Comment from Mariea

Excellent

Perhaps breaking up into paragraphs would make it read smoother. I thought I was reading a kidnap scenario until the last line.

Good luck in the comp

Regards Mia

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the positive review.

Comment from OldVet

Good

This has a nice twist to it but would read better with some paragraph structure change. More use of active voice would strengthen the story.
Suggestions:
{Drip, Drip, Drip.}in Italics [Written sounds should be in italics]

Cecilia's mind screamed for quiet. She was tied to an old wooden chair in an abandoned warehouse.

["]Why me?["] [Dialogue in ", use ' for quotes within a quote.]

Two men in a van had snatched her off the street while she was walking her dog. When she thought of Pepe[,] she started to cry. She could not block out the incessant dripping. More tears of frustration and fear spilled from her eyes. It was cold and she started to shiver. Struggling against the restraints she wanted to scream but the gag in her mouth prevented it.

Finally, the director call[ed], "Cut. That's a wrap."

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 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the review.

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Eliz

A wonderful bit of a movie script. Quite clever.

Enjoyed the read. This should be a good contender.

Good luck in the contest.

Carol

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the positive review.

Comment from dmjones

Excellent

Good flash fiction with an excellent twist at the end. I really didn't know until I got there what would happen. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the positive review.

Comment from Blue Danube

Excellent

Very good 100 word dash, Eliz100.
Scary to read through; painfully real. Felt I was Cecilia sitting there, abducted and tied up to the chair. Struggling to get away and gagged. Fearfully well described scene and emotions.
The conclusion to this piece was surprising and what a welcome relief.
There are happy endings (sometimes) after all.
Blue

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the positive review.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Some times the magic of cinema is like real life. It is all an illusion. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the positive review.

reply by c_lucas on 15-Aug-2009

You're welcome.

Comment from Razz

Excellent

Really good. So well done. Only 100 words, and it says so much.
I had no reason to think that would be the end, but for some reason I did.

Good luck.
Razz

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the positive review.

Comment from MaureenC

Excellent

Eliz, golly, you had me going there, and in just 100 words.
Well done, a complete happening rounded out to perfection.
Good work and good luck in the contest.
Hugs and blessings
Maureen

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the positive review.

Comment from MissCellanea

Excellent

Good one! I was completely taken by surprise with the ending.

When she thought of Pepe(,) she started to cry.

Finally, the director call(ed), "Cut. That's a wrap."

This was a nice dash, good choice of words offered the reader the necessary info to picture the scene. I wish you well in the contest. Sue

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the feedback and the review.

Comment from tati

Excellent

I read your 100 word story with amazement. With three repetitive word /drip/ to start, you grabbed immediately my attention, and kept me in suspense for some moment. Until the director call ... Smartly written, eliz100, wish you the best of luck in the contest, tati (August 14, 2009)

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thanks for the positive review.