Evil in Paradise
Part One44 total reviews
Comment from ladybird
Wow, I can't wait to read the second part. The first few paras' gripped me, but the remainder of the story was so very good. The undertone of ... something, not yet explained held me. I would have liked to have read this all in one go. Hurry and post the second part. The descriptive was wonderful. Well done, a great read.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Wow, I can't wait to read the second part. The first few paras' gripped me, but the remainder of the story was so very good. The undertone of ... something, not yet explained held me. I would have liked to have read this all in one go. Hurry and post the second part. The descriptive was wonderful. Well done, a great read.
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
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Not good! I hope you soon recover, Linda.
Comment from Janine Ellis-Fynn
An exciting, interesting chapter, fast paced with excellent dialogue and descriptions. Your characters are well developed and believable, well done.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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An exciting, interesting chapter, fast paced with excellent dialogue and descriptions. Your characters are well developed and believable, well done.
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Connie P
Well done, I can't wait for part two. You've set up a good "who dunnit", and make the reader wonder if it will be done at all LOL. Sounds like Carrie needs to either ditch the boyfriend or get used to a life living under his agenda. But who knows she may not live long enough to worry about it.
Connie
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Well done, I can't wait for part two. You've set up a good "who dunnit", and make the reader wonder if it will be done at all LOL. Sounds like Carrie needs to either ditch the boyfriend or get used to a life living under his agenda. But who knows she may not live long enough to worry about it.
Connie
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
Comment from fionageorge
Carol, you are the queen of short story writing. As always, the story draws the reader in, and I love the way you left the ending up in the air. Is he evil? Will she see him again? Did he kill the missing girl?
One spag:
"That'd be Paradise Lodge." He[His] smile broadened.
Thanks for sharing and warmest regards and hugs, Marijke
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Carol, you are the queen of short story writing. As always, the story draws the reader in, and I love the way you left the ending up in the air. Is he evil? Will she see him again? Did he kill the missing girl?
One spag:
"That'd be Paradise Lodge." He[His] smile broadened.
Thanks for sharing and warmest regards and hugs, Marijke
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Trybuck
What or who could be down that mountain? The Ranger seems to be danger in the making. I don't think this paradise is the paradise to leave home for.
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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What or who could be down that mountain? The Ranger seems to be danger in the making. I don't think this paradise is the paradise to leave home for.
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sarabran
This sounds like it is going to be a real thriller! I can't wait to read the next one when you are finished. That Ranger was a bit strange i think! really talented writing here... Sarabran :)
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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This sounds like it is going to be a real thriller! I can't wait to read the next one when you are finished. That Ranger was a bit strange i think! really talented writing here... Sarabran :)
Comment Written 19-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
James is having an affair and the Park Ranger is a serial killer. How am I doing? I am sure you have a twist in this that I haven't imagined yet. Great writing.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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James is having an affair and the Park Ranger is a serial killer. How am I doing? I am sure you have a twist in this that I haven't imagined yet. Great writing.
Comment Written 19-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
Comment from minopavlic
Carol, this is another definite winner. Had me hooked from the start, as my mind was racing in many directions, trying to specualte the roller coaster ride you're about to take us on.
I'm waiting for the next chapter.
no_obstacle
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Carol, this is another definite winner. Had me hooked from the start, as my mind was racing in many directions, trying to specualte the roller coaster ride you're about to take us on.
I'm waiting for the next chapter.
no_obstacle
Comment Written 19-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
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Oh my Carol, hoping for a speedy recovery. :}}
Mino
Comment from Belinda
So there will be a part 2? Thank goodness. I was thinking this is a contest entry and I waited for your ending. Then I scrolled up and saw that this is a part 1. I will be waiting for the next then, to know what'll happen.Interesting first chapter, Carol.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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So there will be a part 2? Thank goodness. I was thinking this is a contest entry and I waited for your ending. Then I scrolled up and saw that this is a part 1. I will be waiting for the next then, to know what'll happen.Interesting first chapter, Carol.
Comment Written 19-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
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Oh,wow, I hope you're much better now. Don't reply this, don't even read this until you're better, Carol.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Oh, WOW, Carol!! What a fantastic beginning and I can't wait to read what you have in store for Carrie and your readers. Excellent descriptions and action.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Oh, WOW, Carol!! What a fantastic beginning and I can't wait to read what you have in store for Carrie and your readers. Excellent descriptions and action.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 19-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading and will try to continue the story tomorrow or Sunday. Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
