Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from oNray
This is so well done. I do not think I have seen a nicer, smoother, prettier poem on here in my three months here. This presents well
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This is so well done. I do not think I have seen a nicer, smoother, prettier poem on here in my three months here. This presents well
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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wow, what a compliment. So nnice to meet you. :)
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Jj,
I love this poem and it does read like a song. Your words are beautiful and your phrasing is impeccable. This poem is an inspiration to all poets everywhere. We write because we dream. Well done...blessings, chey
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Hi Jj,
I love this poem and it does read like a song. Your words are beautiful and your phrasing is impeccable. This poem is an inspiration to all poets everywhere. We write because we dream. Well done...blessings, chey
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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Thanks beautiful!
Comment from missy98writer
Jewell,
your poem is exquisitely written with fabulous imagery painting a picture in the readers head. The art work is amazingly gorgeous you used. Excellent rhyme and word structure, superb use of metaphor, great rhythm and good use of alliteration. Love and creativeness flows smoothly down the page. I love your lines: "I know you too have found a voice You visit here in freedom's choice Remember I do hear your song and welcome chance to sing along Inspire tunes again to ring in every new found offering Come dance with me between the lines to music of our heart's designs." I loved this poem which deserves a six and I have one to award you, I've been very stingy with these as of late, but you knocked my socks off with this one. I'd recommend you awesome poem to other reviewers. I loved you many metaphors such as: "listen for all silent screams, surrounding you in mystic hues, Come dance with me between the lines, All dreamers rise to vision's quest, Reveal the treasures of your dreams,Caress my mind with sultry songs (that killer phrase gets you my six), and when secrets rest behind each moon." I love the moon. Keep on writing wonderfully. Please have a super weekend.
Melissa.
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Jewell,
your poem is exquisitely written with fabulous imagery painting a picture in the readers head. The art work is amazingly gorgeous you used. Excellent rhyme and word structure, superb use of metaphor, great rhythm and good use of alliteration. Love and creativeness flows smoothly down the page. I love your lines: "I know you too have found a voice You visit here in freedom's choice Remember I do hear your song and welcome chance to sing along Inspire tunes again to ring in every new found offering Come dance with me between the lines to music of our heart's designs." I loved this poem which deserves a six and I have one to award you, I've been very stingy with these as of late, but you knocked my socks off with this one. I'd recommend you awesome poem to other reviewers. I loved you many metaphors such as: "listen for all silent screams, surrounding you in mystic hues, Come dance with me between the lines, All dreamers rise to vision's quest, Reveal the treasures of your dreams,Caress my mind with sultry songs (that killer phrase gets you my six), and when secrets rest behind each moon." I love the moon. Keep on writing wonderfully. Please have a super weekend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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Hey girl, ya made my day! Thank you!
Comment from stephybs
I like this beautiful and calming piece, you have written this well and its soft mellow flow makes it a dream read. The art work to this is truly stunning. Stephanie
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I like this beautiful and calming piece, you have written this well and its soft mellow flow makes it a dream read. The art work to this is truly stunning. Stephanie
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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Thank you, Stephanie. So happy you enjooyed thus.
Comment from Matoshka
How very beautiful and soft, so full of love and song. To sing with you in spirit I will, for then all others will join and we will lift the heavens with our song. I just loved how this felt and your picture so fit. Blessings as I sing with you.
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How very beautiful and soft, so full of love and song. To sing with you in spirit I will, for then all others will join and we will lift the heavens with our song. I just loved how this felt and your picture so fit. Blessings as I sing with you.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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Lalalala! So glad you're joining in!
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LaLaLa, we are in harmoney. LOL I loved it my friend. Blessings
Comment from MelissaBickel
This has me thinking about all the different things we could relate to our individual songs. Life being the main song. I love the gentle rhyme you have going on here. It's like reading musical lyrics. I can' almost hear a melody with it.
Lovely and so well written
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This has me thinking about all the different things we could relate to our individual songs. Life being the main song. I love the gentle rhyme you have going on here. It's like reading musical lyrics. I can' almost hear a melody with it.
Lovely and so well written
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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Me too missy. Thank!
Comment from BothePo8
What a lovely poem! The words you have chosen to use are wonderful. Your poem is very creative and the rhyming is super! However, as I read the poem I began to stumble a little over the inconsistent meter used throughout the poem so I went back to make sure. Using a syllable count for each line and stanza, this is what I discovered. The first stanza has a 8/8/7/8 count, the second has a 8/7/7/8 count, the third has a 8/8/7/8 count, the fourth has a 8/8/8/8 count, the fifth has a 7/8/8/8 count, the sixth has a 8/7/8/8 count, the seventh has a 7/8/8/8 count and the last has a 8/8/8/8 count. Even little rhythm changes can have a a negative effect on an otherwise lovely poem.
Once again, congratulations on a lovely poem.
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What a lovely poem! The words you have chosen to use are wonderful. Your poem is very creative and the rhyming is super! However, as I read the poem I began to stumble a little over the inconsistent meter used throughout the poem so I went back to make sure. Using a syllable count for each line and stanza, this is what I discovered. The first stanza has a 8/8/7/8 count, the second has a 8/7/7/8 count, the third has a 8/8/7/8 count, the fourth has a 8/8/8/8 count, the fifth has a 7/8/8/8 count, the sixth has a 8/7/8/8 count, the seventh has a 7/8/8/8 count and the last has a 8/8/8/8 count. Even little rhythm changes can have a a negative effect on an otherwise lovely poem.
Once again, congratulations on a lovely poem.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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Who's countin'? I wasn't obviously, but maybe when I gave a computer I'll go back and tidy up. ;)
I'm using my smart phone right now and editing is a pain.
glad you enjoyed it for what it't worth.
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Nice poem! Congrats!
Comment from Sweet Anita
I'm singing along with you Jewell. This is a beautiful poem, praising the beauty of nature. It has a very good rhyme and rhythm that flows beautifully. I enjoyed reading it. You did a great job of writing.
Nita :-)
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I'm singing along with you Jewell. This is a beautiful poem, praising the beauty of nature. It has a very good rhyme and rhythm that flows beautifully. I enjoyed reading it. You did a great job of writing.
Nita :-)
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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Thanks Nita
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, jewell, a great job writing this poem about the way we should be glad and recognize the gifts that God surrounds us with. i enjoyed reading this..
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this is very well written, jewell, a great job writing this poem about the way we should be glad and recognize the gifts that God surrounds us with. i enjoyed reading this..
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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Thanks, oh faithful one!
Comment from rheabug
What a beautiful presentation to the writers. I love the lines of... Come dance with me between the lines
to music of our heart's designs. This is one of my favorites. I enjoyed it very much. Blessings, Linda
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What a beautiful presentation to the writers. I love the lines of... Come dance with me between the lines
to music of our heart's designs. This is one of my favorites. I enjoyed it very much. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
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Wow. Thanks Linda for the galaxy of stars. It means much.
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That is so nice to call it a galaxy of stars. You deserve it!
