THE CHASE
The Devil must be killed to save mankind26 total reviews
Comment from victor 66
I'm not sure what is appropriate to say here. Is this just a story or reality being communicated. I went to a catholic grade school and high school, and I was an alter boy. I was never abused. However, my feeling is that if they let one priest to do such things, it is unforgivable. The worst of all humans is a child molester. Many things can be forgiven, but not that.
Technically, the work is sound. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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I'm not sure what is appropriate to say here. Is this just a story or reality being communicated. I went to a catholic grade school and high school, and I was an alter boy. I was never abused. However, my feeling is that if they let one priest to do such things, it is unforgivable. The worst of all humans is a child molester. Many things can be forgiven, but not that.
Technically, the work is sound. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thank you
Comment from Capricorn61
I fully agree with your sentiments. I abhor violence and sexual abuse. Children are so innocent and it's dreadful that perverts such as in your story abuse that pure innocence. I often wish that they could have a dose of their own treatment which hopefully would teach them a lesson, but this can never happen.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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I fully agree with your sentiments. I abhor violence and sexual abuse. Children are so innocent and it's dreadful that perverts such as in your story abuse that pure innocence. I often wish that they could have a dose of their own treatment which hopefully would teach them a lesson, but this can never happen.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Thank you
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, elpoetry, you did an excellent job writing this story about the man who dreamed of killing the devils in human skin. i enjoyed reading this one.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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this is very well written, elpoetry, you did an excellent job writing this story about the man who dreamed of killing the devils in human skin. i enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from Mariea
A well written short story with a lot of imagination. Characters and dialogue realistic and without any clutter. No editing necessary that I could find.
Have a great day, hugs Mia
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2011
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A well written short story with a lot of imagination. Characters and dialogue realistic and without any clutter. No editing necessary that I could find.
Have a great day, hugs Mia
Comment Written 13-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your review and rating.
Comment from snoopy lover
This very dark story was well written though hard to read it was so real. The subject matter was difficult to deal with, though well done, but occasionally for me the flow was interrupted by side comments of the writer that slowed things down. May just be me.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2011
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This very dark story was well written though hard to read it was so real. The subject matter was difficult to deal with, though well done, but occasionally for me the flow was interrupted by side comments of the writer that slowed things down. May just be me.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your review and rating.
I am a novice writer, trying to get to good, and I know revisions help. I am re-writing everything I have written, I hope it gets better. Thanks.
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You are so welcome. For me here is the key: listen to everyone and take what is true for you from their comments! Can't fail then! Appreciate your attitude. Karen
Comment from oNray
This is well written. Once I started to read it would not let me go. This reader found a bond with this victim and joined the hunt for an opportunity to not only end a life but find a satisfying revenge.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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This is well written. Once I started to read it would not let me go. This reader found a bond with this victim and joined the hunt for an opportunity to not only end a life but find a satisfying revenge.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your review and rating.
Comment from peggles
An amazing story told in a first class manner
It is very scary but so real and believable
Chasing the devil
What a terrific story line
I was relived it turned out to be a dream
The language used fits is perfect
I think that you have composed this
so well making it interesting
well done
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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An amazing story told in a first class manner
It is very scary but so real and believable
Chasing the devil
What a terrific story line
I was relived it turned out to be a dream
The language used fits is perfect
I think that you have composed this
so well making it interesting
well done
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your review and rating.
Comment from shashwat986
Hi,
I find the descriptions of things on your story very wonderful. The psychedelic nature of the story is wonderfully brought out, where the reader has trouble remembering whether a dream's going on or not. However I feel it's lacking in plot.
Why did the narrator not kill Father Comstock when the lady left to call 911? What happened to the narrator's studying virology? Why did the coach say he hadn't run the course? What happened to the coach? You have created quite a few characters, but you haven't developed any of them enough. You just leave them halfway.
As a final note, I loved the line the narrator gives Father Comstock when the meet again. That, according to me, was perfect, and the clear highlight of the novel.
Cheers and Happy Writing!
Shashwat
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Hi,
I find the descriptions of things on your story very wonderful. The psychedelic nature of the story is wonderfully brought out, where the reader has trouble remembering whether a dream's going on or not. However I feel it's lacking in plot.
Why did the narrator not kill Father Comstock when the lady left to call 911? What happened to the narrator's studying virology? Why did the coach say he hadn't run the course? What happened to the coach? You have created quite a few characters, but you haven't developed any of them enough. You just leave them halfway.
As a final note, I loved the line the narrator gives Father Comstock when the meet again. That, according to me, was perfect, and the clear highlight of the novel.
Cheers and Happy Writing!
Shashwat
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from Misrael
Very disturbing story but unfortunately also very true and it happens in every church there is and it happens in homes as well. I hope that didn't really happen to you and that it was just a dream. It makes me sick to think about. The feelings are very real but we need to let GOD take revenge. Or we can take revenge ourselves and pay the price by going to jail or we can live above peoples trashy standards for us. Excellent message. Good Job!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Very disturbing story but unfortunately also very true and it happens in every church there is and it happens in homes as well. I hope that didn't really happen to you and that it was just a dream. It makes me sick to think about. The feelings are very real but we need to let GOD take revenge. Or we can take revenge ourselves and pay the price by going to jail or we can live above peoples trashy standards for us. Excellent message. Good Job!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your review and rating.
Comment from nlisah
very nice story, it brought out various emotions and saddened truth but also the ending had me wondering about the main character's life...would it ever be the same or just always driven on finding the error and deception in individuals. so although that abuse happened to him has one to see the abuse n tone it does to the bigger picture...this young man's life.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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very nice story, it brought out various emotions and saddened truth but also the ending had me wondering about the main character's life...would it ever be the same or just always driven on finding the error and deception in individuals. so although that abuse happened to him has one to see the abuse n tone it does to the bigger picture...this young man's life.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your review and rating.
