emotionally charged. Poor Susan, I am sure she thinks her life is over. Thanks heavens they got her to the hospital before it was too late. James has had to grow up fast and take charge as the head of the family. I understand why their mom shut down, I have a tendency to do that too. Sometimes it is the only thing that saves your sanity. I can't wait to read about James meeting with his father. Good writing here....blessings, chey
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much for your great review. I am so pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hello,
Excellent chapter.
So moving and powerful
Good descriptions
Good dialogue
How difficult this situation would be for anyone.
I like how you weave little bits of humor in as well.
Great job.
Katie
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Hello,
Excellent chapter.
So moving and powerful
Good descriptions
Good dialogue
How difficult this situation would be for anyone.
I like how you weave little bits of humor in as well.
Great job.
Katie
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I have found humor to be the best shoulder to lean on in a stressful situation. I am so pleased you liked this chapter.
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Yes, humor helps a lot.
Comment from adewpearl
you effectively point out the irony that some of the EMT people might have worked with Dad, even been trained by him - I also like the comment on how Dad had prepared them for a host of emergencies, but not what to do if one of them tried to kill herself
excellent discussion of Mom on autopilot
Very effective answer James formulates in his mind to the psychiatrist's question
Take your time, Susan - add comma for direct address
You depict powerfully and realistically James's anger and insistence on the meeting come hell or high water
Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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you effectively point out the irony that some of the EMT people might have worked with Dad, even been trained by him - I also like the comment on how Dad had prepared them for a host of emergencies, but not what to do if one of them tried to kill herself
excellent discussion of Mom on autopilot
Very effective answer James formulates in his mind to the psychiatrist's question
Take your time, Susan - add comma for direct address
You depict powerfully and realistically James's anger and insistence on the meeting come hell or high water
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for your thorough critique of this chapter. I am pleased you liked it. Be still my heart....only one missed comma????
Comment from c_lucas
What Jamie wants, Jamie gets. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an excellent read. Very good job.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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What Jamie wants, Jamie gets. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an excellent read. Very good job.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thanks. Glad you liked it.
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You're welcome, Sasha. Charlie
Comment from CHarte
Great chapter. This one is full of intense emotions. I'm glad Susan is going to be okay and I'm proud of James. Well done.
Collette
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Great chapter. This one is full of intense emotions. I'm glad Susan is going to be okay and I'm proud of James. Well done.
Collette
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I'm proud of James too. I am so pleased you are enjoying this story.