Comment from Cranial Thinker

Exceptional

Wow !!!! this is truly making my heart race an awefull lot
like I'm geting a real work out just by reading your story....James is proving to be a real man of true authority
attempting with all his might to keep the family from falling apart completely....I know I am beginning to sound like a broken record,but I simply must say it again; this my friend is thrilling to read and I am loving every minute of it....Cranial Thinker

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012

Broken records are great. I am so pleased you are enjoying this. Thanks for the awesome 6 stars too.

Comment from InterestingRon

Excellent

Hi Smurphy
This is really good!
There's much more pace and directness in these latest chapters. You leave your readers a little out of breath and gasping for more - especially with your ending!
Ron

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012

Thanks for the great review. I am thrilled you are enjoying this.

Comment from Janie King

Excellent

I'm glad this is fiction or I may be hunting for the creep that lied on Susan, they're in enough trouble without him lying...I tend to get involved in the stories I read so I have to watch what I read...this is fiction...this is fiction...God bless.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012

Yes, this is fiction...lol I am so pleased you are enjoying this.

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

God You know how to end a chapter and have your reader hanging out for the
next one. This is superb. I enjoyed it very much. I liked the contrast between the boy's walk and the peace of it, and the drama back at the hotel room. Giddy

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012

I am so pleased you liked this one. Writing this was exhausting.

Comment from Veronica Grace

Excellent

Whoa! What the heck just happened? I never expected this! You are just blowing me away with this story. Girl, you are a fabulous writer! Wishin' I was you!

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012

Thanks for the awesome compliment but take my word for you don't want to be me...lol

Comment from axelbeariter

Excellent

Charlie winced at my baby brother remark, but to my amazement, he didn't over react./overreact is written as one word---- For us, there were no good old days. It had all been a lie./Great observation----A great hook at the end of another tense and gripping chapter.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012

Thanks for catching the spag. I am so pleased you are enjoying this.

Comment from Belinda

Excellent

Hi, Sasha, now I remember what happened to Susan and what harm a media can do to people...:( This is an interesting chapter in which you relate the intricate brother-sister relationship, and the vulnerability of a young girl.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012

The changes I made in this chapter were minor and mostly just polishing it up. Glad you liked it.

Comment from RebelRose

Excellent

I remember this part and the near tragedy it was. Poor Susan. She can't deal with the fact that her idol has feet of clay not to mention all the other goings on. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012

I am pleased you liked this one. The next chapter will be different than the previous one posted.

Comment from CHarte

Excellent

I enjoyed the interchange between James and Charlie. It was natural and heartfelt. The dramatic ending was well done. Great chapter.
Collette

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012

Thanks. I am pleased you liked this one.

Comment from oNray

Excellent

I am new to your post. The story is one that will pull a reader in and keep them here until they run out of words. You are presenting this nicely.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012

Thanks. I am so pleased that you liked this chapter especially knowing you are new to this story.