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Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Who's There?"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
19 total reviews
Comment from Belinda
You frighten me, too, you know, with your description of something or somebody lurking in the dark. I'm surprised with your 'well' of imagination that never dries itself...
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2009
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You frighten me, too, you know, with your description of something or somebody lurking in the dark. I'm surprised with your 'well' of imagination that never dries itself...
Comment Written 19-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2009
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Belinda
I think this site has stimulated my old brain...I question myself sometimes where the idea came from. Thanks for reviewing and the comments. Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Wonderful. And every word you used had a purpose and was wonderful.. You did another great job. See you can do it. You only need confidence in yourself. You'r a great author with great creativity.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Wonderful. And every word you used had a purpose and was wonderful.. You did another great job. See you can do it. You only need confidence in yourself. You'r a great author with great creativity.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Barbara
I can't thank you enough for those kind words. I guess I never thought of myself as an author. sure I write but I didn't give myself a name. Thank you for making me feel great tonight. Carol
Comment from Aislinge
Well done! Nice use of active descriptions that really make the scene vivid. Love the low-key ending. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Well done! Nice use of active descriptions that really make the scene vivid. Love the low-key ending. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Aislinge
Thanks for stopping by and reading my story. Writing a story in 80 words was harder than I thought. I appreciate your review. Carol
Comment from c_lucas
This begins with a great hook and ends with a humorous twist. Very good job of writing. You set us up for horror and give us comedy. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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This begins with a great hook and ends with a humorous twist. Very good job of writing. You set us up for horror and give us comedy. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Charlie
Thanks for the great review. I am pleased that you didn't see the ending coming. Thanks again Carol
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Remember Eccl. 9:10. Now, I'm giving you homework assignments.
Charlie...I am not ready for the grave yet...I am too impatient to lie still that long. So I will have to write some more and work that much harder to keep you interested in what I write. Did I pass the assignment??? Carol
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Ecclesiastes 9:10 - "Whatsoever your hands findeth to do, do it with all thy might."
You have my interests. My only complaint was long posting. I think you would have more readers if you kept your posting under 2,000 words. I expressed that thought to you, once before.
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I don't think any one is ready for the grave, but unfortunately when the time comes, our opinions are not asked.
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That's why I wrote this 80 word story ...just for you. Have a nice night...Carol
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Touch'e (LOL)
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Carol, the size of the font wasn't an issue. My eyes could not distinquest Blue on Blue. I can't remember. Have you ever wrote a six word story. Good luck in your contest.
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Yes...matter of fact I have. :) Are you trying to get under my skin, Charlie....Cause if you are, it's okay...Friends do things like that! Carol
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Sorry, I didn't mean to step out of bounds. I was just curious.
Comment from PrincessinPurple
You did pretty good for a 80 word story. I think this story is complete. Didn't figure out what had scare the women till the end.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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You did pretty good for a 80 word story. I think this story is complete. Didn't figure out what had scare the women till the end.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Princess
Poor hubby was trying to get the kitty cat out of the storm and the wife thinks he's a prowler. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from adewpearl
I am SO impressed that you wrote a complete and fun story in only 80 words - I read the contest requirements and thought Heather had lost her mind! LOL You have setting, conflict, resolution, suspense, characters, and a great twist ending that made me laugh. I cannot ask for any more! Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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I am SO impressed that you wrote a complete and fun story in only 80 words - I read the contest requirements and thought Heather had lost her mind! LOL You have setting, conflict, resolution, suspense, characters, and a great twist ending that made me laugh. I cannot ask for any more! Brooke
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Brooke I thought she was out of her mind too when I first read it. I thought to myself that I can't write a story in 700 words why did I think I could write one in 80. I had to pat myself on the back for this one...after clip, cut, clip, cut, etc. Thanks for the wonderful review. Glad you enjoyed the story. Carol
Comment from RapturedHeart
Very good, Begin Again. Suspenceful right up to the punchline. Well done, and thanks so much for entering the contest and coming up with something this quickly. Great job. All the best,
Heather
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Very good, Begin Again. Suspenceful right up to the punchline. Well done, and thanks so much for entering the contest and coming up with something this quickly. Great job. All the best,
Heather
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Heather I thought you were crazy when I first looked at the rules. You know me the more words the better. But I thought of an idea and then started cutting, clipping, cutting and surprise!!! I actually did it. Surprised ,myself more than anyone else I think. Thanks so much. Carol
Comment from louisianawytch
this is great. great story in 80 words... wow. it started out as a horror story and ended in humor, loved it. very best of luck in contest. yvette
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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this is great. great story in 80 words... wow. it started out as a horror story and ended in humor, loved it. very best of luck in contest. yvette
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Yvette
Thanks so much for the great review. I hope you were surprised with the ending and didn't anticipate the cat.
Thanks again. Carol
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lol the cat was a big surpise. loved it.
Comment from Colette
That is discipline at it's best, you told a story from beginning
to end in 80 words. Well done you are the best.
Colette
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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That is discipline at it's best, you told a story from beginning
to end in 80 words. Well done you are the best.
Colette
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Colette
Thank you so much. You can not imagine how the first draft looked. Cut, clip, cut, clip...I can't barely say hello in 80 words. LOL Thanks again Carol
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you are the best!
