Scarecrow
inspired by Father Flaps36 total reviews
Comment from Helen Tan
I've always enjoyed The Wizard Of Oz - thanks for this poem that's left my mind with some serious questions!
But I'm a scarecrow, not man, nor boy
Would a straw beauty take the chance?
Now that he's mentioned it - why don't we have female scarecrows? Will the crows and other birds be less frightened of a female scarecrow? I wonder. Until then ... poor lonely soul.
of yellow brick, when the season's gone
Then ask the wizard for grace like toads
To be kissed, then real, then not alone
I'll kiss him - better a man of straw than a toad.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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I've always enjoyed The Wizard Of Oz - thanks for this poem that's left my mind with some serious questions!
But I'm a scarecrow, not man, nor boy
Would a straw beauty take the chance?
Now that he's mentioned it - why don't we have female scarecrows? Will the crows and other birds be less frightened of a female scarecrow? I wonder. Until then ... poor lonely soul.
of yellow brick, when the season's gone
Then ask the wizard for grace like toads
To be kissed, then real, then not alone
I'll kiss him - better a man of straw than a toad.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Helen Tan, thank you so very much for stopping by. I am always thrilled and honored when you do. again thank you!!! jlsavell
Comment from Ceallach
What a take on the scarecrow. It was a delight to read and the only pause for this reader is the forced rhyme in stanza four. It breaks up the read and maybe that was your intent. I also found the meter to be a bit off which created a disjointed flow. C~
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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What a take on the scarecrow. It was a delight to read and the only pause for this reader is the forced rhyme in stanza four. It breaks up the read and maybe that was your intent. I also found the meter to be a bit off which created a disjointed flow. C~
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Ceallach, thank you so very much for stopping by and reading my work. I am thrilled you enjoyed..I will look at the forced rhyme..jlsavell
Comment from Lady Jane
Awww, yes...he needs to visit the wizard. that's precisely what he will do...grant a toad's kiss, he'll turn to a princely state and viola! He'll have a heart, a head, legs and arms, and soon enough a date. Then, he'll just wish he was a scarecrow again with one thought in mind:
I'm just a scarecrow, nothing more
A funny fella made of straw
I look forlorn and wretched poor,
but I uphold the orchard's law
Well said with strong cadence and rhyme. I like the entire presentation. There is nothing I would change. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Awww, yes...he needs to visit the wizard. that's precisely what he will do...grant a toad's kiss, he'll turn to a princely state and viola! He'll have a heart, a head, legs and arms, and soon enough a date. Then, he'll just wish he was a scarecrow again with one thought in mind:
I'm just a scarecrow, nothing more
A funny fella made of straw
I look forlorn and wretched poor,
but I uphold the orchard's law
Well said with strong cadence and rhyme. I like the entire presentation. There is nothing I would change. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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JaCherie, thank you ever so much for stopping by. I am thrilled you enjoyed my little poem..I apologize for the delay in responding..jlsavell
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great poem about the lonely scarecrow. i hope he finds his mate, after all, it's almost halloween. he has a chance
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great poem about the lonely scarecrow. i hope he finds his mate, after all, it's almost halloween. he has a chance
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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sweetwoodjax, again thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. I am glad you enjoyed so much..jlsavell
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your taking on the persona of the "scarecrow" in these appealing, rhyming quatrains. I liked your "harvest ghost" and "magic road" metaphors and your "toads" simile and bittersweet ending.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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I enjoyed your taking on the persona of the "scarecrow" in these appealing, rhyming quatrains. I liked your "harvest ghost" and "magic road" metaphors and your "toads" simile and bittersweet ending.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Joan E. I apologize for my delay in just responding to your wonderful review. thank you so very much. I am glad you enjoyed..jlsavell
Comment from Popcorn69
Follow the yellow brick road. I like this poem, and your last verse was strong. Your verses fit together, and tell your theme very clearly. Your picture helps bring it all together. I did not ser any errors. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Follow the yellow brick road. I like this poem, and your last verse was strong. Your verses fit together, and tell your theme very clearly. Your picture helps bring it all together. I did not ser any errors. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Popcorn59, thank you very much for stopping by to read and review my work. I apologize for the delay in saying thank you. I am glad you enjoyed..jlsavell
Comment from missy98writer
jlsavell,
what a delightful poem you've written. The art work of the scarecrow form the Wizard of Oz is perfect. Your rhymes and meter are excellent. Your words paint a picture in the readers mind. Marvelous use of alliteration and metaphors such as funny fella, orchard's law, man's land, staunch I stand, harvest ghost, haggard dregs, I wear a cheerful smile, all I do is hang around, feel the sun, night creeps upon the ground, ladies shun, life is easy, filled with joy, without a mate to dance, take a chance, find the magic road of yellow brick (killer phrase), season's gone and grace like toads. I immensely enjoyed your humor poem.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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jlsavell,
what a delightful poem you've written. The art work of the scarecrow form the Wizard of Oz is perfect. Your rhymes and meter are excellent. Your words paint a picture in the readers mind. Marvelous use of alliteration and metaphors such as funny fella, orchard's law, man's land, staunch I stand, harvest ghost, haggard dregs, I wear a cheerful smile, all I do is hang around, feel the sun, night creeps upon the ground, ladies shun, life is easy, filled with joy, without a mate to dance, take a chance, find the magic road of yellow brick (killer phrase), season's gone and grace like toads. I immensely enjoyed your humor poem.
