The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "An Unexpected U-Turn"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from fictionwriter
great emotion in this chapter. I love how you've added another element into the story with the grandfather being perverted also. Great job.
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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great emotion in this chapter. I love how you've added another element into the story with the grandfather being perverted also. Great job.
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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/hanks so much for the awesome 6 stars. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from marcii
I feel that you have done a great job at letting us know what is going on. I think I know what you maybe thinking, like can people understand what is in my head , have I got it down write. Thats how I feel to about writing. Only difference between you and me on that point is you have got it down pat.
Good chapter as all yours have been.
Marcii
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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I feel that you have done a great job at letting us know what is going on. I think I know what you maybe thinking, like can people understand what is in my head , have I got it down write. Thats how I feel to about writing. Only difference between you and me on that point is you have got it down pat.
Good chapter as all yours have been.
Marcii
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from Tellis
Holy cow! The grandfather was even more of a monster than the dad. I enjoyed reading this excellent and well written chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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Holy cow! The grandfather was even more of a monster than the dad. I enjoyed reading this excellent and well written chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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Thank you so much for your awesome 6 stars. I sincerely appreciate them.
Comment from words
Another fascinating chapter.
It is a wonder that James or any of his siblings are at all normal given their parents.
I can't imagine what life in that house must have been like growing up. It is a wonder they all didn't end up in a mental institution.
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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Another fascinating chapter.
It is a wonder that James or any of his siblings are at all normal given their parents.
I can't imagine what life in that house must have been like growing up. It is a wonder they all didn't end up in a mental institution.
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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There is still time left for them to all be admitted. Tomorrow's or Saturday's post is a little less dramatic...James goes to the psych ward to visit his sister and find some peace of mind...maybe he'll find some normal people he can hang out with for a few hours.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a grisly story but your fine details have introduced plenty of drama and the story is easy to follow. I admire your ability to create such an ingenious plot.
Giddy
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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This is a grisly story but your fine details have introduced plenty of drama and the story is easy to follow. I admire your ability to create such an ingenious plot.
Giddy
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thank you so much for the awesome 6 stars. I sincerely appreciate it. My work is often dark which is why I occasionally write silly rambles, in the hope of keeping my sanity.
Comment from Showboat
Sasha, I'm out of sixes but here's a Virtual Sixer. Excellent chapter, very tight and another cliff hanger to play with.
Great job,
Hugs
Gayle
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Sasha, I'm out of sixes but here's a Virtual Sixer. Excellent chapter, very tight and another cliff hanger to play with.
Great job,
Hugs
Gayle
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thanks so much. Hard chapter to write...so much technical stuff.
Comment from animatqua
Ok. Dips and dabs, dribbles and dry ups. You are a tease, but that's what makes this such a terrific write. You leave the reader on the edge where he can't help but come back for more.
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Ok. Dips and dabs, dribbles and dry ups. You are a tease, but that's what makes this such a terrific write. You leave the reader on the edge where he can't help but come back for more.
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thanks for making me laugh. I am pleased you keep coming back for more.
Comment from Joan E.
Thanks for releasing us from the suspense and alerting us to your changes. I liked James' feeble attempt at humor at the beginning, since, after all he is still a teenager. (12 paragraphs up from the letter, "facing" wound up with an "f" as the last letter.) The grandfather's letter made my flesh crawl--good job! -Joan
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thanks for releasing us from the suspense and alerting us to your changes. I liked James' feeble attempt at humor at the beginning, since, after all he is still a teenager. (12 paragraphs up from the letter, "facing" wound up with an "f" as the last letter.) The grandfather's letter made my flesh crawl--good job! -Joan
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thanks for catching the spag. Writing Grandpa's letter made My flesh crawl. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from Deejharrington
A fascinating chapter where the readers learn more about James' grandfather. It is more information that affects what his dad has done. We don't know what the letter from the aunt says. We'll have to wait on that one. Very interesting study in how malfunctioning a family can be.
deb
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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A fascinating chapter where the readers learn more about James' grandfather. It is more information that affects what his dad has done. We don't know what the letter from the aunt says. We'll have to wait on that one. Very interesting study in how malfunctioning a family can be.
deb
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Dad and his family give a whole new meaning to the word dysfunctional. Thanks for your positive review.
Comment from Alaskastory
'The Letter From Grandpa' is a chapter full of surprise and gruesome facts. James' frustration will go on. You've done a really fine job on the dialogue. In a fine original way, you've continued to build suspense, Sasha.
typo on your: '...but I doubt anything you(r) father told your mother can be used as evidence in a court of law."
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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'The Letter From Grandpa' is a chapter full of surprise and gruesome facts. James' frustration will go on. You've done a really fine job on the dialogue. In a fine original way, you've continued to build suspense, Sasha.
typo on your: '...but I doubt anything you(r) father told your mother can be used as evidence in a court of law."
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thanks for catching that. Glad you found this interesting.
