The Wind
Life on the prairie62 total reviews
Comment from Judian James
Congratulations on the win, Sue!! I don't know how I missed this one initially. Must have been one of my 7 pages behind days! EXCELLENT and chilling. BRAVO!! (so sad)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Congratulations on the win, Sue!! I don't know how I missed this one initially. Must have been one of my 7 pages behind days! EXCELLENT and chilling. BRAVO!! (so sad)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Hi Judian! Why thank you very much! I know how it feels to get behind! I was 5 pages back yesterday! WHEW! I reviewed for hours. I am always honored Jude, when you like my efforts!! Thank you again!! I hope you are having some nice weather?? Old winter is a drudge this year...") Susan
Comment from dragonpoet
Congratulations on the win. This short story is well worth it. It has strong images and strong fear. The end is to hopeless. Almost like everyone is going to die. The man is dead so his family will die too.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Congratulations on the win. This short story is well worth it. It has strong images and strong fear. The end is to hopeless. Almost like everyone is going to die. The man is dead so his family will die too.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Hi Dragon! Thank you for this kind and encouraging review, I really appreciate it!! It's very nice to hear from you! ") Susan
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You're very welcome. That's what we're here for. To get and give encouragement.
Joan
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Hi again Joan! I will try to read more of your work too, as soon as I can! Keep up the great work! Suse
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I am looking forward to your reviews.
Joan
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Susan. Congratulations, Girl! Wow! You done dood it! Very good piece of writing..The imagery was the thing that carried this story. You have developed very well...Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Hi, Susan. Congratulations, Girl! Wow! You done dood it! Very good piece of writing..The imagery was the thing that carried this story. You have developed very well...Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Well, what a great and encouraging review Bob! Thank you so much! I am deeply honored by your kind enthusiasm my friend! I keep trying! I was nominated only once before and was surprised tho, to be again! It's a good feeling. HUGS for taking time for me Bob!! Susan
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:) Bob
Comment from Adri7enne
"The dirt crept through every crevice of the cabin that she had helped to build, almost choking the life from both SHE and her infant son. HER. Object of the preposition, "from".
Wow! What a desperate ending. I had a chilling premonition half way through that it would end like this. Dreadfully good. Congratulations on the win.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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"The dirt crept through every crevice of the cabin that she had helped to build, almost choking the life from both SHE and her infant son. HER. Object of the preposition, "from".
Wow! What a desperate ending. I had a chilling premonition half way through that it would end like this. Dreadfully good. Congratulations on the win.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Hi Adrienne! Thank you so much! I am awful with prepositions...let me know if I should remove or add "from"? Or what. I did have a problem with that sentence! Thank you again. I do need to go back to gradeschool! ") Susan
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"choking the life from both her and her infant son." Nice work, Susan.
Comment from Writeaway...
Congratulations on this win Realist, I can see why this piece won. I was kept in thralled from beginning to end and cannot suggest anything for improvment, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Congratulations on this win Realist, I can see why this piece won. I was kept in thralled from beginning to end and cannot suggest anything for improvment, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Hi Jakey! I thank you so much! All the others were so good too, I am really surprised. I look forward to seeing YOUR work there someday! Thank you again! It's real nice of you to take time for me! ") Susan
Comment from nora arjuna
hi susan, congrats on winning the story of the month. a short, great write. just a small mention:
she coaxed him to [a] breast, to no avail. - 'a' sounds rather foreign, how about using 'her' instead?
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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hi susan, congrats on winning the story of the month. a short, great write. just a small mention:
she coaxed him to [a] breast, to no avail. - 'a' sounds rather foreign, how about using 'her' instead?
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Hi Arjuna! Thanks! I did change this, good idea! It does sound better! I am very grateful for your help and time for me too! ") xoxo, susan
Comment from penelope
Congratulations, Susan. I'm so pleased you won Story of the Month. I missed this one. You have such an ability to hit the heart with your stories. As I've said, you are a very talented writer. I'm so pleased for you. It deserves all the sixes but my cupboard is bare at the moment--no sixes left. Love, Penelope
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Congratulations, Susan. I'm so pleased you won Story of the Month. I missed this one. You have such an ability to hit the heart with your stories. As I've said, you are a very talented writer. I'm so pleased for you. It deserves all the sixes but my cupboard is bare at the moment--no sixes left. Love, Penelope
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Hi there! It's okay, we just don't seem to get enough sixes! ") I know how it is! I wish we had at least 10 a week?? But, thank you so much! You are so good to me...and I appreciate that so much...XX...susan
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You're welcome, Susan.
Comment from DJean
Profound work. The story that spoke to you in the picture, was written coldly, clearly, and compassionately. Thank you. DJean
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Profound work. The story that spoke to you in the picture, was written coldly, clearly, and compassionately. Thank you. DJean
Comment Written 11-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Hi DJean! Thank YOU! I really do appreciate your review and most encouraging comments! I am honored. XX!! Susan
Comment from sugardog
Not sure how I missed this one of yours, Susan. Wow...it left me breathless...such a powerful write-one of your best ever!! So sad. The ending is great, even though it's tragic, but I Iove how you wrote it. The story just leaves you breathless. So many good lines in this. Good luck to you and CONGRATULATIONS for being nominated!!!!!!! Dana
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Not sure how I missed this one of yours, Susan. Wow...it left me breathless...such a powerful write-one of your best ever!! So sad. The ending is great, even though it's tragic, but I Iove how you wrote it. The story just leaves you breathless. So many good lines in this. Good luck to you and CONGRATULATIONS for being nominated!!!!!!! Dana
Comment Written 09-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Hi Dana! Thank you! I am honored deeply with this most encouraging review! Wow...I am just thrilled when you like my work Dana. I really am. I hope you are getting some decent weather out there and please hug Sugardog for me? XX! Susan
Comment from Terry wrote
So very sad ... you have expressed her hopelessness and helplessness clearly. The ending was a stark realization that death would be her only visitor
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2011
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So very sad ... you have expressed her hopelessness and helplessness clearly. The ending was a stark realization that death would be her only visitor
Comment Written 06-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2011
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Hi Terry! Thank you for reading my story! I do appreciate this wonderful review...I hope you're having a good day! Susan