Birdbrains
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Comment from Tillom Gliss
LOL! Too funny in less than 100 words! Great write! I am new to reading this genre but found this to be interesting and well written--no spags. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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LOL! Too funny in less than 100 words! Great write! I am new to reading this genre but found this to be interesting and well written--no spags. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Hi there Till! Thank you very much! Glad you enjoyed it and took a moment to review for me too!! xo...
Comment from adewpearl
An elderly woman ahead of me, clutched - drop the comma
flyers' turn - flyer's turn - it is singular possessive
I'm still laughing - you have a familiar setting all over the news, conflict we can all identify with, and a fun resolution - what a laugh-inducing satiric story. And all in 100 words. Good luck in the contest. Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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An elderly woman ahead of me, clutched - drop the comma
flyers' turn - flyer's turn - it is singular possessive
I'm still laughing - you have a familiar setting all over the news, conflict we can all identify with, and a fun resolution - what a laugh-inducing satiric story. And all in 100 words. Good luck in the contest. Brooke
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Hi Brooke! Thank you for a fun review! So glad you got a kick out of it! ") Thanks again!
Comment from gramalot8
Mystery Author, this is a very well written interesting storyline that should do well in the contest. I loved the ending. Darn TSA anyway. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Mystery Author, this is a very well written interesting storyline that should do well in the contest. I loved the ending. Darn TSA anyway. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Hi there, well, be sure to vote? I love your attitude, and am glad you got this! I am just stunned at this stuff! HUGS!~
Comment from quashdog
Your post touches on an issue that is roiling in America today. Those intrusive TSA agents "violating" us passengers. When the next 9/11 happens Americans will scream bloody murder for our goventment that did not do enough to protect us. Americans are so fickle. I liked your post and I think it was good but it was a little short and that kept it fromk being a five. Maybe the parrot should teach some words to some of the other characters in line. He was the only one that wasn't mute.
The x-ray scanners loomed before us like publically sanctioned peeping toms (This sentence is a politically tinged statement)
When it was my fellow flyers' turn to be violated (Another political statement)
Funny you should infuse politics into your writing then complain about politics in the review.
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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Your post touches on an issue that is roiling in America today. Those intrusive TSA agents "violating" us passengers. When the next 9/11 happens Americans will scream bloody murder for our goventment that did not do enough to protect us. Americans are so fickle. I liked your post and I think it was good but it was a little short and that kept it fromk being a five. Maybe the parrot should teach some words to some of the other characters in line. He was the only one that wasn't mute.
The x-ray scanners loomed before us like publically sanctioned peeping toms (This sentence is a politically tinged statement)
When it was my fellow flyers' turn to be violated (Another political statement)
Funny you should infuse politics into your writing then complain about politics in the review.
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Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Hi there! It has to be under at at 100 words. I knew someone would downgrade this because of politics...how interesting. We are supposed to grade by technical things, not whether we agree with the views. But, thank you anyway, I do appreciate your time!
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I can write about my views, you on the other hand, are not supposed to judge my views in rating.
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I did not judge your views in the rating. I liked your work and therefore I gave it a four star rating. That is not a bad rating. You come across as not being satisfied unless getting all fives.
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I know, and I am so sorry, I have written a poem dedicated to you. I hope you will read it and forgive me. I am having a bad day, and didn't mean to take it out on you! Thank you again, for a fair review!! Susan
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is great. I love the last line! You've done a good job of incorporating all of the required elements in so few words. Love the humor. Good luck in the contest. Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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This is great. I love the last line! You've done a good job of incorporating all of the required elements in so few words. Love the humor. Good luck in the contest. Debbie
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Hi there, thank you for a fair and fun review! I am glad you "got it"! ")
Comment from Lastamen
Amusing. I suppose if we don't learn to laugh at some things we'll simply burst into tears and dismay. Our world has gone mad. The question is, how to you combat lunacy with more lunacy. So much freedom that we sacrifice in order to remain free. Well done and good luck with the contest.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Amusing. I suppose if we don't learn to laugh at some things we'll simply burst into tears and dismay. Our world has gone mad. The question is, how to you combat lunacy with more lunacy. So much freedom that we sacrifice in order to remain free. Well done and good luck with the contest.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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I know, it's a terrible thing, but our gov. has just gone too far now. In my opinion. We are not free. And it will only get worse too. Thank you for a wonderful review.
Comment from Connie P
Very entertaining and you have accomplished all of the contest criteria. The fowl mouthed at the right time. I hope you have good luck in the contest. (I'd rather be scanned than touched :)
Connie
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Very entertaining and you have accomplished all of the contest criteria. The fowl mouthed at the right time. I hope you have good luck in the contest. (I'd rather be scanned than touched :)
Connie
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Hi Connie! Thank you! I am never going to fly. If I can't drive, I don't go. This madness is unnecessary. We have to stand up against this. And thank you for a kind and fun review!
Comment from DrCarter2001
Humorous story, and yes, the TSA has gone too far. I don't think I've ever seen anyone take a bird into the cabin, but it's still funny. I'm not sure why the narrator is so nervous; is he traveling with the elderly lady and bird or does he have something else to hide? Or is he(she) just uncomfortable with the whole situation?
A few typos: "An elderly woman ahead of me, clutched" -- no comma needed
"fellow flyer('s)"
"public(ly) sanctioned"
Overall, good job on this 100 word challenge. Best of luck!
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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Humorous story, and yes, the TSA has gone too far. I don't think I've ever seen anyone take a bird into the cabin, but it's still funny. I'm not sure why the narrator is so nervous; is he traveling with the elderly lady and bird or does he have something else to hide? Or is he(she) just uncomfortable with the whole situation?
A few typos: "An elderly woman ahead of me, clutched" -- no comma needed
"fellow flyer('s)"
"public(ly) sanctioned"
Overall, good job on this 100 word challenge. Best of luck!
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Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010
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Hi there, he's nervous at having his genitals exposed and touched. If people go for this madness we are going to be treated this was going in and out of the supermarket. And yes, wallyworld will be the first to sign up for it! Thank you for this help, I will make these corrections! I really appreciate!
