Short Stories
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Comment from marcii
Wow what a story, you can picture this scene so easily from you good descriptions.
A sad story that had a lot in it, each different scene changed ones emotions.
This is really good.
Best of luck in contest
Marcii
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Wow what a story, you can picture this scene so easily from you good descriptions.
A sad story that had a lot in it, each different scene changed ones emotions.
This is really good.
Best of luck in contest
Marcii
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Sorry for my tardiness..Life is not being kind of late. Appreciate your kindness. Smiles, Carol
Comment from samandlancelot
I wonder if her mom survived. You told your story well through the eyes of the child. Well done. Great contender for the contest.
Patricia
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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I wonder if her mom survived. You told your story well through the eyes of the child. Well done. Great contender for the contest.
Patricia
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Sorry for my tardiness..Life is not being kind of late. Appreciate your kindness. Smiles, Carol
Comment from RebelRose
Very cute story and well written. I think everyone should teach their children how to dial 911 in the event of an emergency. There have been many kids who have saved lives by that knowledge.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Very cute story and well written. I think everyone should teach their children how to dial 911 in the event of an emergency. There have been many kids who have saved lives by that knowledge.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Patti,
Sorry for my tardiness..Life is not being kind of late. Appreciate your kindness. Smiles, Carol
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I have been on vacation and just read this reply. I don't know exactly what you meant by "life is not being kind of late" but whatever it is, I surely hope it gets better and gets worked out.
Comment from Shirley B
What a sad story, but very well told in the voice of a child. I could feel the child's fear of the storm and also the fear that she was going to be in trouble for opening the door to strangers. These things all made your story very believable. Good luck in the contest, Shirley
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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What a sad story, but very well told in the voice of a child. I could feel the child's fear of the storm and also the fear that she was going to be in trouble for opening the door to strangers. These things all made your story very believable. Good luck in the contest, Shirley
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Shirley,
Sorry for my tardiness..Life is not being kind of late. Appreciate your kindness. Smiles, Carol
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Dear Carol, I hope life gets better for you soon, Shirley
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
This is a pretty good entry. Nice dialogue and narration. Imagery works well. There is something about the story that is missing, and I can't put my finger on it. So...
Good job.
Isaiah Ramesses
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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This is a pretty good entry. Nice dialogue and narration. Imagery works well. There is something about the story that is missing, and I can't put my finger on it. So...
Good job.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Sorry for my tardiness..Life is not being kind of late. Appreciate your kindness. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jnetgame
Excellent story. The pace of this was just right and I could picture Jamie and her teddy bear struggling to ge through this crisis. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Excellent story. The pace of this was just right and I could picture Jamie and her teddy bear struggling to ge through this crisis. Good luck.
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Sorry for my tardiness..Life is not being kind of late. Appreciate your kindness. Smiles, Carol
Comment from IndianaIrish
Great story for this contest. You had me scared and I love storms! LOL. Well written through the eyes of a child. Best of luck in the contest!
Indy :>)
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Great story for this contest. You had me scared and I love storms! LOL. Well written through the eyes of a child. Best of luck in the contest!
Indy :>)
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Indy...
Thank you...Carol