Reflections For The New Day
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "A Beautiful Vessel"16 total reviews
Comment from El Romantico
If I am understanding this correctly we all are vessels that need to be looked after. Many times we take that for granted and so we mistreat it. Not realizing how sour we can be from within. That is why I feel there is a lot of fakeness in the world because no one really knows how to let their inner self shine through. That is why I appreciate your writings for you are beautiful and it is evident. Thank you as always.
  |
If I am understanding this correctly we all are vessels that need to be looked after. Many times we take that for granted and so we mistreat it. Not realizing how sour we can be from within. That is why I feel there is a lot of fakeness in the world because no one really knows how to let their inner self shine through. That is why I appreciate your writings for you are beautiful and it is evident. Thank you as always.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2004
Comment from holojojo
Hi Jewell,
There's really a lot of truth in this poem, I like the image you've chose (the vessel) and your clear, precise, compassionate style compliments that image perfectly. What's sad is that not only do other people judge the vessel by how it appears instead of what it contains, but we often do it to ourselves as well! At first reading I thought "Every man ought to read this poem!". At second reading, I decided that so should every woman.
The only minor point I'd like to raise is the line "You judge the vessel by the container/Instead of what it contains." It's the only line in this beautiful poem that caused me to break the flow and think twice; the sense (at least I hope it is, or I really am on the wrong track) is that the vessel is unwisely judged by external appearance, but I felt this phrase lacked the clarity which illuminates the rest of this poem.
Thanks for sharing,
holojojo
 |
Hi Jewell,
There's really a lot of truth in this poem, I like the image you've chose (the vessel) and your clear, precise, compassionate style compliments that image perfectly. What's sad is that not only do other people judge the vessel by how it appears instead of what it contains, but we often do it to ourselves as well! At first reading I thought "Every man ought to read this poem!". At second reading, I decided that so should every woman.
The only minor point I'd like to raise is the line "You judge the vessel by the container/Instead of what it contains." It's the only line in this beautiful poem that caused me to break the flow and think twice; the sense (at least I hope it is, or I really am on the wrong track) is that the vessel is unwisely judged by external appearance, but I felt this phrase lacked the clarity which illuminates the rest of this poem.
Thanks for sharing,
holojojo
Comment Written 27-Nov-2004
Comment from Sentra
Nice one Jewell, you've reflected on another touchy issue. I say that in a good way. Question, why is it human nature to first be attracted to ones looks? Nobody can say otherwise, and in reality, this is just not fair. But,..
If you were to take the time to look
Inside the imperfect vessel you may find
That it carries something beautiful
Thats the answer, take the time to get to know another before jumping to conclusions. I'm finding this out more and more each day.
Well done!
|
Nice one Jewell, you've reflected on another touchy issue. I say that in a good way. Question, why is it human nature to first be attracted to ones looks? Nobody can say otherwise, and in reality, this is just not fair. But,..
If you were to take the time to look
Inside the imperfect vessel you may find
That it carries something beautiful
Thats the answer, take the time to get to know another before jumping to conclusions. I'm finding this out more and more each day.
Well done!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2004
Comment from butchiesmom
I agree, Jewel, true beauty lies within. You have described exactly how the world looks at beauty and imperfection. I've read a few books I was going to pass over at the store, and found they were the best ones I'd read in a while.
If only the true beauty could have some indication of what lies within.
I found no spelling errors or missing words, and I enjoyed reading your poem. It contains many truths.
Great work,
Gail
|
I agree, Jewel, true beauty lies within. You have described exactly how the world looks at beauty and imperfection. I've read a few books I was going to pass over at the store, and found they were the best ones I'd read in a while.
If only the true beauty could have some indication of what lies within.
I found no spelling errors or missing words, and I enjoyed reading your poem. It contains many truths.
Great work,
Gail
Comment Written 27-Nov-2004
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
Excellent job, with kleenex in hand. Why oh why is it so hard for people to look past the outside and into the inner beauty of another. It just breaks my heart. God has made us individually and we don't all grace this earth with an outward beauty but what lies within shines beyond this world. Lovely poem to pump my day up with. Much love to you.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
|
Excellent job, with kleenex in hand. Why oh why is it so hard for people to look past the outside and into the inner beauty of another. It just breaks my heart. God has made us individually and we don't all grace this earth with an outward beauty but what lies within shines beyond this world. Lovely poem to pump my day up with. Much love to you.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2004
Comment from WritingGranny1
I feel as if you have captured the essence of today's society.. all for youth and outward beauty, completely overlooking the inner self! I think the 4th stanza is a little awkward. How can something so vile be disarming? Perhaps you could rethink this stanza, or maybe I just don't understand it.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
|
I feel as if you have captured the essence of today's society.. all for youth and outward beauty, completely overlooking the inner self! I think the 4th stanza is a little awkward. How can something so vile be disarming? Perhaps you could rethink this stanza, or maybe I just don't understand it.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2004