Comment from Jordan Rose

Excellent

Nicely done. Great job following the requirements of the cinquain. Good imagery. My grandparents attic was always so interesting to me, so many memories with all the 'stuff'. Good luck with the contest. Jordan

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009

Thanks, Jordan Rose, for taking the time to read and reviewing my poem. Glad you liked it and got the point I was trying to put across.

Have a Merry Christmas - sherry

Comment from Jnetgame

Excellent

This is a nice poem. It certainly leaves one with a sense of sadness. It's funny how treasured things are put away in a closet and forgotten about. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009

Thanks, Jnetgame, for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. You got the feel I was trying for. Glad you liked it.

Have a Merry Christmas - sherry

Comment from wheelswrites

Excellent

This has a shadow of such sadness. I hope it is only because the child has grown up. As a cinquain it is well done and lovely. To say so much in a few words is an art indeed.

Sally

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009

Sally, thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Yes, it is a commentary on losing the dreams one had as a child, not death or anything like that.

Have a Merry Christmas - sherry

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your nostalgia in the cinquain form. You honored the syllable count and turn at the end well. The picture you chose was quite synergistic as well. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009

Thanks, Joan E, for taking the time to read and review on my poem. Glad you liked it.

Have a Merry Christmas - sherry

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is lovely and deeply moving. Especially meaningful to me as I just finished going through old boxes of things from my childhood. This is an excellent entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.

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 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2009

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my work.

Glad you enjoyed it - sherry