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Comment from Alison Williams
"I can do it. You'll see." The gauntlet dropped. - Loved this line. Oh the cheeky, craft little bugger! hehe at the hidden peas.
I loved this little short tale. Well done.
Alison :)
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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"I can do it. You'll see." The gauntlet dropped. - Loved this line. Oh the cheeky, craft little bugger! hehe at the hidden peas.
I loved this little short tale. Well done.
Alison :)
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Alison
Yes, she found away around it and no one caught on until after they ate the ice cream..Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My boys used to sneak their vegetables to the dog. I've always had labradors, they will eat almost anything. I smiled throughout your short story. Queen of the Short Stories.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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My boys used to sneak their vegetables to the dog. I've always had labradors, they will eat almost anything. I smiled throughout your short story. Queen of the Short Stories.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Barbara
I fed my liver to my Pekingese..she lived for 18 years....thanks for the wonderful review..Carol
Comment from c_lucas
When all else fails, cheat. This is a very well written poem with a unique humorous side to it. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a smooth read.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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When all else fails, cheat. This is a very well written poem with a unique humorous side to it. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a smooth read.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Charlie
At four years old, she probably didn't know it was cheating...The witch of an instructor use to make her sit inside every lunch hour because she wouldn't eat vegetables...Guess she took after her mother! Smiles, Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from melyuki
Oh yeah.. and how cute. I reckon there are lots of us who could relate to the story in one way or another. Typical of a kid to stuff the unwanted bits inside the table ledge. I used to give it to my dog under the table . No wonder he was my best friend.. great story sis, so light hearted and fun.. See, if you had eaten your greens then Wendy would have too. good one sis, put a smile of the ol dial. hugs from Melxxx
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Oh yeah.. and how cute. I reckon there are lots of us who could relate to the story in one way or another. Typical of a kid to stuff the unwanted bits inside the table ledge. I used to give it to my dog under the table . No wonder he was my best friend.. great story sis, so light hearted and fun.. See, if you had eaten your greens then Wendy would have too. good one sis, put a smile of the ol dial. hugs from Melxxx
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Sis
Yuck! As green as I get is salad or broccoli ...no greener than that or it looks like mold...something I am highly allergic to..HAHA Thanks for the laugh, silly sis...Carol
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but what about grapes.....yummmmmmmm
Comment from fictionwriter
What a clever little girl. this story made me hungry for green beans because I love them. Now see what you did, I'm going to have to go get some. Great job.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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What a clever little girl. this story made me hungry for green beans because I love them. Now see what you did, I'm going to have to go get some. Great job.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Joy
I had to keep a straight face while that teacher explained to me why it was not proper for Wendy to hide her green beans...I think I laughed all the way home. Smiles, Carol
Comment from adewpearl
My new stepmother cooked several things beyond my small repertoire of likes - I had all sorts of tricks like this one - you brought back a flood of memories of my food-hiding and disposing techniques. LOL What a cute story :-) Brooke
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My new stepmother cooked several things beyond my small repertoire of likes - I had all sorts of tricks like this one - you brought back a flood of memories of my food-hiding and disposing techniques. LOL What a cute story :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Brooke
My darling daughter does not eat green beans to this day...I had to keep a straight face while the teach explained to me how wrong it was for Wendy to do such a thing...I believe I laughed all the way home. smiles, Carol
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The list of foods my 30 year old Eric will not eat to this day has to be one of the longest lists ever - I bet he makes Wendy look like a great eater. And the child hardly ever gets sick other than the occasional cold. LOL
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ....
Not only am I smiling at your surprise ending to this short story but also remembering something very similar happening with my brother - five years younger than me.
There is just one sentence in which I suggest two small changes ...
* You have - Ice cream will be served Friday if everyone ... this should be - Ice Cream will be served on Friday if everyone ....
Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed it.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
LATER : I have just noticed that you have titled this
Yummy Grean Beans ... which should be - Green Beans !!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Hullo Carol ....
Not only am I smiling at your surprise ending to this short story but also remembering something very similar happening with my brother - five years younger than me.
There is just one sentence in which I suggest two small changes ...
* You have - Ice cream will be served Friday if everyone ... this should be - Ice Cream will be served on Friday if everyone ....
Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed it.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
LATER : I have just noticed that you have titled this
Yummy Grean Beans ... which should be - Green Beans !!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Nanette
Thank you for the kind review and for enjoying the story. thanks for catching the error as well. smiles, Carol
Comment from BJean
She just couldn't let down her friends!!! A very humorous story of something that sounds just like a child could do:) I got a laugh along with the finders. Good story, Carol. Love, Jean
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She just couldn't let down her friends!!! A very humorous story of something that sounds just like a child could do:) I got a laugh along with the finders. Good story, Carol. Love, Jean
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Jean
She still doesn't eat green beans and she's 39 years old. Thanks for the wonderful review...smiles, Carol
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You have plenty of life experiences to draw from, Huh:) Hugs, Jean
Comment from Connie P
Yes this was very cute. It's just like a group of kids, one had the idea and the rest followed suit. I enjoy reading lighthearted pieces like this from time to time.
Blessings,
Connie
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Yes this was very cute. It's just like a group of kids, one had the idea and the rest followed suit. I enjoy reading lighthearted pieces like this from time to time.
Blessings,
Connie
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Connie,
Thanks so much for reading and enjoying the story. Smiles, Carol
Comment from --Turtle.
Very cute. I loved the ingenuity of little Wendy. Ha. And I liked the objective quick feel too. Fun and cute.
Only suggestion I thought...
paragraph structure to separate the teachers challenge from the response
From
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" -- if everyone eats their vegetables this week." The room erupted again.
"Oh no" and "Yuck" replaced their excitement.
To
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" -- if everyone eats their vegetables this week."
The room erupted again. "Oh no" and "Yuck" replaced their excitement.
*********************************************8
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Very cute. I loved the ingenuity of little Wendy. Ha. And I liked the objective quick feel too. Fun and cute.
Only suggestion I thought...
paragraph structure to separate the teachers challenge from the response
From
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" -- if everyone eats their vegetables this week." The room erupted again.
"Oh no" and "Yuck" replaced their excitement.
To
*********************************************8
" -- if everyone eats their vegetables this week."
The room erupted again. "Oh no" and "Yuck" replaced their excitement.
*********************************************8
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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turtle
Your are right...I thought it was that way but I fixed it already. Thanks...Carol