Dear Elvis Presley
A letter to an Unrequited Love24 total reviews
Comment from callingyeti
Hi there - I love the originality of your poem - the idea of writing a love letter to Elvis, and the way you have successfully incorporated many of his song titles is inspired. I was going to say for this to be even better, you could maybe have another look at the use of the word heart within the first few stanzas, the image of a heart hearing doesn't really work for me; then i thought that a giddy letter from a woman/girl to someone who she is madly in love with could easily use such glaring images, so i'm not sure. The first few stanzas are simply a little lumpy in their construction, but when you reach the stanzas with the song references, it flows much better. Nice work - J
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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Hi there - I love the originality of your poem - the idea of writing a love letter to Elvis, and the way you have successfully incorporated many of his song titles is inspired. I was going to say for this to be even better, you could maybe have another look at the use of the word heart within the first few stanzas, the image of a heart hearing doesn't really work for me; then i thought that a giddy letter from a woman/girl to someone who she is madly in love with could easily use such glaring images, so i'm not sure. The first few stanzas are simply a little lumpy in their construction, but when you reach the stanzas with the song references, it flows much better. Nice work - J
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Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your constructive comments, and now that I've changed a few things, I hope you'll find time to look at it again. I greatly appreciate your help.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a clever poem, late or not. Many of us were in love with Elvis. I like the way you included the song titles in your poem. The poem had nice rhyme and rhythm and it was fun to read.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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This is a clever poem, late or not. Many of us were in love with Elvis. I like the way you included the song titles in your poem. The poem had nice rhyme and rhythm and it was fun to read.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thanks so much Beth... I'm glad you appreciated my effort.
Comment from Fikshunlover
This is a thoroughly enjoyable poem that has a good rhyming scheme and incorporates a majority of the KING's top hits withing the body of the poem. A good selection that follows the contest rules.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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This is a thoroughly enjoyable poem that has a good rhyming scheme and incorporates a majority of the KING's top hits withing the body of the poem. A good selection that follows the contest rules.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you for taking time to comment. I appreciate your understanding of the poem... and your great review.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Miss Merri,
You picked a worthy object for your unrequired love letter. The heartthrob every girl on the planet wanted! (lol).
He was the most charming, charismatic, sweet and generous man who ever lived. "Are you lonesome tonight?" is my favorite song of all times.
Your poetic letter is very well written, I loved the pleading tone of a besotted high school girl; your great rhymes; your passion.
Good luck in the contest, it should do very well.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Miss Merri,
You picked a worthy object for your unrequired love letter. The heartthrob every girl on the planet wanted! (lol).
He was the most charming, charismatic, sweet and generous man who ever lived. "Are you lonesome tonight?" is my favorite song of all times.
Your poetic letter is very well written, I loved the pleading tone of a besotted high school girl; your great rhymes; your passion.
Good luck in the contest, it should do very well.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much yeltel. I love the comments you made about the besotted high school girl. I had much the same impression! :P
Comment from fanstoria
wonderful poem with lots of detail. You must be a fan of Elvis and love him a lot to write this.Good luck in the contest. The contest is very poppular and I appreciate this post as one of the best.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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wonderful poem with lots of detail. You must be a fan of Elvis and love him a lot to write this.Good luck in the contest. The contest is very poppular and I appreciate this post as one of the best.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much fanstoria. I have to admit, I like much of Elvis' music, but wouldn't call myself a loyal fan. I was just having fun.
Comment from RebelRose
I am a BIG Elvis fan. Need I say more? I love this poem and could have written it myself, as could many other women in the world. Good one.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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I am a BIG Elvis fan. Need I say more? I love this poem and could have written it myself, as could many other women in the world. Good one.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thanks so much for your enthusiastic review. I know Elvis had (has) many devoted fans. And he was a kind and generous person with a lovely voice.
Comment from Sally Carter
Absolutely super! A real example of how a fun poem can also comply with all the rules of rhyme and meter, which work to make it a delight to read. Very clever and unintrusive introduction of all the song titles as well. A great way to start my reviewing session. Sally
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Absolutely super! A real example of how a fun poem can also comply with all the rules of rhyme and meter, which work to make it a delight to read. Very clever and unintrusive introduction of all the song titles as well. A great way to start my reviewing session. Sally
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much Sally. I'm glad you enjoyed the fun poem and I agree... the rhyme and meter should be right on, in any rhymed poem.
Comment from fionageorge
You clever clever person. As an avid Elvis fan, always was, always will be, this reverberated around my soul. And the use of the song titles is wonderful.
The rhyme is constant and good, the whole poem flows freely and has great rhythm.
Good luck in the contest
Warmest Regards
Marijke
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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You clever clever person. As an avid Elvis fan, always was, always will be, this reverberated around my soul. And the use of the song titles is wonderful.
The rhyme is constant and good, the whole poem flows freely and has great rhythm.
Good luck in the contest
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you Marijke, for your enthusiastic comments. I'm truly pleased that you liked the poem.
Comment from Amfunny
hmmmm... don't think you really would want him now. Much as I adored him all my life, right now I would pass. LOL. I enjoyed your poem very much. Very cute and well done. Good luck. :)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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hmmmm... don't think you really would want him now. Much as I adored him all my life, right now I would pass. LOL. I enjoyed your poem very much. Very cute and well done. Good luck. :)
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Yeah, you have a point. I have a friend who is still in love with Elvis, so I tried to speak for her. Thank you for your review. I'm glad you could enjoy the joke.
Comment from Mastery
Nice heartfelt poem...you and a billion others have these feelings. I grew up in the era when Elvis first became a giant in Rock and roll. We watched our girlfriends swoon over him and needless to say we were jealous. LOL..Your poem s well done and I wish you lots of luck in the contest...Bob
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Nice heartfelt poem...you and a billion others have these feelings. I grew up in the era when Elvis first became a giant in Rock and roll. We watched our girlfriends swoon over him and needless to say we were jealous. LOL..Your poem s well done and I wish you lots of luck in the contest...Bob
Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much, Bob, for those sympathetic comments. I have to admit, it wasn't all that "heartfelt" but I'm so glad you considered it "well done.