Death's Sadness
A sad day.121 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
Simple and sad. It brings back those emotions from when my dad died. I couldnt understand how the world could just continue, as if it hadn't been struck by great tragedy. No man is an island.
Great little poem. Good luck in the contest.
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Simple and sad. It brings back those emotions from when my dad died. I couldnt understand how the world could just continue, as if it hadn't been struck by great tragedy. No man is an island.
Great little poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from c_lucas
Saddnes for a death is a selfish emotion. The sad person is grieving for his inconvenience. Celebrate the life and keep the decease alive with fond memories. Good luck in your contest.
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Saddnes for a death is a selfish emotion. The sad person is grieving for his inconvenience. Celebrate the life and keep the decease alive with fond memories. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from animatqua
This poem meets the challenge well. It also expresses a great deal of emotion in only three lines. I think the poem would make an excellent insert in a memorial.
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This poem meets the challenge well. It also expresses a great deal of emotion in only three lines. I think the poem would make an excellent insert in a memorial.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from teresa.b
Very nice 5-7-7. It speaks profoundly in so few words. Everyone can relate to the death of someone important in their lives, someone who has influenced them. I thought that came across well in this poem.
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Very nice 5-7-7. It speaks profoundly in so few words. Everyone can relate to the death of someone important in their lives, someone who has influenced them. I thought that came across well in this poem.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from Belinda
Your lines give great impact to us, readers. So simple yet expressive. Death indeed brings sadness to those who love and loved in return. Good 5-7-5 entry for the contest.
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Your lines give great impact to us, readers. So simple yet expressive. Death indeed brings sadness to those who love and loved in return. Good 5-7-5 entry for the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi boomachicka
Good 5-7-5 poem for the contest.
Death is so abrupt. One minute, all the senses, heart beating, perspiration, laughing, crying... the next moment, nothing. No movement at all. No beating heart. Sightless stare. The soul and spirit have left the shell.
Life is precious. Yet so many of us waste our lives.
Good Luck in the contest!
Kimbob
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Hi boomachicka
Good 5-7-5 poem for the contest.
Death is so abrupt. One minute, all the senses, heart beating, perspiration, laughing, crying... the next moment, nothing. No movement at all. No beating heart. Sightless stare. The soul and spirit have left the shell.
Life is precious. Yet so many of us waste our lives.
Good Luck in the contest!
Kimbob
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from Jana Gifford
Good job choosing words that leave great impact without much modification in other words. This haiku made me feel sad, which is assuredly the purpose of all poets--to make us feel what their own particular emotions. Perhaps Death does regret his job.
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Good job choosing words that leave great impact without much modification in other words. This haiku made me feel sad, which is assuredly the purpose of all poets--to make us feel what their own particular emotions. Perhaps Death does regret his job.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from viking
So much said in this short poem that is written with great skill.It has a natural flow and describes well sadness when a precious person passes away.
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So much said in this short poem that is written with great skill.It has a natural flow and describes well sadness when a precious person passes away.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from Mastery
Very nice writing, boomachicka. I'm not sure who you are referring to, but it really doesn't matter...the words are assembled in strong array. Good luck in the contest. Bob (Mastery)
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Very nice writing, boomachicka. I'm not sure who you are referring to, but it really doesn't matter...the words are assembled in strong array. Good luck in the contest. Bob (Mastery)
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from miss joyce
The sadness is compelling in this short poetic form. You have reached that element of composition that writers strive for.
Words with this level of imagery are hard to beat...Thanks for sharing this outstanding example!
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The sadness is compelling in this short poetic form. You have reached that element of composition that writers strive for.
Words with this level of imagery are hard to beat...Thanks for sharing this outstanding example!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011