Gima The Beginning
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Comment from purrfect tale
You did a good job with your sex scene. I liked how she was thinking of the past while having intermittent thoughts and responses to what was going on. It was a perfect fit for a "madam". And it showed the level of slavery her "boys" were forced to live under.
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he is (labeled) a bandit, scoundrel, a traitor.
I'll get() him for nothing
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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You did a good job with your sex scene. I liked how she was thinking of the past while having intermittent thoughts and responses to what was going on. It was a perfect fit for a "madam". And it showed the level of slavery her "boys" were forced to live under.
Notes:
he is (labeled) a bandit, scoundrel, a traitor.
I'll get() him for nothing
Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Thank you so much. I was afraid it would be a real bust. Just as long as it made sense and wasn't all a jumble. Her 'boy's are just toys. Used so capriciously, tossed and replaced. But this is Vermel and Sadie is a Prime One which I will get around to mentioning. Whoops! She did spit the candle out. (Hint: Did you think of Blathen at all when she did that?) I hope you are over your writer's block soon.:) Thank you again, ellen:) xxx
Comment from The Stranger
well my friend, I will say that I found this to be very well presented with a good, even flow to it, I am not an authority on script you see, so I can only go on my own personal view regarding presentation etc...
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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well my friend, I will say that I found this to be very well presented with a good, even flow to it, I am not an authority on script you see, so I can only go on my own personal view regarding presentation etc...
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Thank you for your revivew. I do appreciate your comments that it had good flow and presentation. :)barking dog
Comment from Janie King
Cheating in the fact it's almost bedtime and I need to sleep tonight..not the kind of bedtime story that this wimp needs to read to go to sleep on. I know it's grand I have no doubt. God bless.
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Cheating in the fact it's almost bedtime and I need to sleep tonight..not the kind of bedtime story that this wimp needs to read to go to sleep on. I know it's grand I have no doubt. God bless.
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Thank you, Janie. These guys are bad, totally amoral, so it is best for you not to go there before you go to sleep. :)love and sleep well in his love, ellen