Disgusting American Male
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Comment from Fish
I would love to give this four stars... but
it's simply impossible. I can see myself
clicking the four-star button, yet I would
have to have a reason... and I don't have one
because I found this funny and entertaining,
in an idiotic country music sort of way.
And I hate country music.
I do, however, feel that this would help
the country music industry to die, were
this made into a popular song. LOL
Nice one! Fish
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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I would love to give this four stars... but
it's simply impossible. I can see myself
clicking the four-star button, yet I would
have to have a reason... and I don't have one
because I found this funny and entertaining,
in an idiotic country music sort of way.
And I hate country music.
I do, however, feel that this would help
the country music industry to die, were
this made into a popular song. LOL
Nice one! Fish
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Well amen for the lopsided applause, "cause I ain't picky! (lol) Thanks Fish, if I can make a nickel out of it, I'm ready!
Curt
Comment from Alison Williams
Oh geesh, I'm laughing so hard at this. It's fabulous. Where on earth did you get the inspiration?
Love the refrains, and the descriptions had giggling. Particularly this one.
I like my girls cock-eyed with sweaty arm pits
droopin' boobs draggin' the floor
One thing I picked up with the line, "that smells like a menthol and dirt. (whew!)" - I wonder if you could drop the 'a'? The actual smell is menthol so to me it makes more sense to write is a sense rather than a lollie drop.
I know this could be a ditty or song lyrics, what sort of tune would you set it to?
Excellent stuff.
Cheers, Alison
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Oh geesh, I'm laughing so hard at this. It's fabulous. Where on earth did you get the inspiration?
Love the refrains, and the descriptions had giggling. Particularly this one.
I like my girls cock-eyed with sweaty arm pits
droopin' boobs draggin' the floor
One thing I picked up with the line, "that smells like a menthol and dirt. (whew!)" - I wonder if you could drop the 'a'? The actual smell is menthol so to me it makes more sense to write is a sense rather than a lollie drop.
I know this could be a ditty or song lyrics, what sort of tune would you set it to?
Excellent stuff.
Cheers, Alison
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thanks Alison!
I had another say the same thing, and it must be a dialect difference in slang, because I meant it to sound like a menthol cigarette, alluding to the previous line.
I do have music chorded for this in 3/4 time in a G_C_D_C_G type pattern, and I hope to record it soon!
thanks again!
Curt
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Ahh, I didn't even think of cigarette, but then I've never smoked so not familiar wit the brand. It makes sense now. Would love to hear it once it's recorded. Perhaps you could upload it as an audio file to the poem when it's done?
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I certainly will!
Thanks!
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Oh and for your info, just out of interest the reason I thought menthol lolly drop is that you can get them in the shop here for coughs and colds, but also for bad breath or cigarette breath. heheh. Either way, both references work. :)
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We do too, but we call them either breath mints or cough drops, depending!
Comment from Sacred Heart
Hi Curt,LoL! Hansom guys like these are hard to find... Where's my kleenex, oh my goodness! I sure would love to see the audience reaction to this one. I know to come if I get the blues and need a good laugh! If I could I'd give you six stars on this one but I'm all out of them, darn.
Thanks for the laugh! Take care, Love Light Sacred Heart
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Hi Curt,LoL! Hansom guys like these are hard to find... Where's my kleenex, oh my goodness! I sure would love to see the audience reaction to this one. I know to come if I get the blues and need a good laugh! If I could I'd give you six stars on this one but I'm all out of them, darn.
Thanks for the laugh! Take care, Love Light Sacred Heart
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thank you!
I have a penchant for the warped, I know!
But I'm glad you do too!
Curt
Comment from Mariea
I'm still laughing - visualising this grotty character. The photo does it justice.
good flow, structure is well put together and developed.
Have a great day. Regards Mia
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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I'm still laughing - visualising this grotty character. The photo does it justice.
good flow, structure is well put together and developed.
Have a great day. Regards Mia
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thanks Mia!
I'm glad you got a laugh from this piece!
