Comment from livingwords

Excellent

Great write. You really are from another world. I mean that in a good way. Dan :))


three, more times (drop comma)
Tingles chase though Tileen, as well. (drop comma)
eye to eye with Trell, he hisses close (drop 'he'..redundant.)

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012

Thank you, Dan for catching the comma monster's leavings. LOL I hate it when he leaves his mess on my pages. Another world? Now there's a compliment! :) ellen

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

I have not been following this, so I will comment on the style and structure. You're post is very well written with a smooth flow of words.

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 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012

Thank you, Charlie for commenting on the style and stucture. :) ellen

reply by c_lucas on 29-Jan-2012

You're welcome, Ellen. Charlie

Comment from Hareem.S

Excellent

I am glad you included author notes and a lil backgorund as I have only read a one chapter of ti before. It is very well penned down and I can;t find any spags. Kept me rivetted till the end, Enjoyed reading it.

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 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012

Thank you, Hareem for mentioning that the notes were helpful and you enjoyed this chapter. The notes are a chapter in themselves, so I know it was a long read for you, and I do appreciate the time you must have spent to catch up. :)barking dog