Shadow On The Landing
A 200 word horror/thriller contest entry.16 total reviews
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
I really like how you have developed the theme of 'shadow on the landing.'
So many old people seem to fear death while other accept it with calm acceptance.
"I thought it was you. You've finally come have you? Well I'm ready."
Juliette
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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I really like how you have developed the theme of 'shadow on the landing.'
So many old people seem to fear death while other accept it with calm acceptance.
"I thought it was you. You've finally come have you? Well I'm ready."
Juliette
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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Thank you so much for the great review and five star rating. I'm happy you enjoyed this. Thanks, also, for getting it.
Sandollar
Comment from okiboy
I loved the story! I thought it was a good interplay between people and death. It's often said that the threat of an event is much more scary than the actual event. It seemed to me like this was the case with Mabel. Once she got over the anticipation, and faced death (square on), it wasn't so bad. There were other things noteworthy, but I'll leave it at that. Good job!!
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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I loved the story! I thought it was a good interplay between people and death. It's often said that the threat of an event is much more scary than the actual event. It seemed to me like this was the case with Mabel. Once she got over the anticipation, and faced death (square on), it wasn't so bad. There were other things noteworthy, but I'll leave it at that. Good job!!
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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Thanks so much for this wonderful review. I'm honored and happy you enjoyed this.
Sandollar
Comment from Sally Carter
Ooh, I enjoyed this so much!
I liked how you managed to combine the horror/thriller genre with something more profound. Something which is going to come to all of us, rather than the fantasy monsters and the like. That last para was a compelling mix of horror and resignation.
One of the delights of flash fiction like this is that one can go back and read it several times, and pick up all the little subtleties that did not occur first time round. Almost like reading a poem, which is where I usually hang out.
A great pleasure. Glad I found it.
Sally
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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Ooh, I enjoyed this so much!
I liked how you managed to combine the horror/thriller genre with something more profound. Something which is going to come to all of us, rather than the fantasy monsters and the like. That last para was a compelling mix of horror and resignation.
One of the delights of flash fiction like this is that one can go back and read it several times, and pick up all the little subtleties that did not occur first time round. Almost like reading a poem, which is where I usually hang out.
A great pleasure. Glad I found it.
Sally
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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Thanks so much for the great review and the stars. I'm very happy you enjoyed it. I'm flattered you think it read like poetry.
Sandollar
Comment from Angelite
so the reaper strikes again.
well written flash fiction,
one error: and she was dismissed [as] a nervous old woman.
Angel
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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so the reaper strikes again.
well written flash fiction,
one error: and she was dismissed [as] a nervous old woman.
Angel
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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Thanks so much for your great review and stars. Many thanks for catching that error. I'm changing it now, eagle eye.
Sandollar
Comment from M. Karol
I am sure old age and her sight caused images but she did give in to her fears finaslly to meet her fate.
The end came as logical conclusion of her fears.
well put
madhvi
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reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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I am sure old age and her sight caused images but she did give in to her fears finaslly to meet her fate.
The end came as logical conclusion of her fears.
well put
madhvi
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and stars.I'm glad you enjoyed this.
Sandollar
Comment from rgking
Very good. Wish it was longer, but I understand this was for flash fiction. I enjoyed that little twist at the end, and the story fit in well with the picture.
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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Very good. Wish it was longer, but I understand this was for flash fiction. I enjoyed that little twist at the end, and the story fit in well with the picture.
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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Thank you for review and the stars. I'm nery glad you enjoyed it.
Sandollar