POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
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Comment from lizziebach
Well done with this one, you really deserved to win the contest it was an excellent entry. I love that little bit of hope at the end, showing that the sorrow wasn't all consuming. A wonderful poem.
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Well done with this one, you really deserved to win the contest it was an excellent entry. I love that little bit of hope at the end, showing that the sorrow wasn't all consuming. A wonderful poem.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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Lizziebach...
Good morning to you. Without that glimmer of hope, I believe I might have stopped a long time ago. Thanks for your kind words. Carol
Comment from BellaSpirit
BeginAgain,
Wow, I can certainly see how you won the contest. This is absolutely heart wrenching. You had to write this from the bottom of your soul my dear lady. I think you would just about have to experience this to pull feelings such as this out. As for the presentation, format, and everything else, this is exceptional in everyway.
Now I have to go dry my eyes.
Blessings,
BellaSpirit
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BeginAgain,
Wow, I can certainly see how you won the contest. This is absolutely heart wrenching. You had to write this from the bottom of your soul my dear lady. I think you would just about have to experience this to pull feelings such as this out. As for the presentation, format, and everything else, this is exceptional in everyway.
Now I have to go dry my eyes.
Blessings,
BellaSpirit
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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Bella...
You are correct. It came from my heart. Thanks for your awesome remarks. Your friend, Carol
Comment from jwryt
this really is a good poem..it captured the feeling of loss..and i also like the idea of putting some hope in the end..congratulations on winning the contest!..
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this really is a good poem..it captured the feeling of loss..and i also like the idea of putting some hope in the end..congratulations on winning the contest!..
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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jwryt..
Thank yo so much..I greatly appreciate every kind word in the review. Thanks again - Carol
Comment from Diane Marie
HI
Well done on winning the competition with this one, you truly deserved it. It's a lovely heart wrenching poem. It was so visual and moving!
Diane
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HI
Well done on winning the competition with this one, you truly deserved it. It's a lovely heart wrenching poem. It was so visual and moving!
Diane
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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Diane--
Thank you so much. I greatly appreciate the kind words. Carol
Comment from skye
There is always a glimmer of hope...
and there is eternity to look forward to... to share with those who are gone from us now.
I believe that life does not end, but goes on....
Your poem is filled with such sadness, love, and loss.
Well done.
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There is always a glimmer of hope...
and there is eternity to look forward to... to share with those who are gone from us now.
I believe that life does not end, but goes on....
Your poem is filled with such sadness, love, and loss.
Well done.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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Skye..
I have to believe that there will be a better tomorrow and that my son, Michael, and my grandson, DJ. are smiling, waiting patiently. Thanks for the kind words. Your friend, CArol
Comment from Joyce L.
I loved it. This poem brought sadness, yet had tender thoughts and moments throughout the message. Seriously, we all need that glimmer of hope...for tomorrow. Great job.
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I loved it. This poem brought sadness, yet had tender thoughts and moments throughout the message. Seriously, we all need that glimmer of hope...for tomorrow. Great job.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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Joyce. Your are awesome! Thanks for your kind and much appreciated words and for the stars. This poem was close to my heart and I am so glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks again - Carol
Comment from Amicus
This is an excellent depiction in well crafted rhymed and rhythmic verse of the agony of profound grief. You do a skillful job of conveying the pain and sorrow felt by the surviving half of a couple through your weather imagery.
I enjoyed the read and find no need for any revision.
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This is an excellent depiction in well crafted rhymed and rhythmic verse of the agony of profound grief. You do a skillful job of conveying the pain and sorrow felt by the surviving half of a couple through your weather imagery.
I enjoyed the read and find no need for any revision.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
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Amicus...
The grief came from my heart. I am so glad that you enjoyed reading my poem. Thanks so much for the kind review. Carol
Comment from Crusty
Marvellously well written and deeply moving. your word choice is spectacular, provoking some wonderful and at times, very poignant images.
Lines like this one stood out to me.
With quivering lips and stinging tears,
A storm begins to brew.
My mind must live in yesterday,
With memories of you.
Much pain in these words. I loved it, and enjoyed the read.
Have a wonderful day.
Brad...
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Marvellously well written and deeply moving. your word choice is spectacular, provoking some wonderful and at times, very poignant images.
Lines like this one stood out to me.
With quivering lips and stinging tears,
A storm begins to brew.
My mind must live in yesterday,
With memories of you.
Much pain in these words. I loved it, and enjoyed the read.
Have a wonderful day.
Brad...
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
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Brad..
I wrote this poem with my heart..Losing someone you love is a devastating feeling and struggling to find the will to go on is a everyday process. Thanks again for the kind review. Your friend, Carol
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You are more than welcome Carol, and I'm sorry to hear about your devastating loss. I offer my condolences and pray courage and peace will rest on you and you'll find the strength you need to move on. (Not an easy task) But with time, and patience, I'm sure you'll make it. Sometimes, looking forward is a hard thing. But, the truth is, each day, does dawn as bright as the last, and each day brings a fresh hope. with that hope, strength to move on.
Blessings to you Carol.
Brad...
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi there, a nice read but, oh what a sad and heartbreaking poem. I wish you much luck with this. Check my 'just' suggestions:
A rocking chair, a [time-worn] stool - thought that should be hyphenated
Soon followed by [the] anger, - sounds better without 'the'
Next will come [the] hopelessness, - here too
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Hi there, a nice read but, oh what a sad and heartbreaking poem. I wish you much luck with this. Check my 'just' suggestions:
A rocking chair, a [time-worn] stool - thought that should be hyphenated
Soon followed by [the] anger, - sounds better without 'the'
Next will come [the] hopelessness, - here too
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
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arjuna
Thank you for reading and for your comments. They are greatly appreciated. Carol
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a heartrending and emotional poem, Carol. The reader feels the pain of the speaker, who is trying to get through another day. I have one suggestion: In the second line of stanza three, it would make better grammar if you said: "Are all there is to see." I like your poem.
Sally
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This is a heartrending and emotional poem, Carol. The reader feels the pain of the speaker, who is trying to get through another day. I have one suggestion: In the second line of stanza three, it would make better grammar if you said: "Are all there is to see." I like your poem.
Sally
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
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Sally..
Thanks for the suggestions. I always appreciate your help. Thanks for reading and commenting. Thanks again Carol