Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from horsemomma
I love the premise of this poem: fear is bondage, yet the key is there to loose those chains. This piece has a nice rhythm and easy flow.
May I make the following suggestions (respectfully submitted):
---The word 'it's' appears several times throughout this piece. While, generally, the apostrophe shows possession, in this word it means 'it is'. The proper spelling is 'its.'---
--- I would suggest using the following punctuation for the last verse: It hangs at the open door of truth, which has no locks."
Thank you for sharing your poem with us; I look forward to reading more of your creations.
Horsemomma
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I love the premise of this poem: fear is bondage, yet the key is there to loose those chains. This piece has a nice rhythm and easy flow.
May I make the following suggestions (respectfully submitted):
---The word 'it's' appears several times throughout this piece. While, generally, the apostrophe shows possession, in this word it means 'it is'. The proper spelling is 'its.'---
--- I would suggest using the following punctuation for the last verse: It hangs at the open door of truth, which has no locks."
Thank you for sharing your poem with us; I look forward to reading more of your creations.
Horsemomma
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2004
