Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Brief History of the Old Testament"A collection of my poems
90 total reviews
Comment from cottoncandy11
Hello,
All I can say right now is what a gift you have with words, I don't know how long it took to write, but bravo! Nice to have had a chance for such a great read.
Regards, Cottoncandy11
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Hello,
All I can say right now is what a gift you have with words, I don't know how long it took to write, but bravo! Nice to have had a chance for such a great read.
Regards, Cottoncandy11
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you.
I seem to remember the hardest part was doing the research and making sure I got it more or less in order.
Steve
Comment from Adri7enne
Like a movie on fast forward! LOL! Lots of good rhyming. Some modern touches thrown into the mix. "Goliath would have done okay, Slam dunking in the NBA." Got me grinning in several spots. Fun stuff, steve!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Like a movie on fast forward! LOL! Lots of good rhyming. Some modern touches thrown into the mix. "Goliath would have done okay, Slam dunking in the NBA." Got me grinning in several spots. Fun stuff, steve!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you.
I like your idea of the fast forward Bible!
Steve
Comment from GracieAnn
kiwisteveh, this is a humorous yet factual account (for the most part LOL) of Creation and the major players in the Bible. It is done with a modern reader in mind. Good and balanced a-a-b-b and so forth rhyme. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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kiwisteveh, this is a humorous yet factual account (for the most part LOL) of Creation and the major players in the Bible. It is done with a modern reader in mind. Good and balanced a-a-b-b and so forth rhyme. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thanks, Gracie Ann.
The challenge of this appealed to me. New testament not so much - I never did get round to tackling that one.
Steve
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The OT is so very rich in history, culture, poetry, studies in human character, and wisdom. It is foundational to understanding the NT. I love both! :0 GracieAnn
Comment from Siouxsun
Ive only read the first stanza and can tell I already like it!
It shows great imagination. Quite an accomplishment taking on the Old testament.
1.Pharoah-Pharaoh
Got a few chuckles along the way.It was delightfully done!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Ive only read the first stanza and can tell I already like it!
It shows great imagination. Quite an accomplishment taking on the Old testament.
1.Pharoah-Pharaoh
Got a few chuckles along the way.It was delightfully done!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from daeneam
It is not offensive ... in fact it's the same stories I've learned from the Bible. the rhymes are attractive and I think many people will enjoy this concise poem about the old Testament just I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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It is not offensive ... in fact it's the same stories I've learned from the Bible. the rhymes are attractive and I think many people will enjoy this concise poem about the old Testament just I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Jean Lutz
You have a powerful talent that could be put to good use. I suspect kids and teens would read this and think the Bible very cool. We are told in the Great Commission to go into all the world and tell the Gospel. I think you just did that via the internet and a unique writing gift. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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You have a powerful talent that could be put to good use. I suspect kids and teens would read this and think the Bible very cool. We are told in the Great Commission to go into all the world and tell the Gospel. I think you just did that via the internet and a unique writing gift. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you, Jean. I would be telling a lie if I said I had any interest or belief in spreading God's word. However, I am happy for my poem to be used as an informative 'text' on the Bible, and I believe it has already been used in a Sunday School class.
Steve
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You never know what seeds your words may sow.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
I like this, their are a few lines that don't rhythm but its good. I think it is well written good structure good presentation. A good read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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I like this, their are a few lines that don't rhythm but its good. I think it is well written good structure good presentation. A good read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Thanks for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from jmdg1954
Very nicely put together in summary form, condensed like a Clifs Notes (are those still around)?
It read nicely without any hic-up interuptions.
Sequel at some point?
John
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Very nicely put together in summary form, condensed like a Clifs Notes (are those still around)?
It read nicely without any hic-up interuptions.
Sequel at some point?
John
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Thank you -- sequel on the way - sometime after Easter...
Comment from parisaboyd
This is a beautiful write. Thought out to the T Mr., I enjoyed this piece very much And still there is, I'm sure you know,
Another Testament to go.
The sequel's great, as good as gold,
The Greatest Story Ever Told
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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This is a beautiful write. Thought out to the T Mr., I enjoyed this piece very much And still there is, I'm sure you know,
Another Testament to go.
The sequel's great, as good as gold,
The Greatest Story Ever Told
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review - I learnt a lot and then had to leave most of it out!!
Comment from words
Reads like the "Cliff Notes" of Genesis.
You managed to compress the gist of the story into a few words.
You could probably set this to music and make it a rap song.LOL
I especially liked:
When his mission was not followed,
Jonah by a whale was swallowed
(Who tells his mates unto this day,
"Should see the one that got away!")
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Reads like the "Cliff Notes" of Genesis.
You managed to compress the gist of the story into a few words.
You could probably set this to music and make it a rap song.LOL
I especially liked:
When his mission was not followed,
Jonah by a whale was swallowed
(Who tells his mates unto this day,
"Should see the one that got away!")
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Thank you - two in a row making the Cliff's Notes comparison...
I only put in the 'One that got away' bit because I needed to fill out that quatrain.