The Glass Cat Eye
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Comment from Tawnyowl
This is excellent narrative amahra. You really get the atmosphere going with good descriptions of the place. You achieve a feeling of solidarity between characters near the end too. Good dialogue. It is vital and alive.
reply by the author on 29-May-2011
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This is excellent narrative amahra. You really get the atmosphere going with good descriptions of the place. You achieve a feeling of solidarity between characters near the end too. Good dialogue. It is vital and alive.
Comment Written 29-May-2011
reply by the author on 29-May-2011
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Thank you my friend. I really appreciate your reading and comments. I really mean that.
Comment from Chuck23
I enjoyed the newest chapter, amahra! I thought it was well written, and perfectly ended in a way that leaving a great lead in to chapter 9.
reply by the author on 29-May-2011
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I enjoyed the newest chapter, amahra! I thought it was well written, and perfectly ended in a way that leaving a great lead in to chapter 9.
Comment Written 28-May-2011
reply by the author on 29-May-2011
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Thank you so much Chuck. I tried to keep it short just for the readers here on FanStory.
Comment from ulster3
Hello amahra...
This story just keeps holding the reader. I don't know how you manage to keep it so suspensful in every chapter. This is a wonderful write and a grest read. I sure hope all three get out of there.
Warmly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Hello amahra...
This story just keeps holding the reader. I don't know how you manage to keep it so suspensful in every chapter. This is a wonderful write and a grest read. I sure hope all three get out of there.
Warmly, Rebecca
Comment Written 28-May-2011
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Thank you Rebecca. I really do appreciate your comments. Thank you so much for taking the time to read it.
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My pleasure amahra. :)
Comment from penelope
ALthough this is the first chapter i'm reviewing of this book, it was very easy to follow. The writing is good with a nice mixture of narrative and natural-sounding dialogue. The plot sounds interesting too. Who wouldn't be lured by spooky goings on in an old mansion...and they've got to save the girl. The only thing that jarred a bit was the second-last paragraph. With three sentences starting with 'He' --maybe you could rearrange them a bit or look for alternatives. Penelope
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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ALthough this is the first chapter i'm reviewing of this book, it was very easy to follow. The writing is good with a nice mixture of narrative and natural-sounding dialogue. The plot sounds interesting too. Who wouldn't be lured by spooky goings on in an old mansion...and they've got to save the girl. The only thing that jarred a bit was the second-last paragraph. With three sentences starting with 'He' --maybe you could rearrange them a bit or look for alternatives. Penelope
Comment Written 28-May-2011
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Thank you penelope. Yeah. I believe you're right. I will look for alternatives. Appreciate your comments.
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You're welcome. P ;)
Comment from missyvamp
sorry I missed the previous chapters to this interesting story...very descriptive, love the recap, and appreciate the separation between parts.
Only flaws were the extra space or spaces before "eerie" and "stuff animal"--should be past tense..."stuffed." That's it! :)
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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sorry I missed the previous chapters to this interesting story...very descriptive, love the recap, and appreciate the separation between parts.
Only flaws were the extra space or spaces before "eerie" and "stuff animal"--should be past tense..."stuffed." That's it! :)
Comment Written 28-May-2011
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Thank you sweetie. Will make the corrections right now.
Comment from Deejharrington
Another terrific chapter! The description of the storm as they drove to the mansion was excellent. Now that they've gain entrance to the house, Steven learns they each have their own missions. I can't wait till the next chapter to see how it all goes down.
deb
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Another terrific chapter! The description of the storm as they drove to the mansion was excellent. Now that they've gain entrance to the house, Steven learns they each have their own missions. I can't wait till the next chapter to see how it all goes down.
deb
Comment Written 28-May-2011
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Thank you deb. Always appreciate your comments.
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You're welcome
deb
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written post. It promises action, suspense and drama. I like your style which has a smooth flow of words. Good jbo
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This is a very well written post. It promises action, suspense and drama. I like your style which has a smooth flow of words. Good jbo
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Comment Written 28-May-2011
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Thank you lucas. Always appreciate your comments.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie