Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Shepherd King"A complete story in written as a poem.
28 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
Beautifully written in every way.I really loved the art work
and the words were excellent.
I hope many read these words, they would be great in a book.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Beautifully written in every way.I really loved the art work
and the words were excellent.
I hope many read these words, they would be great in a book.
Honey tree
Comment Written 09-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments.
Beth
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a beautiful poem about King David and the psalms he wrote and the way he killed Goliath. good luck in the contest
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a beautiful poem about King David and the psalms he wrote and the way he killed Goliath. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 09-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Thank you so very much for the lovely galaxy of stars. I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Victorian Lady
This is so well written! I love the story of David, and enjoyed how you captured it here. I thought it flowed very well, and is a seamless, rhyming story. Honestly, I was impressed with how thoroughly, and eloquently you told David's story. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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This is so well written! I love the story of David, and enjoyed how you captured it here. I thought it flowed very well, and is a seamless, rhyming story. Honestly, I was impressed with how thoroughly, and eloquently you told David's story. Nicely done.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for all those lovely stars. I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
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You are welcome, I genuinely enjoyed!
Comment from Sefiros
I like the ABAB structure. It's very difficult to rhyme, so I'm immediately impressed. There's not much to say. A story was made in poetry form. Very nice work.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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I like the ABAB structure. It's very difficult to rhyme, so I'm immediately impressed. There's not much to say. A story was made in poetry form. Very nice work.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from juliaSjames
You did a good job in this summary of the life of King David. It reads beautifully with great meter and rhyme. I think it would be a wonderful poem for a Sunday School class to learn. They could even stage a little skit, since David's life was so filled with drama. I've always wondered why it was never made into a movie.
Just a few tweaks.
What about "The giant fell down and died"?
A typo: Should read "King Saul was filled with jealousy"
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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You did a good job in this summary of the life of King David. It reads beautifully with great meter and rhyme. I think it would be a wonderful poem for a Sunday School class to learn. They could even stage a little skit, since David's life was so filled with drama. I've always wondered why it was never made into a movie.
Just a few tweaks.
What about "The giant fell down and died"?
A typo: Should read "King Saul was filled with jealousy"
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I really appreciate the suggestion and your catching the spag. It seems to me there once was a movie called David and Bathsheba. Of course Hollywood would go for the sex.
Beth
Comment from lola29
Beth, you've captured the story of David so beautifully, and Psalms is one of my favorite books in the Bible. He certainly was a man after God's own heart.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Beth, you've captured the story of David so beautifully, and Psalms is one of my favorite books in the Bible. He certainly was a man after God's own heart.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for the review. I appreciate you comments.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love the Bible stories and the way you write in this simple to understand poem is fantastic. I don't think today's children hear the stories enough. Great job and good luck in the contest.
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I love the Bible stories and the way you write in this simple to understand poem is fantastic. I don't think today's children hear the stories enough. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you Barbara, I do tend to make poems simple and a child might enjoy them. I appreciate the review and nice comments.
Hugs,
Beth
Comment from humpwhistle
Beth, thank you so much for the Bible lesson, and also your
slightly up-dated take on the David story. You handle it much like a song, which is very fitting. Your references to modern vernacular delighted me---vowed to make them toast---right on! Beth I think you re-told and up-dated an important story with grace and humor. Nicely done. Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Beth, thank you so much for the Bible lesson, and also your
slightly up-dated take on the David story. You handle it much like a song, which is very fitting. Your references to modern vernacular delighted me---vowed to make them toast---right on! Beth I think you re-told and up-dated an important story with grace and humor. Nicely done. Peace, Lee
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you Lee, I was waiting for someone to comment on that line about making them toast and you didn't disappoint me. I do apprecate the review and comments. I'm glad you approve of the updated version.
Beth
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Beth, you retell this story in a wonderful poem. As a story the plot runs fluently, and as a poem it reads well. Thanks for sharing this lovely entry to the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Hi, Beth, you retell this story in a wonderful poem. As a story the plot runs fluently, and as a poem it reads well. Thanks for sharing this lovely entry to the contest.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you Belinda, I really appreciate the review and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from chita
You have great artwork and your arthor notes are superb-you have a good flow with your poem and you are descriptive-you rhyme well and deliver a powerful message about how David before he was King would sing to King Saul--great job.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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You have great artwork and your arthor notes are superb-you have a good flow with your poem and you are descriptive-you rhyme well and deliver a powerful message about how David before he was King would sing to King Saul--great job.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much review and the really nice omments.
Hugs,
Beth