Poems of Love and Spirit
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Beyond the Call of Duty"This book is about love, God's Love most of all.
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Comment from joemass
G'day sarahice
You have a nice little poem here but you must pay a bit more attention to your spelling or you will begin to lose your audience. You have at least five spelling or typing mistakes in this short piece alone.
However, as I say, it's a pleasant poem and deserves to be brought up to as good a standard as possible. Back to the dictionary!
Good luck!
Joemass
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009
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G'day sarahice
You have a nice little poem here but you must pay a bit more attention to your spelling or you will begin to lose your audience. You have at least five spelling or typing mistakes in this short piece alone.
However, as I say, it's a pleasant poem and deserves to be brought up to as good a standard as possible. Back to the dictionary!
Good luck!
Joemass
Comment Written 20-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your hones review, it was really helpful. With best regards, Sarah
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Thank you for your honest and very helpful advice. It is very helpful. Merry Christmas, Sarah
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Thank you for your kind review. It is very helpful. Merry Christmas, Sarah
Comment from Connie P
I'd love to give this a five star rating, but you have misspelled great throughout the poem. You used "grate". Also used "newer" when I feel you meant never. Check line two, I think you have an "a" slipped in there where it shouldn't be.
This poem has a lot of potential. It is worth some revision.
Blessings,
Connie P
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009
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I'd love to give this a five star rating, but you have misspelled great throughout the poem. You used "grate". Also used "newer" when I feel you meant never. Check line two, I think you have an "a" slipped in there where it shouldn't be.
This poem has a lot of potential. It is worth some revision.
Blessings,
Connie P
Comment Written 20-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your honest and detailed review. It is very helpful and needed. With best regards, Sarah
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Your welcome Sarah, when I write a review I do my best to handle it the way I would like to be reviewed. We all need constructive input from time to time.
Merry Christmas,
Connie
Comment from Trybuck
The other reviewers made this one easy, for they've already pointed out the mistakes I saw and I'm sure you will correct them. Good job with the poem, Buck
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009
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The other reviewers made this one easy, for they've already pointed out the mistakes I saw and I'm sure you will correct them. Good job with the poem, Buck
Comment Written 20-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your encouraging words about my poem. Well, errors are often allowed for the greater good in the future. Merry Christmas, Sarah
Comment from Charlene0513
To sarahice,
A poem that stresses the importantance of God's beauty.
Of Mother Nature and what flourishes under the glowing sun.
A few errors were:
-in lines 1,3,8 the word "grate" should be spelt "great".
......the ground they share-missed the "y"
Charlene
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009
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To sarahice,
A poem that stresses the importantance of God's beauty.
Of Mother Nature and what flourishes under the glowing sun.
A few errors were:
-in lines 1,3,8 the word "grate" should be spelt "great".
......the ground they share-missed the "y"
Charlene
Comment Written 20-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to correct my mistakes. It is really helpful, With best regards, Sarah
Comment from jlivory
sarahic,
I read in your bio that your looking to extend your skills. This piece written here is nice, but may I suggest you make some adjustments, for example:
"I newer found such sweet grate love" - Did you mean to say newer or did you mean never? If it is newer, I apologize. Aslo did you mean to say "grate" or great, again I apologize if you meant the word "grate" which is also used in line 3.
Don't be discouraged by my 4 star rating. You says you wanted to improve, it starts here my friend. Good luck and keep writing, I'll be looking for great things to come from you.
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009
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sarahic,
I read in your bio that your looking to extend your skills. This piece written here is nice, but may I suggest you make some adjustments, for example:
"I newer found such sweet grate love" - Did you mean to say newer or did you mean never? If it is newer, I apologize. Aslo did you mean to say "grate" or great, again I apologize if you meant the word "grate" which is also used in line 3.
Don't be discouraged by my 4 star rating. You says you wanted to improve, it starts here my friend. Good luck and keep writing, I'll be looking for great things to come from you.
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Comment Written 20-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your good advise, appreciate it.
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Thank you for your good advise, appreciate it.
Comment from Realist101
Hi Miss Sara! THis is beautiful...I just found a couple spellings..."grate" should be "great", and "fulfil" should be "fulfill", and then "grater", should be "greater", but you have done a wonderful job with this, keep it up!! Susan
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009
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Hi Miss Sara! THis is beautiful...I just found a couple spellings..."grate" should be "great", and "fulfil" should be "fulfill", and then "grater", should be "greater", but you have done a wonderful job with this, keep it up!! Susan
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Comment Written 20-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009
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Thank you for pointing this out to me. Appreciate to.
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Thank you for your encouraging review. It is very helpful.