Yes, Ma'am
A past memory, sad and broken.19 total reviews
Comment from Terror2s
I am sorry. I find it hard to write reviews that are honger than the work. Your poem moved along nicely and you had a good word selection. Terror
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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I am sorry. I find it hard to write reviews that are honger than the work. Your poem moved along nicely and you had a good word selection. Terror
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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thanks terror
Comment from shirley31
Hello This is very powerful and it seems to me that it is you who has actually been forgotten!
i really like senryu its a thinker!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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Hello This is very powerful and it seems to me that it is you who has actually been forgotten!
i really like senryu its a thinker!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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thanks shirley
Comment from Debasish Datta
I think I see your pain
(But does the teacher know)
For I too boarded the train
Fifty years ago
Thursday, holiday, detention day
Lovely
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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I think I see your pain
(But does the teacher know)
For I too boarded the train
Fifty years ago
Thursday, holiday, detention day
Lovely
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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thanks sir to have a glance at my work.
Comment from Chris Tee
A excellent 5-7-5 haiku!!
It is a reminder to remember!
Well done my friend I enjoyed every word.
Thank you for sharing this work with us.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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A excellent 5-7-5 haiku!!
It is a reminder to remember!
Well done my friend I enjoyed every word.
Thank you for sharing this work with us.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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CHRIS TEE thanks a lot
Comment from ernesto escarro
Yes, Mam
Broken memory it brings sadness
meant disappointment,
and history here is being told
in termns of short write.
Being readable and comprehended,
my rating for you, 5
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Yes, Mam
Broken memory it brings sadness
meant disappointment,
and history here is being told
in termns of short write.
Being readable and comprehended,
my rating for you, 5
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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thanks Ernesto Escarro
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It's okay. You do deserve.
Comment from The Stranger
sounds like another person with a memory about as reliable as my own..lol!! Id forget to wake up n a morning if memory relied upon it
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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sounds like another person with a memory about as reliable as my own..lol!! Id forget to wake up n a morning if memory relied upon it
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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thanks THE STRANGER
Comment from gazzagodbod
amazed how writers can produce such imagery from so few wonderful words great work i usually prefer a picture but thats just me thanks gazza
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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amazed how writers can produce such imagery from so few wonderful words great work i usually prefer a picture but thats just me thanks gazza
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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thank you gazza!
Comment from 7thpoet
An interesting bit written in the 5-7-5 form. The theme or subject seems not of the day so much but of vanity on said day, of what I know not but still a good piece.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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An interesting bit written in the 5-7-5 form. The theme or subject seems not of the day so much but of vanity on said day, of what I know not but still a good piece.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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thank you 7thpoet!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
5-7-5 nicely done, packs a wallop with the last line...of moments when I was "vain".
Great work and thank you for sharing this. Good luck in the contest.
These specific styles of poetry as so out of my understanding but I do enjoy reading others who seem to so effortlessly create them.
Maureen
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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5-7-5 nicely done, packs a wallop with the last line...of moments when I was "vain".
Great work and thank you for sharing this. Good luck in the contest.
These specific styles of poetry as so out of my understanding but I do enjoy reading others who seem to so effortlessly create them.
Maureen
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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thanks MNapier
