The kid
Do not challenge him19 total reviews
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
Wow- I've reviewed a few before entries of this particular contest but yours is best up till now. The ending is the most exciting and over a nice one to read and review.
bets of luck
K
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Wow- I've reviewed a few before entries of this particular contest but yours is best up till now. The ending is the most exciting and over a nice one to read and review.
bets of luck
K
Comment Written 16-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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thanks K, it's up for voting:)
Adina
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Sure
K
Comment from Summer Falls
Funny little story, mystery writer! I laughed out loud. You met the requirements well. Good luck in the contest!
It really is hard to write a story and not use that letter S, isn't it?
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Funny little story, mystery writer! I laughed out loud. You met the requirements well. Good luck in the contest!
It really is hard to write a story and not use that letter S, isn't it?
Comment Written 16-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Thanks a lot, the story is up for voting;)
Comment from adewpearl
What a clever story - the kid had his arrogance sized up well in guessing exactly what he would be thinking! And not one S in your tale - good entry :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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What a clever story - the kid had his arrogance sized up well in guessing exactly what he would be thinking! And not one S in your tale - good entry :-) Brooke
Comment Written 16-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Thanks Broooke, it is up for voting ;)
Comment from warbler
This is short and sweet. It has all of the elements of a good tiny story. All of the rules of the contest were met.
I enjoyed reading it. Good luck!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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This is short and sweet. It has all of the elements of a good tiny story. All of the rules of the contest were met.
I enjoyed reading it. Good luck!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Thankswae
Thank q
thanks, wartbler,it is up for votng;)
Comment from Chrissy455
I liked the idea of your writing but after reading it several times I realised I was confused as to who made the bet, who took out the pen and paper and got fooled. It seems to me that the man placed the bet and was supposed to dupe the child but the man ended up being fooled. Did you mean for this to happen or did I read it wrong, each time. I'd love to know. Thanks, Chris
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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I liked the idea of your writing but after reading it several times I realised I was confused as to who made the bet, who took out the pen and paper and got fooled. It seems to me that the man placed the bet and was supposed to dupe the child but the man ended up being fooled. Did you mean for this to happen or did I read it wrong, each time. I'd love to know. Thanks, Chris
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Thanks for yor time Chris, sorry I confused you
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Can you help me understand as I want to?
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You got the gist of it Chris from the start this is exactly whar I had in mind; man tries to trick the kid, kid out smarts him. I had only 50 words to work with and no letter s .... I think it turned out ok. But of course, I am subjective
Adina
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Ok, then it worked well. Sorry I can't up the star rating.
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No worries, I son' go entirely by the rating since it is very. Relative
Comment from Sandollar
This was very cute. You wrote a humorous story in under 50 words with no "s" I can see. You need a space between
"Prove it, "the. The quotes are too close to the word "the."
Best of luck in the contest. Yours is the second story that didn't have a photo. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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This was very cute. You wrote a humorous story in under 50 words with no "s" I can see. You need a space between
"Prove it, "the. The quotes are too close to the word "the."
Best of luck in the contest. Yours is the second story that didn't have a photo. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Thank you very much
Comment from Kaiyah
hahaha lol very amusing and humorous indeed. lovely piece of writing.
very different and unique to what i would have expected for a contest entry
well done indeed! and best of luck :)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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hahaha lol very amusing and humorous indeed. lovely piece of writing.
very different and unique to what i would have expected for a contest entry
well done indeed! and best of luck :)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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thanks so much....we'll see when the voting kicks in :)
Adina
Comment from patmedium
This is a marvellous wee tale. Thankyou for sharing it with us here. (Now, how much do I have to waffle to be let out of here) Pat
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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This is a marvellous wee tale. Thankyou for sharing it with us here. (Now, how much do I have to waffle to be let out of here) Pat
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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thanks Pat, stick around, pull a chair LOL Adina
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WELL... I mean I didn't bother to read it aloud, cos it wasn't poetry. There was no scenery, so I couldn't say whether it was clear or not. There was certainly no room whatsoever for emotions, so I couldn't discuss them, either! What's a woman to do?
LOL! Patxxx
Comment from riley289
Keeps to the rules of the contest. Can't see any revisions needed, I like the savvy street-wise kid his character is expressed well in these few lines of prose. The whole story feels a bit like a well told joke and I like that a lot.
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Keeps to the rules of the contest. Can't see any revisions needed, I like the savvy street-wise kid his character is expressed well in these few lines of prose. The whole story feels a bit like a well told joke and I like that a lot.
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Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thanks a lot :)
Adina
