Comment from HalfHoff

Excellent

I thought haiku was 5-7-5, but what do I know! This is perfect - very visual images, even though it gave me a chill ... not a big fan of the cold - hee? Great write! Lea Ann

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009

Lea Ann

A regular haiku is 5/7/5/ but the writing prompt asked for 3/5/3 ... Unfortunately, I had two writing prompts already and it wouldn't allow this one...so now I must revamp the haiku. Anyhonw, I am glad that you enjoyed it. Carol

Comment from skye

Excellent

Awesome artwork, complimenting your beautiful haiku.
I love the images of all the cold, the frozen tears, the icy breath.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009

Skye

Thanks for the wonderful comments. I appreciate it very much. CArol

Comment from redglasses

Excellent

Okay, I know I have a predliction for your writing, but so help mew, this one's absolutely top-notch. This is a winner - whether or not it wins the contest :-)

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009

redglasses

I sure do like you hanging around...You build my morale up so well. Thanks for the wonderful comments. Smiles to you, Carol

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello Begin Again a very vivid hakiu and a very powerful satori line-
winter's angry wrath.
Love the picture

Good luck
See you later.
Gert

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009

Gert

Thanks so much for all the kind words. I appreciate it very much. Carol

Comment from ArtGal

Excellent

I love this Haiku! You said it all here describing winter. So well done, and I love its icy breath and frozen tears, enjoyed the picture you painted. I'm afraid it's coming here next week so will try to stay warm in front of the fireplace, lol.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009

Artgal

It is threatening to arrive here and I want it to go away. I hate the winter cold. Thanks for the review. Carol

Comment from Juliette Chamberlain

Excellent

I like this personification of winter with its icy breath and frozen tears.
The picture you have chosen is a perfect accompanyment to your words.


Juliette

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009

Juliette

Thanks so much for the wonderful review. I appreciate your comments. CArol

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Carol...

icy breath
winter's angry wrath
frozen tears

These are such lovely words and I have to admit I wish I had thought of them first! Excellent....good luck in the contest....blessings....chey

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009

Chey

I blew it..I am not eligible for today's prompt so I entered the regular haiku without thinking...the prompt is 3/5/3 and the regular is 5/7/5/ I believe...now I guess I have to revamp...Thanks for the encouraging words...Carol

Comment from Colette

Excellent

Carol,

This is so colddddddd and so perfect,
I should practice these. You however
have done a perfect job on this, I need
a hot drink LOL

Colette

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009

Colette

Thank you so much for the smiles and the encouragement. I certainly appreciate both. Smiles, Carol

Comment from flygirl254

Excellent

This is a very nice haiku for the prompt. Literally, I read it, read the phrase, "frozen tears", and said aloud, "Hmm, interesting." I like your descriptive words. You did a nice job using them to capture winter's cold side. Good work and good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009

flygirl

Thanks so much for the wonderful review. I truly appreciate your kind words. Smiles to you, Carol

Comment from TheBritsWife

Excellent

Hi Carol, This haiku is fantastic. It's so full of icy imagery and your satori line "frozen tears" is wonderful. This certainly creates a very vivid moment in nature. You've done an excellent job, and I truly enjoyed experiencing this wintry scene! The picture you chose is perfect as well. So vibrant! Good luck in the contest. It's a terrific entry. - Karen ;-)

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009

Karen

Thanks for the encouragement...I messed up though. I didn't qualify for today's prompt so I put it in another contest and forgot that today's was 3/5/3 and the other one is 5/7/5/ so now I have to change the whole thing...I am losing my mind....

His icy breath stings
As winter shows itâ??s angry wrath
Trees shed frozen tears

What does that sound like...honest...I like the other one better but I am stuck,,,

Carol

reply by TheBritsWife on 21-Nov-2009

Hi Carol! Honestly, I'm not sure about the personification aspect in nature haiku. I don't think that its a good idea to use "he". We need someone like Alvin to clarify! Sorry, because the poem sounds really good, but haiku rules get tricky.