The Red Dress
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Comment from Sheik S. Peer
Another well crafted chapter. Characters rich with substance and realistic dialogue. Nicely done. I found not typos or structure errors.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Another well crafted chapter. Characters rich with substance and realistic dialogue. Nicely done. I found not typos or structure errors.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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I'm so glad this chapter was better than the previous one. Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from debskatz
Hey alexis,
Boy, they finally get to do it, & they just keep on doing it! lol Hell, you can blame them!
Only found one little spag: "It was her(she) who was the problem."
It's just all reading so much better!!
So glad you're sharing this story with us!
smiles,
deb
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Hey alexis,
Boy, they finally get to do it, & they just keep on doing it! lol Hell, you can blame them!
Only found one little spag: "It was her(she) who was the problem."
It's just all reading so much better!!
So glad you're sharing this story with us!
smiles,
deb
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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I must admit, I think of your reviews every time I edit a chapter and the 'that' chopper comes out. I can't thank you enough for the great advice you've given me. Thank you so, so much. Alexis x
Comment from MumEsGirl
Great story line. Alan seems to be doing ok for money for now.
The discussion on pregnancy feels like it might be a turning point in the relationship, if they ever get around to having a conversation outside of the bed lol
kate
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Great story line. Alan seems to be doing ok for money for now.
The discussion on pregnancy feels like it might be a turning point in the relationship, if they ever get around to having a conversation outside of the bed lol
kate
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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It's an important discussion, as the future chapters prove. Thank you yet again for your wonderful reviews. Alexis x
