Stories and Poems for the Holidays
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Valentine Day Fiasco"Holiday musings.
21 total reviews
Comment from Rama Rao
Excellent.
The story made good reading.
It was a good trade off. An old husband for a new car. She can't complain. LOL. Why was it put in as non-fiction? It was a good story although a realstory.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Excellent.
The story made good reading.
It was a good trade off. An old husband for a new car. She can't complain. LOL. Why was it put in as non-fiction? It was a good story although a realstory.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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It was non fiction because it really happened to my friend. Thank you for reading and for the nice review.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
Beth
How horrible or maybe not! You've done a great job of telling your friends story and holding the reader's attention. she can start over with everything new...
Carol
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Beth
How horrible or maybe not! You've done a great job of telling your friends story and holding the reader's attention. she can start over with everything new...
Carol
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Thank you Carol, I hope she likes the way I told her story. I can imagine how she must have felt. But alls well that ends well.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from tati
Delightful to read Valentine Day fiasco story, Beth. At least, her Valentine Day wasn't boring, and everything turned out well in the end. Well written. Thank you for sharing. (tati, Febr. 14, 2010)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Delightful to read Valentine Day fiasco story, Beth. At least, her Valentine Day wasn't boring, and everything turned out well in the end. Well written. Thank you for sharing. (tati, Febr. 14, 2010)
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Tati, Thank you so much for taking the time to review this. I appreciate your nice comments.
Beth
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Hi, Beth. Have a happy Valentine day. With love,
tati
Comment from gypsycaravan
The sequence of events seems almost too bizarre to be true. You did a great job telling the story. I like the part about the red convertible at the end. Sounds like she is moving on. Ha.
A few minor corrections:
1. grabbed for hand break--would read better with "the" between "for" and "hand" --Also, correct spelling as you use it is "brake"
2. it reaches fence--would read better with "the" between "reaches" and "fence"
3. had good laugh--would read better with "a" between "had" and "good"
Good job. Thankds for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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The sequence of events seems almost too bizarre to be true. You did a great job telling the story. I like the part about the red convertible at the end. Sounds like she is moving on. Ha.
A few minor corrections:
1. grabbed for hand break--would read better with "the" between "for" and "hand" --Also, correct spelling as you use it is "brake"
2. it reaches fence--would read better with "the" between "reaches" and "fence"
3. had good laugh--would read better with "a" between "had" and "good"
Good job. Thankds for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for the review. Truth is sometimes stranger than fiction. That is why I wanted people to know that it did happen. I really appreciate you catching the spags.
Beth
Comment from patmedium
All's well that ends well? There's so much goes on in real life it just goes to prove that we don't really need to invent our stories. I'm waffling. It's half past two in the morning. I think I'd better go to bed. Goodnight. Pat.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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All's well that ends well? There's so much goes on in real life it just goes to prove that we don't really need to invent our stories. I'm waffling. It's half past two in the morning. I think I'd better go to bed. Goodnight. Pat.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Thank you pat, It is true that some things are just to crazy to make up. I like the real life stories best. I really appreciate the review and comment.
Goodnight to you.
Beth
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I had a good sleep. Back to this now. Pat.
Comment from Sasha
While I feel what happened to you friend is truly tragic I must admit I found myself chuckling on how she spent Valentine's Day. Definitely one she will never forget. Glad she likes her new car. I am also pleased you picked my painting to illustrate this delightful story.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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While I feel what happened to you friend is truly tragic I must admit I found myself chuckling on how she spent Valentine's Day. Definitely one she will never forget. Glad she likes her new car. I am also pleased you picked my painting to illustrate this delightful story.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for the review. I'm glad you found it funny. I did as well when she told me the story. I love your picture. I think you and angelheart are the best artist on FanArt. I've used you work several time. I love your writing as well.
Beth
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Rofl. I have so enjoyed this story, Beth! I gave you a six for content alone! It seems not only are you and your family 'accident prone' but your friends too! I'm a dreadful person to laugh so at another's misfortunes but I couldn't help it. wonderful tale, well told.
The main spag I noticed was that (over here in UK anyway) 'break' means to trash/spoil something and 'brake' refers to the device for stopping things. Don't know if it's the same over there.
made my Valentines Day, this has! LOL
Hugs
Kat
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Rofl. I have so enjoyed this story, Beth! I gave you a six for content alone! It seems not only are you and your family 'accident prone' but your friends too! I'm a dreadful person to laugh so at another's misfortunes but I couldn't help it. wonderful tale, well told.
The main spag I noticed was that (over here in UK anyway) 'break' means to trash/spoil something and 'brake' refers to the device for stopping things. Don't know if it's the same over there.
made my Valentines Day, this has! LOL
Hugs
Kat
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for you wonderful review and the precious six. I caught that right after I posted it and it thought I had it changes. Sometimes switching back and forth to get those editors to work does a number on you. I thought I changed a bunch of things. I'd better reread it because I definitely remember changing brake.
Beth
Comment from Anna Writes
This made me smile. You could expand this into a longer story.You would have to add more to the story and stay so close to what your friend said.
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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This made me smile. You could expand this into a longer story.You would have to add more to the story and stay so close to what your friend said.
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the review and the suggestions. I may expand it.
Beth
Comment from Thesis
Well, at least her Valentines Day wasn't boring...and she wanted a new car anyway, lol.
Sounds like she made out well with the generous Insurance Adjuster. - Thesis
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Well, at least her Valentines Day wasn't boring...and she wanted a new car anyway, lol.
Sounds like she made out well with the generous Insurance Adjuster. - Thesis
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the review and comments. Maybe the Insurance Adjuster was willing to be generous because she provided his laugh of the day.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from Frank Fathom
This is a wonderful story. It seems that everything turned out well in the end. This was well written and though I believe surprise was the intent I knew before hand what was going to happen. Still I enjoyed reading this tale. FF
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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This is a wonderful story. It seems that everything turned out well in the end. This was well written and though I believe surprise was the intent I knew before hand what was going to happen. Still I enjoyed reading this tale. FF
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comment even if I didn't surprise you.
Cheers,
Beth