Dark Shadows
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Remember..."A collection of short stories and flash fiction
17 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written story. I am assuming it is fiction. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Good luck in your contest.
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This time I would not bury the site (sight) of his face.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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This is a very well written story. I am assuming it is fiction. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Good luck in your contest.
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This time I would not bury the site (sight) of his face.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you for catching that! The sad thing is that I actually saw it earlier, intended to fix it, then conveniently forgot :-) Ah well... it happens! I thank you for taking the time to read through and comment on my story. After a year away, I was almost hesitant to write anything (figured it was like riding a bike... you never forget but you just might hit the ground a couple of time before you jog the memory loose! LOL)as I wasn't sure what would make its way out. I was pleasently surprised when the story wrote itself!
Thanks again and I look forward to hearing from you again!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I don't recall reading anything from you that was not a poem. I really like this one, although the subject matter you worked on is reprehensible. I can imagine how horrible life would be for this narrator. kudos
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I don't recall reading anything from you that was not a poem. I really like this one, although the subject matter you worked on is reprehensible. I can imagine how horrible life would be for this narrator. kudos
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I actually enjoy writing stories much more than poetry - somehow though, it appears poetry makes its voice heard more often! This is a reprehensible subject matter and I hope that I was really able to capture the struggle my character would have endured. I enjoyed writing this and I am glad that you were able to enjoy it as well. I look forward to seeing your thoughts on some of my other work!
Comment from Tenobia
Hi there. I must say that this was not at all what I expected when I first started to read. Sure, you started out with an awesome hook, but somewhere around the middle you laid a whopper on me. I suppose I should have seen it coming... I mean the man did give away clues about his guilt, but you don't really see them until you are dashed upside the head with revelation! I can honestly say this is a great piece of fiction. You managed to shove so much into it! I imagine that if you wanted to, this little story could expand into a truly remarkable book.
I wish you luck in the contest, but I got to tell you... I don't think you have anything to worry about!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Hi there. I must say that this was not at all what I expected when I first started to read. Sure, you started out with an awesome hook, but somewhere around the middle you laid a whopper on me. I suppose I should have seen it coming... I mean the man did give away clues about his guilt, but you don't really see them until you are dashed upside the head with revelation! I can honestly say this is a great piece of fiction. You managed to shove so much into it! I imagine that if you wanted to, this little story could expand into a truly remarkable book.
I wish you luck in the contest, but I got to tell you... I don't think you have anything to worry about!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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WOW! Thank you so much for this outstanding review! I hope you're right... I have my fingers crossed LOL.
Thank you for stopping by to give my story a read. I'm glad you enjoyed it and I look forward to seeing you around FS.
Comment from Sacred Heart
Wow! I wish I had six stars to give to you for this one. The story-line is deeply intese with outstanding attention to detail that echoes in your heart as your reading. I can honestly say I was captivated line per line. I can't imagine going through something like that in life and it's understandable how memories and realism of life can make one reach their breaking point. I liked the ending for it put a closure. He got his in the end. Kudos for writing such a outstanding story. Best of luck in the contest!! I'll be sending good thoughts your way. Keep up your writing for I see much talent here! Take care sweet, Patty
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Wow! I wish I had six stars to give to you for this one. The story-line is deeply intese with outstanding attention to detail that echoes in your heart as your reading. I can honestly say I was captivated line per line. I can't imagine going through something like that in life and it's understandable how memories and realism of life can make one reach their breaking point. I liked the ending for it put a closure. He got his in the end. Kudos for writing such a outstanding story. Best of luck in the contest!! I'll be sending good thoughts your way. Keep up your writing for I see much talent here! Take care sweet, Patty
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you again for stopping by! I am honored that you took the time to read through my contest entry :-) even more so that you found it to be such a wonderful read! Thanks for the luck and keep sending those good thoughts my way :-P
Comment from RebelRose
What an interesting and mysterious story. It had me on the edge of my seat. Very well written and such a good contest entry.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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What an interesting and mysterious story. It had me on the edge of my seat. Very well written and such a good contest entry.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you for such a great review! I'm glad you enjoyed the story and it was able to put you on the edge of your seat :-P
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
Awesome thriller and great suspense along with a skillful expression are trademark of this entry. The length was an issue, but as long as the interest of the reader is there it does not matter.
I loved it all the way
K
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Awesome thriller and great suspense along with a skillful expression are trademark of this entry. The length was an issue, but as long as the interest of the reader is there it does not matter.
I loved it all the way
K
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Good morning Kashif! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my story :-) I am so glad that you enjoyed it. I was truly astonished at how the story unfolded as I saw something else entirely when I began to write it. This story decided where it would go and simply took me along for the ride!
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Good plot development. Held my interest all the way through. A whole book in one little story.
Spotted only one spag.
and I found that I could breath. - breathe
Roberta
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Good plot development. Held my interest all the way through. A whole book in one little story.
Spotted only one spag.
and I found that I could breath. - breathe
Roberta
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Hi! Thanks so much for catching that! I have made the correct. I'm glad that you enjoyed the story. After being away so long it was a joy to watch as the story told itself :-)