Simpler Times
Dear Diary written as my 15 year old self14 total reviews
Comment from Malerie
Truly feels like the dairy of a young teen girl. I really like the way your immediately pull the readers into your day. Your story is very vivid, I can "smell" the fried chicken and see the "...wine bottle was flying over our heads and crashed on the wall behind..." Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Truly feels like the dairy of a young teen girl. I really like the way your immediately pull the readers into your day. Your story is very vivid, I can "smell" the fried chicken and see the "...wine bottle was flying over our heads and crashed on the wall behind..." Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thank you Malerie for reading and so kindly reviewing my story. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from missy98writer
Dear Journal Author,
Your diary entry is entertaning and extremely well written. I had whimisical memories hit me of in the late 70's & early 80's when I grew up. Your narrative voice is great. Your descriptive writing is very good in your diary non-fiction write. I enjoyed your observation about drinking: "" I wish you good luck in the contest with your splendid piece of writing. I'd recommend your nifty diary story to other reviewers. Have a blessed Christmas and a prosperous New Years...Missy.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Dear Journal Author,
Your diary entry is entertaning and extremely well written. I had whimisical memories hit me of in the late 70's & early 80's when I grew up. Your narrative voice is great. Your descriptive writing is very good in your diary non-fiction write. I enjoyed your observation about drinking: "
Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thank you Missy for your splendid review of my story. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this letter about the times you had as a child, i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this letter about the times you had as a child, i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my story. I am really glad you liked it.
Comment from Cindy Warren
You write very clearly from the perspective of a 15 year old. I can almost smell the fried chicken and smell the peach cobbler. The picture is a nice compliment to your work.
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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You write very clearly from the perspective of a 15 year old. I can almost smell the fried chicken and smell the peach cobbler. The picture is a nice compliment to your work.
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thank you Cindy for your kind review of my story. I am glad you enjoyed it.