Comment from joan marie

Excellent

You must be inside my head. This is exactly the way I have been feeling. Unable to write or even try, I am praying my muse returns to this empty person. Great writing. joan marie

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2009

Muse might be a bit weary; as mine has been! I don't even know if she's returned for me yet, but slowly does it :) Thanks so much Joan. Hope all is well with you xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

reply by joan marie on 24-Jul-2009

Glad to see a post from you. A temporary setback, jm

Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea

Excellent

Howdy Chris,

It sure is nice to see you again, as well as your well framed poetic verse. This is, as always, thought provoking and poignant.

Love,
Penny

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2009

Thanks so much Pen :) xoxoxoxoxoxo

reply by Kentucky Sweet Pea on 24-Jul-2009

you are soooo welcome!!!

Comment from Domino

Excellent

Great seeing you back posting, Cwazy Cwissie.

'a mind so tortured
by a virgin page' - WOW! That's gotta be the mosr poetic description of writer's block I've read. You've still got the touch!

Well, I'm typing as I'm reviewing and now I've read the rest. Incredible abundance or apt metaphors. Blimey, I wish I had your vocabulary and imagination. I'm really humbled and feeling rather inferior.

Keep em coming - you're a true poet.

Love, ray xx

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2009

Aw ta, Ray, shucks :) You, my friend, are never inferior xoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Comment from findingmyroom

Excellent

Beautiful, and well worth the wait. (I hope all is ok with you.) My favorite image, among many, is this: "stretch like bent arrows / missing the mark"

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2009

Thanks so much fmr. Things are okay I guess. Just sufferin a bit of winter blues and other downers, but things'll come right. Appreciate your comments my friend xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Comment from filmoreodragon

Excellent

This is a haunting poem that speaks to me of age, sorrow, someone mourning the sadness of a friend or family member? A voiceless person who cannot cry is a very heart wrenching image.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2009

Thanks so much filmoreodragon. However a poem is perceived is okay with me :) In fact, I kinda like your take on it! xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Quite haunting, your words, the setting you have put them in. -
a grey moon frames a mind so tortured by a virgin page -
great words,
I am imagining sitting, I have her/him in a rocking chair staring at 'a book of nothing' quiet and alone. Maybe I am well off the mark that you were thinking but that is my thoughts as I read your words. I've really enjoyed your poem.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2009

Nope, you are pretty well on the mark Pearl! This is how it feels when one wants to express something, but can't do it. Sitting in the dark is how I see writers' block, or any other watershed a person may experience. So thank you for your perception and comments xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Comment from Steve Pantazis

Excellent

You did a nice job end-capping the story with your theme, a wordless age, and peppering references to it within the stanzas. There's a certain melancholy that works well for the story. Well done.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009

Thanks so much Pantazis; glad you enjoyed it :)

Comment from Russel Chale

Excellent

Wow. Very dramatic verse, Milady. I'm interpreting it as a fret or despair about writer's block. Is that correct? The language seems deliberately aloof and cerebral.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009

You're on the knocker my fine Kea friend! I don't know if this is one little 'thing' which'll be followed by more 'nothing' but will have to wait and see. So glad you enjoyed this, and I especially appreciate the description of it being "aloof and cerebral". Things written about writers' block can be a bit cliche and quippy, so wanted to steer away from that. Thanks my friend, for a fine review! xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox

Comment from Janelle

Excellent

So that's where you've been all this time! I was beginning to worry that you'd fallen in a malaise over the loss of the first test, or Collingwood losing their first game in seven, or maybe you didn't get any of Kev's money, or perhaps you'd even bought sixty or so tickets in the $50M lotto draw and only won $5.00! Or something.

Thank goodness you were just
in the wordless age,
with a tortured mind
and your little white fingers
on rigid knees
stretched like bent arrows
staring blankly into
a book of nothing while ya head
was throbbing!

You had me worried there for a bit my friend! :)

But it was worth the wait for sure. This is excellent and a really good portrayal of someone's suffering. The mood is very well articulated and you can feel the despair and desperation in each verse. The lines (I've only slightly butchered) above are brilliant!

Now don't you be going back to that place again, allrighty? I missed ya! :) Luv Jan


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 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009

Hey! Great to hear from you buddy!! Been toooo long. But can't do much with an inkless pen and empty brain ... Still, hopefully things are improving. Though I can't see myself writing one or two a day any time soon!

Loved your comments; they make my wordless wasteland an almost worthwhile experience! Missed talking to you also - and no, I was not depressed over Collinwood or cricket stuff or not gettin Kev's money (sleaze that he is imo). Nah, just lost the plot with no real guarantee it's come back really :) Ah well, a bit of madness adds to the lost plot some, don't it? How're things in your neck of the woods anyway? They're predicting SNOW in Grenfell next week ... SNOW for gawd's sake! It hasn't snowed here for at least fifteen years or more! Should be interestin' ... don't have skis or a snow-buggy-thingy either so will just be slippin all over the place ... not to mention driving ... eek.

Thanks again!! xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxxoxoxoxox

reply by Janelle on 23-Jul-2009

You my friend, have definitely got your mojo working again! Your long awaited, latest piece was really, really good. I can't write deep stuff, (unless you count my most recent piece which was about my dad called plot 574) but it's in a different style to yours. Yours have so much more depth to them.

You and sweetpea leave me for dead, I love both of your works.

Just saw a thing on A Current Affair on the Snuggie phenomena. Maybe you should get one of them for when the snow comes! They look daggy but apparently they're really, really warm. I wonder if they're made of Alpaca?

Lovely to have you back, Regards, Jan xo

Comment from Written Sketchbook

Excellent

Beautiful! I read this poem three time! I really did!! The art accentuates this piece very well. Or could it be the other way around? I felt the despair of trying to find the words. And though your poem speaks of an empty page, you found just the right words:

Solace teases in lonely tune
lilting softly, fading away
leaving no comfort
or phrase inspiring
to a speechless soul
staring blankly into
a book of nothing

Perfect!!

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 Comment Written 23-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009

Thanks very much indeed Written Sketchbook (love the name). Have been in a wordless age myself and this is the first thing I've written from the other side of it. Ah well, things may be lookin up if your review is anything to go by:) Thanks again! xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxxo