Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "A Promise From The Heart"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
22 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good storyline about a child that wants to do right but messes up from time to time, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good storyline about a child that wants to do right but messes up from time to time, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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sweetwoodjax,
Thanks for the kindness and support. Truly appreciated. Smiles to you...
Comment from Sasha
Great story, terrific imagery and delightful ending. Very sweet and a marvelous entry for the contest too. I wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Great story, terrific imagery and delightful ending. Very sweet and a marvelous entry for the contest too. I wish you all the best.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Sasha,
Finally had a few minutes to call my own and enjoyed writing these short stories today. Glad that you enjoyed one of them. Smiles to you
Comment from Shirley B
This is a very good micro fiction. I think you stayed with all the rules of the contest. The storyline was very good. The imagery was great. Good luck to you in the contest, Shirley
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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This is a very good micro fiction. I think you stayed with all the rules of the contest. The storyline was very good. The imagery was great. Good luck to you in the contest, Shirley
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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OOH! That was scarey...I just reviewed one of your poems and you pop up under my own reviews...ESP I guess...Thanks for reading and enjoying..Smiles to you
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That is so funny!
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
I enjoyed reading you today, my friend. Your story is so precious, and I did not feel cheated due to the few words used to tell it. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I enjoyed reading you today, my friend. Your story is so precious, and I did not feel cheated due to the few words used to tell it. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much for the kind response...Smiles to you
Comment from Belinda
I lo this little conversation between the 'judge' and the 'accused'. It is a cute everyday happening, right? Sometimes little boys are clever liars ... to cover their former lies, ha-ha... Interestingly told.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I lo this little conversation between the 'judge' and the 'accused'. It is a cute everyday happening, right? Sometimes little boys are clever liars ... to cover their former lies, ha-ha... Interestingly told.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much for the kind response...Smiles to you
Comment from Leigh Ann
Aww, what a cute story. Great creativity the way you made it seem like a wedding vow in the beginning. I never thought it would end like that. Excellent writing. Leigh
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Aww, what a cute story. Great creativity the way you made it seem like a wedding vow in the beginning. I never thought it would end like that. Excellent writing. Leigh
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for enjoying my short little story. It was a fun one to write. Smiles to you....
Comment from melyuki
in such few words you have captured the reader's attention, drawn them in with intrigue and interest and exploded the finale with pure emotion and childhood innocense. a very clever micro fiction story based around trust love and honesty. indeed a delightful message is left with the reader.. thanks for sharing such a positive and refreshing story... best of luck to you in your contest. with many smiles to this very innovative writer, cheers , mel xxxx
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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in such few words you have captured the reader's attention, drawn them in with intrigue and interest and exploded the finale with pure emotion and childhood innocense. a very clever micro fiction story based around trust love and honesty. indeed a delightful message is left with the reader.. thanks for sharing such a positive and refreshing story... best of luck to you in your contest. with many smiles to this very innovative writer, cheers , mel xxxx
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for enjoying my short little story. It was a fun one to write. Smiles to you....
Comment from DrJane
This is a delightful brief story about promises. Your imagery cleverly takes the reader in one direction (sounds like a wedding) and then ends with a surprise twist when we discover this is a little boy promising his mother he won't lie anymore. Very well done. Artwork is a nice match.
Blessings,
Jane
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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This is a delightful brief story about promises. Your imagery cleverly takes the reader in one direction (sounds like a wedding) and then ends with a surprise twist when we discover this is a little boy promising his mother he won't lie anymore. Very well done. Artwork is a nice match.
Blessings,
Jane
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for enjoying my short little story. It was a fun one to write. Smiles to you....
Comment from adewpearl
An interesting story from the point of view of a child whose mother has always been his guide. You have main character, conflict, resolution - all in super strict word limits - how often to little children promise NEVER to do some bad thing again in a desperate attempt to gain parental approval? A true to life bit of dialogue :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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An interesting story from the point of view of a child whose mother has always been his guide. You have main character, conflict, resolution - all in super strict word limits - how often to little children promise NEVER to do some bad thing again in a desperate attempt to gain parental approval? A true to life bit of dialogue :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for enjoying story seen through the eyes of a child...his heart was in the right place even if it might not be true. Smiles to you....
Comment from judelesemann
I Love it. I got sucked into the romance and it flowed along. I love the ending. You are very talented and should keep writing. You blessed me. Jude
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I Love it. I got sucked into the romance and it flowed along. I love the ending. You are very talented and should keep writing. You blessed me. Jude
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for enjoying my short little story. It was a fun one to write. Smiles to you....
