Impartial Nature.
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Comment from Paula Andrea Pyle
how true how true you have penned brilliant words of the universe's impartiality. few understand the profound message you have penned.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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how true how true you have penned brilliant words of the universe's impartiality. few understand the profound message you have penned.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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What a meaningful coment, thank you Paula!
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yes.
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:)
Comment from Kingsland
We seem to exist on a plane that insists upon violent actions and reprisals. You have written a very good poetic voice on this very subject. This was just a delight to have read and written this response for.... John
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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We seem to exist on a plane that insists upon violent actions and reprisals. You have written a very good poetic voice on this very subject. This was just a delight to have read and written this response for.... John
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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So nice to see you John, thank you so much for your meaningful review.
Comment from Yeti777
While blue sky, sun,
moon and stars
dance above,
impartial.
Superb ending to this loud statement and commentary. Your flow of word and sentence is exceptional, but your final stanza shines. Great work. Sean
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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While blue sky, sun,
moon and stars
dance above,
impartial.
Superb ending to this loud statement and commentary. Your flow of word and sentence is exceptional, but your final stanza shines. Great work. Sean
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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My gratitude for your great review Yeti!
Comment from CodyJack
I liked the way you showed the serenity of the universe while things are chaotic here on earth. If man could, they would destroy the universe too. Very sad. Great imagery. Your friend, Cody
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I liked the way you showed the serenity of the universe while things are chaotic here on earth. If man could, they would destroy the universe too. Very sad. Great imagery. Your friend, Cody
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Hi Cody, thank you so much for your great review!
Comment from samsaysagain
Exceptional. You identify the chaos in the world in recent times very vividly and clearly distinguish between the calm and regal universe as opposed to man's destructiveness and greed.
These words are exceptionally meaningful:
'humanity's chaotic rivers of discontent'
and
'While blue sky, sun,
moon and stars
dance above,
impartial.'
because they give reassurance of brighter visions for mankind if we just trust in a stronger Almighty Power who reigns victorious over evil.
Beautifully written with great insight. Thanks you.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Exceptional. You identify the chaos in the world in recent times very vividly and clearly distinguish between the calm and regal universe as opposed to man's destructiveness and greed.
These words are exceptionally meaningful:
'humanity's chaotic rivers of discontent'
and
'While blue sky, sun,
moon and stars
dance above,
impartial.'
because they give reassurance of brighter visions for mankind if we just trust in a stronger Almighty Power who reigns victorious over evil.
Beautifully written with great insight. Thanks you.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Wow, I am so grateful for your very meaningful comment and shining stars samssong!!!
Comment from Lise Deangelo
This poem is well-written and polished. I love the contrast
of serenity and war you have created so clearly. Good, clean style. I particularly like:
"chaotic rivers
of discontent."
I am also a fan of Pablo Neruda, but I can read him only in English. I always feel like there's a small part I am deprived of when reading translated works. My daughter begins university soon and is minoring in Spanish which I'm really pleased about as I think it is enriching to study a language other than your native tongue.
Enjoyed your poem very much, thanks :D
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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This poem is well-written and polished. I love the contrast
of serenity and war you have created so clearly. Good, clean style. I particularly like:
"chaotic rivers
of discontent."
I am also a fan of Pablo Neruda, but I can read him only in English. I always feel like there's a small part I am deprived of when reading translated works. My daughter begins university soon and is minoring in Spanish which I'm really pleased about as I think it is enriching to study a language other than your native tongue.
Enjoyed your poem very much, thanks :D
Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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What a generous review Lise, thank you so very much. I agree that learning laungages enrich us, good luck to your daughter!
Comment from clsandau
I enjoyed the emotions in this poem. Starting out with calmness, moving into wars and back to the tranquility of sky, moon and stars. You've captured many sensations here. Carol
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2011
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I enjoyed the emotions in this poem. Starting out with calmness, moving into wars and back to the tranquility of sky, moon and stars. You've captured many sensations here. Carol
Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2011
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I am delighted with your great comment, thank you so much.
Comment from Charles Dale
You work is inspiring
The stanzas move freely with understanding
The art enhances your words bringing forth its depth.
Very good work
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2011
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You work is inspiring
The stanzas move freely with understanding
The art enhances your words bringing forth its depth.
Very good work
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment.
Comment from Gungalo
I love the way you show impartiality here, girl. All that above in the universe is wonderful stuff and there is simply no denying it. Your write is so very packed with wisdome. Love it!!!
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I love the way you show impartiality here, girl. All that above in the universe is wonderful stuff and there is simply no denying it. Your write is so very packed with wisdome. Love it!!!
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2011
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I am so glad you like it, great rewiew, THANK YOU. MUAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
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My pleasure sweet poet. Love you!!!
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Love you...