Melissa.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Melissa, once again thank you immensely for always stopping by to read my work and give such thorough reviews. I appreciate you very much. I apologize for just responding. jlsavell
Comment from Heather Wilkes
This is a sweet, thoughtful look at the famous scarecrow :-) I love the Wizard of Oz (though I'm a little ashamed I never read the books). Did the scarecrow speak of a love interest in the books? I know the Tin Man did...I love it :-)
Thanks for the great read!
~Heather
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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This is a sweet, thoughtful look at the famous scarecrow :-) I love the Wizard of Oz (though I'm a little ashamed I never read the books). Did the scarecrow speak of a love interest in the books? I know the Tin Man did...I love it :-)
Thanks for the great read!
~Heather
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Heather Wilkes, thank you ever so much. I am thrilled you enjoyed my poem. I apologize for just responding to you.. jlsavell
Comment from Dom G Robles
I like this poem. A Personification of a Scarecrow--what it is is and what its function is. The theme is maintained throughout. The author begins, "I'm just a scarecrow and nothing more A funny fellow made of straw I look forlorn and wretched the poor But I uphold the orchard's law. I like best the part where the author says: "I think I shall find the magic road of yellow brick, when the seasons gone Then ask the wizard for grace like toads To be kissed, then real then not alone." Dom.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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I like this poem. A Personification of a Scarecrow--what it is is and what its function is. The theme is maintained throughout. The author begins, "I'm just a scarecrow and nothing more A funny fellow made of straw I look forlorn and wretched the poor But I uphold the orchard's law. I like best the part where the author says: "I think I shall find the magic road of yellow brick, when the seasons gone Then ask the wizard for grace like toads To be kissed, then real then not alone." Dom.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Dom G Robles, thank you ever so much for the wonderful review. I apologize for just responding. jlsavell
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No problem. Welcome. Dom
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Jimi
What a great poem about one of my favorite characters, the lonely scarecrow! I'm so happy I inspired you to write this one.
"but I uphold the orchard's law"... nice line, he's like the sheriff of a ghost town.
"to while the hours as harvest ghost"... I like this line too. He is the scary spectre of the Harvest. But when the harvesting is done, and his role complete, he is fair game for the crows and the wind & rain. The straw comes out, and he gets skinny. He looks "forlorn and wretched poor", forgotten, tattered.
I think you've got a typo... "dapper style"
Some good alliteration,
"funny fella"
"hang from the hitchin post"
"staunch I stand"
"haggard dregs"
You've almost turned him into Pinnochio. He is wishing for a mate when his work is done for the day.
"the magic road of yellow brick"
And here's my favorite line,
"then ask the wizard for grace like toads to be kissed, then real, then not alone" ... that is a nice image when you think about it. The scarecrow getting kissed in that lonely, wilted cornpatch by a beautiful maiden, who brings him to life.
You know, Jimi, this would make a terrific story. Do you write stories? A sad and lonely hero scarecrow at the end of the harvest season, gets kissed on Halloween night by a pretty young girl. And he comes alive!
A very nice poem, Jimi!
your fan
Kimbob
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Hi Jimi
What a great poem about one of my favorite characters, the lonely scarecrow! I'm so happy I inspired you to write this one.
"but I uphold the orchard's law"... nice line, he's like the sheriff of a ghost town.
"to while the hours as harvest ghost"... I like this line too. He is the scary spectre of the Harvest. But when the harvesting is done, and his role complete, he is fair game for the crows and the wind & rain. The straw comes out, and he gets skinny. He looks "forlorn and wretched poor", forgotten, tattered.
I think you've got a typo... "dapper style"
Some good alliteration,
"funny fella"
"hang from the hitchin post"
"staunch I stand"
"haggard dregs"
You've almost turned him into Pinnochio. He is wishing for a mate when his work is done for the day.
"the magic road of yellow brick"
And here's my favorite line,
"then ask the wizard for grace like toads to be kissed, then real, then not alone" ... that is a nice image when you think about it. The scarecrow getting kissed in that lonely, wilted cornpatch by a beautiful maiden, who brings him to life.
You know, Jimi, this would make a terrific story. Do you write stories? A sad and lonely hero scarecrow at the end of the harvest season, gets kissed on Halloween night by a pretty young girl. And he comes alive!
A very nice poem, Jimi!
your fan
Kimbob
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Hi Kim, I apologize for just responding to this exceptional review. You know it was your poem that inspired this and you inspired me to post it. I have written a few stories, but I am not too good at it. again thank you very much my wonderful friend..jimi..
