Redemption
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is another good job writing this chapter of your book, i enjoyed reading it and look forward to your next installment. i like how beth and dex kept sneaking looks at each other
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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this is another good job writing this chapter of your book, i enjoyed reading it and look forward to your next installment. i like how beth and dex kept sneaking looks at each other
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Thanks - I appreciate you reading and for your kind feedback. Regards, Bill
Comment from Nic42
Love this! Totally have to appreciate that you put the girl as the better shot- that made me laugh and happy- quick witted read.
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Love this! Totally have to appreciate that you put the girl as the better shot- that made me laugh and happy- quick witted read.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Thanks Nic - I appreciate you stopping by. Regards, Bill
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
bhogg:
this is another interesting chapter in
your book, Redemption. Indeed, every town
has "the other side of the tracks" no
matter how little some people like to
admit it.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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bhogg:
this is another interesting chapter in
your book, Redemption. Indeed, every town
has "the other side of the tracks" no
matter how little some people like to
admit it.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Jan - thanks for reading and for your kind words. Towns do indeed have the "other side of the tracks". I've lived in lots of different places, and don't think I've ever lived where they didn't. Regards, Bill
Comment from adewpearl
Hey, Mom, he's pretty cute - capitalize Mom as it's used as her proper name in this context
Well, Mom, I most certainly do - same thing
I like the mix of blossoming romance, certainly lust, and intrigue - just the right balance, Bill, to keep the attention of most readers. Good, natural-sounding dialogue, too, that takes on a different tone when casually discussing breakfast, showering, and when discussing the mystery. Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hey, Mom, he's pretty cute - capitalize Mom as it's used as her proper name in this context
Well, Mom, I most certainly do - same thing
I like the mix of blossoming romance, certainly lust, and intrigue - just the right balance, Bill, to keep the attention of most readers. Good, natural-sounding dialogue, too, that takes on a different tone when casually discussing breakfast, showering, and when discussing the mystery. Brooke
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Thanks Brooke - I really appreciate you taking the time to read and always being willing to help! Warm regards, Bill
Comment from Jen Gentry
I remain very impressed with your writing style. Your smooth easy flow of words speaks volumes of your attention to detail. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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I remain very impressed with your writing style. Your smooth easy flow of words speaks volumes of your attention to detail. Great chapter.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Thanks Christa - I very much appreciate you reading and for your kind feedback. Regards, Bill
Comment from patmedium
when Jimmy get's here. [no apostrophe]
Very good read, Bill ... I know the cliffhanger thoery, but this feels as if you've left us in free fall with no cliff to hang on to! (That's a complaint, in case you didn't realise).
Pat.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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when Jimmy get's here. [no apostrophe]
Very good read, Bill ... I know the cliffhanger thoery, but this feels as if you've left us in free fall with no cliff to hang on to! (That's a complaint, in case you didn't realise).
Pat.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi Pat - I know exactly what you're talking about. The challenge of writing "serial" posts is that you have to begin and end, sometimes when you really want to write some more. My FS experience tells me if I go past 1800 words to 2000 words, people start dropping out. The next two chapters are going to be slam-bang. I very much appreciate you following this book! Very warm regards, Bill
Comment from Sally Carter
I missed a chapter while I was on holiday, but little guessed there would be a connection between Boudreaux and Dax.
I'm a bit useless with plots, so confess I am enjoying the potential romance more than the drug side of things, but that is just me, not a reflection on the story.
I chuckled a bit at Lael calling Dax and old man. Kids' views of parents, eh!
All progressing well Bill. An enjoyable tale.
Best wishes
Sally
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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I missed a chapter while I was on holiday, but little guessed there would be a connection between Boudreaux and Dax.
I'm a bit useless with plots, so confess I am enjoying the potential romance more than the drug side of things, but that is just me, not a reflection on the story.
I chuckled a bit at Lael calling Dax and old man. Kids' views of parents, eh!
All progressing well Bill. An enjoyable tale.
Best wishes
Sally
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Thanks for reading Sally. Believe it or not, I've increased the romance side based on feedback. It really wasn't in my original outline. Regards, Bill
Comment from Shirley McLain
Great chapter and it certainly kept moving. The tension held all the way through. The mystery has me wanting to know what is happening next. Good job.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Great chapter and it certainly kept moving. The tension held all the way through. The mystery has me wanting to know what is happening next. Good job.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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I've outlined much of the future chapters, so just got to earn up a little money to post. Thanks for reading and for your kind comments. Regards, Bill
Comment from lola29
I had a feeling about Gus, and I was right. Am I reading a bit of wild fire attraction between Dax and Beth? I hope so, because she seems like a really nice person, and he, well, he seems like a very sexy man. This is getting so good.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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I had a feeling about Gus, and I was right. Am I reading a bit of wild fire attraction between Dax and Beth? I hope so, because she seems like a really nice person, and he, well, he seems like a very sexy man. This is getting so good.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Thanks Lola. I had to bring romance in - I'm Southern. Everybody knows we are hopeless romantics! Regards, Bill
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I hear ya!
Comment from anabelle
Really good chapter. I especially liked the part about eating the other's lunch, the enemy of my enemy is my friend, and the two of them giggling over Dax exercising. Very cute.
Thanks for the entertaining read.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Really good chapter. I especially liked the part about eating the other's lunch, the enemy of my enemy is my friend, and the two of them giggling over Dax exercising. Very cute.
Thanks for the entertaining read.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Thanks Anabelle - I very much appreciate your reading and supporting this book :) Regards, Bill