Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello fionageorge,

I enjoyed the pureness of this poem and the love that it exudes. The poem reads and flows well. I particularly liked the following lines:

If I never see you again
It would be the end
Of a lifetime of sharing

My only suggestion is to work on the last two lines ... they did not read as smoothly as the rest of the poem - I deduct no points for that.

This poem was a pleasure to read. Regards, LateBloomer

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009

Thank you so much for your review and your advice re the last two lines.
I will have a look at this.
I also appreciate your lovely stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke

Comment from nora arjuna

Excellent

Hi marijke, you have a lovely poem here. Been reading the entries and love them all. Tough contest huh? Enjoyed yours too. Beautiful language, nice rhyme. Good luck!

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009

Thanks arjuna, and yes, there are some excellent entries in this contest. Will be hard to put my vote in.
Warmest Regards
Marijke

Comment from Belinda

Excellent

Ah, Marijke, how nice it is to be best friends with the love of your life, your soul mate. This "if" will only be an if forever. Good entry to the competition.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009

Thanks Belinda, yest it is. I am very lucky.

As soon as I saw the writing prompt, it came to me.
Warmest Regards
Marijke

Comment from Seraphim Delphinium

Excellent

You know what I truly love about this? First of all, the PICTURE!!! Secondly, the entire poem rings of true and enduring love. It is superb writing and as authetic as poetry can get. A wonderful contest entry! Smiles, Seraph~

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009

Thank you S.D., for your kind words and great review.
Also thank you for the stars. I also love that picture, and of course, if my feelings come through in this poem, then I am happy.
Warmest Regards
Marijke

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your quatrains have lovely rhyme and flow and express love for your partner of many years with such genuine appreciation and affection - there is no doubt of the depth of the love expressed here - a strong entry in this contest!! Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009

Thank you so much Brooke. I'm so lucky.
Thanks for your review and kind words and of course those lovely stars above.
Warmest Regards
Marijke

Comment from Nicnac

Excellent

What heartfelt poetry! The emotions are conveyed very well. I am moved by this poem.

Fabulous photo! It adds so much to your poem.

I have no suggestions. This poem is nicely written, sincere and gentle. Beautiful.
Nic

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009

Thank you so much. Yes it did come from the heart, and I am pleased this came through.
Thanks for the lovely review and the generous stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke

Comment from Pegcook

Excellent

This poem,"If I Never See You Again" embraces the pain of thinking about facing life alone. The friendship shared is true and deep. The photograph is beautiful. The poem rhymes where it is supposed to and reads aloud easily.

I like writing that gives me pause for reflection. Your does. The line, "Life would be nothing if I didn't have you" made me stop and think. I have to ask myself, when I think about no longer having my best friend with me, would life really be nothing? Does that mean I will give up and stop living? I will be sad, I will grieve, my life will never be the same again, but life will still be life. And, if I have to live life without my best friend, it will be richer because we were privileged to share our lives with each other. Just a few thoughts. Peace to you. Peg

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009

Thank you so much. Yes it did come from the heart, and I am pleased this came through. I agree with you, but the thought of the loss now leaves me nowhere to go, but as with all events in life we adapt.
Thanks for the lovely review and the generous stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke

reply by Pegcook on 02-Nov-2009

Good morning Marijk, You're right. The thought of such a loss does leave a person with nowhere to go. And, we do adapt. You invite people to face deep life issues. I admire your work. Peace, Peg

Comment from Shirley B

Excellent

This is a well written poem. I can tell you are very much in love. I love to read poems like this. They make me feel so good and make me smile. Good luck in the contest. This is a very strong entry. Shirley

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009

Thank you so much. Yes it came from the heart, and I am pleased this came through.
Thanks for the lovely review and the generous stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke

Comment from Ronni

Excellent

Very lovely and inspiring poem; and truly, who
would not want to stay forever with a love like that!
Truly unimaginable to ever loose someone like that...
as your poem so hear stirringly and adoringly conveys.
Great job on describing all the emotions and feelings
so precisely and profoundly. Good luck in contest.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009

Thank you so much. Yes it did come from the heart, and I am pleased this came through.
Thanks for the lovely review and the generous stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke

Comment from Nanette Mary

Excellent

Hullo Marijke ...

This is very nicely written and attractively presented and there is just one small correction to be made ...

* You have - If I should now loose you ... this should be - now lose you ...

I enjoyed reading your words and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009

Thank you so much. Yes it did come from the heart, and I am pleased this came through.
Thanks for the lovely review and the generous stars. I will correct Nanette.
Warmest Regards
Marijke