The Red Dress
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "The Red Dress chapter forty-two"The story of a teenage girl
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Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello Alexis
We just had a terrible example for two young boys from here in Utah, Josh Powell Killed his wife Susan, and for two years kept police at bay. It finally caught up to him and last week the bastard killed his boys then himself and burned the house down on the three of the. Nick reminds me of him. I think we cannot write Lisa out just yet, but also think the prick is not through. Perhaps he'll pull or try to pull a Josh Powell
Bear
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Hello Alexis
We just had a terrible example for two young boys from here in Utah, Josh Powell Killed his wife Susan, and for two years kept police at bay. It finally caught up to him and last week the bastard killed his boys then himself and burned the house down on the three of the. Nick reminds me of him. I think we cannot write Lisa out just yet, but also think the prick is not through. Perhaps he'll pull or try to pull a Josh Powell
Bear
Comment Written 14-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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That is horrendous! Yes, there are obviously people like Nick living and breathing in our midst, which is pretty scary. We had a similar thing here in the UK a few years ago when a guy who was about to lose everything shot his wife and daughter before burning down the house and even the stables with his horses. It doesn't bare thinking about that anyone can reach such an awful place in their heads. Alexis x
Comment from MeagM
This is extremely compelling and captivating. I have not kept up with the other chapters, but as for this one, it is wonderful! So emotional and one of those reads that you just "can't put down".
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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This is extremely compelling and captivating. I have not kept up with the other chapters, but as for this one, it is wonderful! So emotional and one of those reads that you just "can't put down".
Comment Written 14-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much! I'm really flattered that you've read a chapter at this stage of the book and really enjoyed it. Alexis x
Comment from RUMLOVE1000
Wow I'm like in awe! You have struck again:)
Beautiful writing and as I have said soo many times before it leaves you wanting more just as this has again. I'm so interested to see what happens with Lisa now after the accident because there must be some great twist to this all because your characterization is second to non as of now!
Hey Champ, you have struck again! "Just like this 5 star rating I just dished out"
Blessings,
Rumlove1000
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Wow I'm like in awe! You have struck again:)
Beautiful writing and as I have said soo many times before it leaves you wanting more just as this has again. I'm so interested to see what happens with Lisa now after the accident because there must be some great twist to this all because your characterization is second to non as of now!
Hey Champ, you have struck again! "Just like this 5 star rating I just dished out"
Blessings,
Rumlove1000
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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And I'm in awe of your great review! Thank you so much for all your encouragement and my apologies for not getting back to you sooner, things have been a bit hectic and I seem to be answering reviews in the wrong order. Apologies! Alexis x
Comment from axelbeariter
The beginning of this chapter doesn't correlate well with the end of chapter 41. Go back and try to make the transition clearer. The reader finds out what happened later in this chapter, but fixing the transition between the two chapters would make your tale stronger.----Now she knew what Nick was capable of, she certainly didn't want to antagonise him,/Put that after Now----the sparks showing up clearly in the fading light like small sparklers. Nice line--------If she was still alive, it would be a miracle.../A great hook.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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The beginning of this chapter doesn't correlate well with the end of chapter 41. Go back and try to make the transition clearer. The reader finds out what happened later in this chapter, but fixing the transition between the two chapters would make your tale stronger.----Now she knew what Nick was capable of, she certainly didn't want to antagonise him,/Put that after Now----the sparks showing up clearly in the fading light like small sparklers. Nice line--------If she was still alive, it would be a miracle.../A great hook.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for your great review and apologies for taking so long to thank you. I am having a couple of days off from editing the last few chapters, so will have a look at that now I have the time. Alexis x
Comment from RazberryBullet
Liked these chilling lines: Nick was silent for a moment and he stared back at her, shaking his head slowly as the penny dropped. "So you know, Lisa," he said quietly, his eyes boring into the side of her face. Lisa felt the tears running down her cheeks and nodded. Nick stretched over and put his hand up to the side of her face, forcing her to face him and look into his eyes. "Then you're right, my darling Lisa. It really is over," he said quietly, before he kissed her gently on the lips. Lisa felt her body trembling as Nick sat back in his seat and turned the key in the ignition...
