Twenty for Halloween
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Halloween Rondeau"Halloween Poems in Various Forms
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Comment from Eternal Muse
I am back from Vegas. And this was waiting for me as a better treat than the Vegas Strip! (lol). There is nothing more appeasing to this writer than a well composed, perfectly structured form; and here it is! Brooke, you are one talented delightful writer! I've been reviewing for the past hour; but, with the exception of a few pieces, it was a job; but this is a gem!
Thank you very much for yet another brilliant creation.
Fond wishes, Yelena
P.S. I just had to put my two cents in - when I do that color brown, I try pale yellow with it. Sorry, dear, I couldn't help it - you know me and presentations!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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I am back from Vegas. And this was waiting for me as a better treat than the Vegas Strip! (lol). There is nothing more appeasing to this writer than a well composed, perfectly structured form; and here it is! Brooke, you are one talented delightful writer! I've been reviewing for the past hour; but, with the exception of a few pieces, it was a job; but this is a gem!
Thank you very much for yet another brilliant creation.
Fond wishes, Yelena
P.S. I just had to put my two cents in - when I do that color brown, I try pale yellow with it. Sorry, dear, I couldn't help it - you know me and presentations!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Yelena - I'm glad you enjoyed, though I doubt it's as good as a trip to Vegas! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl,
Horror, indeed, my poet friend ...
I hear the knell of death's bell tolled
as I my rotting corpse behold.
Halloween is not a favorite of mine, however, your poem reads and flows well and has a good rhyming scheme.
Farewell to Halloween. Regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Hello adewpearl,
Horror, indeed, my poet friend ...
I hear the knell of death's bell tolled
as I my rotting corpse behold.
Halloween is not a favorite of mine, however, your poem reads and flows well and has a good rhyming scheme.
Farewell to Halloween. Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Thank you, LateBloomer :-) glad you enjoyed this horror poem, especially since you're not a Halloween person :-) Brooke
Comment from flygirl254
This poem made me smile, I'm not sure why. I think it's just the word choices you've made, including, "As I my rotting corpse behold". That's just a good turn of a Halloween phrase. Your structure on the rondeau is spot on and you've again done well in writing in this form. Great work!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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This poem made me smile, I'm not sure why. I think it's just the word choices you've made, including, "As I my rotting corpse behold". That's just a good turn of a Halloween phrase. Your structure on the rondeau is spot on and you've again done well in writing in this form. Great work!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Thank you, flygirl :-) I'm so glad this induced a smile - I too have a gallows sense of humor :) Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
i love this one as well. made me smile and giggle. :P
yeah, nothing like being told you are going to die and be very sick. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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brooke,
i love this one as well. made me smile and giggle. :P
yeah, nothing like being told you are going to die and be very sick. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Good morning, Barbara, and thank you :-) Brooke
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brooke,
good morning. hope you are doing well.
love,
barbara
Comment from eraserlynch
Not contemplative?? Nah!! I liked the way it gently started and then the story just kept unwinding. Great read enjoyed once again your style.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Not contemplative?? Nah!! I liked the way it gently started and then the story just kept unwinding. Great read enjoyed once again your style.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Thank you, my friend :-) You are most encouraging. Brooke :-)
Comment from Laidy
this flowed well with the rhyming scemem you used. i liked reading this and the picture adds creepy feeling into the words.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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this flowed well with the rhyming scemem you used. i liked reading this and the picture adds creepy feeling into the words.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much for this most thoughtful review : -) Brooke
Comment from TinyTeena
A very different style again. There seems to be a build up of fear as the poem progresses - like a crescendo in music. There seems a dream like quality to the poem, as if the person is dreaming or imagining he/she had his fortune told by numerous fortune tellers. All predict the same result - death. This consumes the person's thoughts and paralyzes him with fear, convincing him that death is the only result. No way to escape, he can even imagine seeing his own rotting corpse, and is thus a mourner at his own funeral.
A query: in verse 2, should it be "my blood runs cold" ?
The rhyming pattern helps to tie the thoughts together and adds to the crescendo affect.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009
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A very different style again. There seems to be a build up of fear as the poem progresses - like a crescendo in music. There seems a dream like quality to the poem, as if the person is dreaming or imagining he/she had his fortune told by numerous fortune tellers. All predict the same result - death. This consumes the person's thoughts and paralyzes him with fear, convincing him that death is the only result. No way to escape, he can even imagine seeing his own rotting corpse, and is thus a mourner at his own funeral.
A query: in verse 2, should it be "my blood runs cold" ?
The rhyming pattern helps to tie the thoughts together and adds to the crescendo affect.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009
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Thank you - I'm so glad you noticed the progression and the crescendo :-) I would not write my blood run cold in prose, but in poetry it is meant to be that way as a kind of condensation of my blood having run cold. Brooke :-)
Comment from IndianaIrish
Happy Halloween to you, Brooke! I've enjoyed your Halloween mood and this poem is an eerie delight--to watch your body rot before your eyes! Have a wonderful spooky night.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009
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Happy Halloween to you, Brooke! I've enjoyed your Halloween mood and this poem is an eerie delight--to watch your body rot before your eyes! Have a wonderful spooky night.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 31-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009
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Happy Halloween, Karyn! Glad you enjoyed this piece of holiday fun :-) Brooke
Comment from NicoLeAnn
This is really good.
I'm glad you just let your feelings guide you instead of sticking to the structure you had planned.
This came out beautifully!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009
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This is really good.
I'm glad you just let your feelings guide you instead of sticking to the structure you had planned.
This came out beautifully!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009
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Thank you, NicoleAnn - I'm so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Happy Halloween!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,
Bravo, you did wonders with your thoughts wrtten in rondeau form made your poem have a great cadence.
That's one thing for sure once the reaper comes there is NO way to halt his purpose.
Gert
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009
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Hello Brooke,
Bravo, you did wonders with your thoughts wrtten in rondeau form made your poem have a great cadence.
That's one thing for sure once the reaper comes there is NO way to halt his purpose.
Gert
Comment Written 31-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009
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Thanks so much, Gert - glad you enjoyed my Halloween poem, and Happy Halloween! Brooke :-)
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Smiles and you are welcome
Gert