POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Dreams Lost"When I dabble at things.....
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Comment from maxic59
A lovely Haiku, sorry for the sad reason for writing it. Hope your daughter comes good. Keep an eye on her.
A lovely photos also.
Cheers max
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A lovely Haiku, sorry for the sad reason for writing it. Hope your daughter comes good. Keep an eye on her.
A lovely photos also.
Cheers max
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Max I hope she comes through this too but so far it is n ot going well. Thanks for the kind review. CArol
Comment from Steve Pantazis
A sad and ironic haiku...has almost the feel of a senryu. Sorry to hear that this haiku is fashioned after a real tragedy of the heart. You did well putting it into words.
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A sad and ironic haiku...has almost the feel of a senryu. Sorry to hear that this haiku is fashioned after a real tragedy of the heart. You did well putting it into words.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
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Pantazis
Thank you for your kind review and comments. I greatly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from Hanna Marie
Makes me wonder what happened? Sad, I love the illustration that is with it. It adds to the sadness. Maybe Spring will make things alright again if they can hang in there...??
Sounds like you fit the description of the contest. Good Luck with that!
Hanna Marie
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Makes me wonder what happened? Sad, I love the illustration that is with it. It adds to the sadness. Maybe Spring will make things alright again if they can hang in there...??
Sounds like you fit the description of the contest. Good Luck with that!
Hanna Marie
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
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Hanna
Thank you for taking the time to read and review my haiku. I pray my daughter moves forward but right now she seems perched to fall backwards into the same dismal rut. Thanks for your kind comments. Carol
Comment from PoesyPoet
This is a beautiful albeit sad haiku. Love found and lost is never easy, but I'm sure your lovely daughter has many suitors so tell her to wipe the tears, chin up, get decked out and go find 'em.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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This is a beautiful albeit sad haiku. Love found and lost is never easy, but I'm sure your lovely daughter has many suitors so tell her to wipe the tears, chin up, get decked out and go find 'em.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
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PoesyPoet
She is a beautiful girl but he has stolen her self confidence. I pray in time she will find it again. Thanks for the review. CArol
Comment from Winslow
Dear Began Again,
A well done haiku. The bride stares out at the water her happiness shining on her face, but then the years pass and ardor cools and finally a blizzard occurs. Too bad the hearts are unmenable.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Began Again,
A well done haiku. The bride stares out at the water her happiness shining on her face, but then the years pass and ardor cools and finally a blizzard occurs. Too bad the hearts are unmenable.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
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Winslow
Thanks so much for the kind review and your comments. I greatly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from fayesh
Your haiku 5-7-5 was nicely done and painted a full image of a marriage beginning in hope and ending in heartbreak. Sorry to hear about your daughter. Hope things work out for her.
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Your haiku 5-7-5 was nicely done and painted a full image of a marriage beginning in hope and ending in heartbreak. Sorry to hear about your daughter. Hope things work out for her.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
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Fayesh
Only time will tell if she is strong enough to stay away from him. Thanks for the review and your kind comments. Carol
Comment from ryanlion
your three lines tell us all we need to know, its a shame your daughter had to experience this, i hope she is over it now
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your three lines tell us all we need to know, its a shame your daughter had to experience this, i hope she is over it now
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
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Ryan
She struggles to go forward. Thanks for the kind review and comments. Carol
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Nice Haiku and artwork as well... But very sad. How is your daughter right now? I hope time will give her the serenity to accept the reality...
God bless you Begin,
:)
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Nice Haiku and artwork as well... But very sad. How is your daughter right now? I hope time will give her the serenity to accept the reality...
God bless you Begin,
:)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
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Aurora
She struggles to escape his clutches. He cries and promises her the moon and stars...and then the same thing starts again. I pray for strength. Thank you for the review and for your generous comments. CArol
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello BeginAgain,
Your haiku is both interesting and well written. It actually shows two pictures at once - a happy one and a sad one and touches on something that is common to human nature. I enjoyed your fine haiku and wish you the best.
Cheers,
Whizpurr ^-^
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Hello BeginAgain,
Your haiku is both interesting and well written. It actually shows two pictures at once - a happy one and a sad one and touches on something that is common to human nature. I enjoyed your fine haiku and wish you the best.
Cheers,
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
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Whizpurr
Thanks for the kind review. I greatly appreciate your comments. CArol
Comment from pbrprasad
I used to avoid Haiku due to its tiny nature, but here writer's explanation forced me to write a review.this lines are something special.It is read worthy.Coming generation may like this kind of Haiku
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I used to avoid Haiku due to its tiny nature, but here writer's explanation forced me to write a review.this lines are something special.It is read worthy.Coming generation may like this kind of Haiku
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review and comments. I don't normally write poetry but this one just needed done I guess. Carol