Great hook at the end!!!
Excellent!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Liked these chilling lines: Nick was silent for a moment and he stared back at her, shaking his head slowly as the penny dropped. "So you know, Lisa," he said quietly, his eyes boring into the side of her face. Lisa felt the tears running down her cheeks and nodded. Nick stretched over and put his hand up to the side of her face, forcing her to face him and look into his eyes. "Then you're right, my darling Lisa. It really is over," he said quietly, before he kissed her gently on the lips. Lisa felt her body trembling as Nick sat back in his seat and turned the key in the ignition...
Great hook at the end!!!
Excellent!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it and my thanks for your great review. Alexis x
Comment from mamakulani
You captured my attention. Making me want to read faster and faster to get to the end of the chapter. You are, indeed, an exceptional writer with a nack for detail. Your writing gives the audience a glimpse into your imagination and I'm glad you finally decided to write this story down. You have thought enough about this and your passion comes thru in the words that you are using to craft this piece. Continue on......
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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You captured my attention. Making me want to read faster and faster to get to the end of the chapter. You are, indeed, an exceptional writer with a nack for detail. Your writing gives the audience a glimpse into your imagination and I'm glad you finally decided to write this story down. You have thought enough about this and your passion comes thru in the words that you are using to craft this piece. Continue on......
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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I am so flattered by your kind words of encouragement. Thank you so much. Alexis x
Comment from peggles
Alexis I am enjoying this so much
You have it all suspense action drama all the ingredients needed for a gripping engaging read
You continue to build the read on ability every post
This saga is certainly not one to be missed
I shall be looking out for the next part
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Alexis I am enjoying this so much
You have it all suspense action drama all the ingredients needed for a gripping engaging read
You continue to build the read on ability every post
This saga is certainly not one to be missed
I shall be looking out for the next part
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for your great review, Peggles. Things have been a bit hectic because of the number of chapters I've posted recently so I'm having a little break now until later in the week...Phew! Alexis x
Comment from Gideon300
I really like the descriptions especially this line: the car seemed to stop momentarily in the air like a bird on the wing. Nice imagery.
A really good plot. Nice Writing.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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I really like the descriptions especially this line: the car seemed to stop momentarily in the air like a bird on the wing. Nice imagery.
A really good plot. Nice Writing.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for your great review and apologies for taking so long to thank you, things have been a bit hectic because of the number of chapters I've posted recently. I must admit, I liked that line as well! Alexis x
Comment from debskatz
Hey alexis,
God, what a fucking maniac! sorry to use bad language, but it fits. Geez, a real psycho. I hope he lives & goes to jail & gets to be someone's girlfriend.
Excellent chapter! You had me on the edge of my seat, and I'm so invested in the characters. And now I get to go read the next one!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Hey alexis,
God, what a fucking maniac! sorry to use bad language, but it fits. Geez, a real psycho. I hope he lives & goes to jail & gets to be someone's girlfriend.
Excellent chapter! You had me on the edge of my seat, and I'm so invested in the characters. And now I get to go read the next one!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Love it! If you think he' bad now, boy have you got a few things to look forward to! Thank you, Boss! Alexis x
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Love it! If you think he's bad now, boy have you got a few things to look forward to! Thank you, Boss! Alexis x
Comment from AlexAX
What a chapter! I knew it would of been Nick. His obsession with Lisa is insane. Very dramatic, had me on tenterhooks. Good dialogue, when he knew she had seen the stuff in the safe, I thought Oh yes, she has certainly had it now. Alex :)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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What a chapter! I knew it would of been Nick. His obsession with Lisa is insane. Very dramatic, had me on tenterhooks. Good dialogue, when he knew she had seen the stuff in the safe, I thought Oh yes, she has certainly had it now. Alex :)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Yes, she was a bit daft spitting that one out! My thanks yet again for reviewing, I really appreciate it. Alexis x