Curt
Comment from winsome
I think this is by far one of the funniest poems I have ever read. It certainly deserves six stars and I wish there were more. I think the man in the picture lives around the corner from me. lol
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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I think this is by far one of the funniest poems I have ever read. It certainly deserves six stars and I wish there were more. I think the man in the picture lives around the corner from me. lol
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Whatever you do, do not let him sit next to you! (lol)
I really apreciate the high R&R my friend, and I am honored as well by your comments!
Curt
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Curt,
You are such a character!
This is great.
The image is perfect for it.
I like the chorus.
It made me laugh.
Great job.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Curt,
You are such a character!
This is great.
The image is perfect for it.
I like the chorus.
It made me laugh.
Great job.
Kathryn
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thanks Kathryn!
I'm glad you got a laugh, as it was intended!
Curt
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You're welcome Curt,
Kathryn
Comment from missy98writer
Curt Mongold,
The photo says a thousand words and so does your awesomely amusing poem. I could hear this sung to a Country beat by a Willy Nelson type singer. The title drew me to your excellent poem "Disgusting American Male." Great rhyme and cadence. The descriptive scheme is brilliant. The lines I found funny:
I like my girls cock-eyed with sweaty arm pits
droopin' boobs draggin' the floor
as long as she's goofy or skinny (or fat!)
the last dance is my chance to score!
Great metaphor with 'aquarium glass.' Thinks for making me laugh like crazy.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Curt Mongold,
The photo says a thousand words and so does your awesomely amusing poem. I could hear this sung to a Country beat by a Willy Nelson type singer. The title drew me to your excellent poem "Disgusting American Male." Great rhyme and cadence. The descriptive scheme is brilliant. The lines I found funny:
I like my girls cock-eyed with sweaty arm pits
droopin' boobs draggin' the floor
as long as she's goofy or skinny (or fat!)
the last dance is my chance to score!
Great metaphor with 'aquarium glass.' Thinks for making me laugh like crazy.
Melissa.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thank you Melissa,
Has to be the best news I heard all day! I'm glad you could share in my silliness and more so that you got a laugh.
Curt
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Curt,
What a fun read this was! The picture alone, is a scream and your words fit it perfectly. I like the refrain and the rhyming. Your sense of humor is shining in every line. Perfect! Your, chainy
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Hi Curt,
What a fun read this was! The picture alone, is a scream and your words fit it perfectly. I like the refrain and the rhyming. Your sense of humor is shining in every line. Perfect! Your, chainy
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thanks Chainy!
Just my way of lightening the mood!
Glad you got a laugh from this chainy, I still chuckle a little myself!
Curt
Comment from JeffreyStone
And I enjoyed it immensely. I don't mind you writing song lyrics about me, but why did you have to show my picture? Thank God for people with a sense of humor. Thank you for sharing. JeffreyStone
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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And I enjoyed it immensely. I don't mind you writing song lyrics about me, but why did you have to show my picture? Thank God for people with a sense of humor. Thank you for sharing. JeffreyStone
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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And thank God for those who appreciate warped humor! (lol)
I didn't tell annyone it was you, but now you've gone and let the cat out of the bag. Well, you can stil use the bag, come closing time!
Thanks again my friend,
Curt
Comment from adewpearl
Reminds me of that great 50's song - Get an Ugly Girl to Marry You :-)
hunchbacks with gargoyle toes - you're too funny, Curt - perhaps I should grow a few nosehairs so I can hook this guy! :-) Great cadence, rhyme, vivid descriptive detail and guffaw-inducing humor :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Reminds me of that great 50's song - Get an Ugly Girl to Marry You :-)
hunchbacks with gargoyle toes - you're too funny, Curt - perhaps I should grow a few nosehairs so I can hook this guy! :-) Great cadence, rhyme, vivid descriptive detail and guffaw-inducing humor :-) Brooke
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thanks Brooke!
I hoped you would still enjoy my more wry side! I am writing a sequel for the ladies, as I was challenged by our Mrs. M.S. to present an equal and opposing view. Not as easy, I tell ya!
Thanks again Brooke!
Curt