CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from womanwriter
Beautifully written - told the whole story from beginning to end - nicely done with great imagery.
I did get a chuckle though - you description reads 'nature unleased' I think you meant 'unleasHed' but I wouldn't take out a lease on a volcano either LOL
Glad to read you!
Sincerely,
womanwriter
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Beautifully written - told the whole story from beginning to end - nicely done with great imagery.
I did get a chuckle though - you description reads 'nature unleased' I think you meant 'unleasHed' but I wouldn't take out a lease on a volcano either LOL
Glad to read you!
Sincerely,
womanwriter
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
Comment from honeytree
Vivid words written here. We can visualize the redness , the lava and feel the heat melting our bodies. We run to survive but do we?
The loss of life has been caused by volcanoes from the beginning of our earth.
"RED RIVER RAGES"
Very powerful words.
Excellent writing.
Honeytree.
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Vivid words written here. We can visualize the redness , the lava and feel the heat melting our bodies. We run to survive but do we?
The loss of life has been caused by volcanoes from the beginning of our earth.
"RED RIVER RAGES"
Very powerful words.
Excellent writing.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
Comment from Thesis
Your volcano haiku is very descriptive. I can visualize the red lava flowing down the mountain after it's cap has blown off.
The fact that it was dormant and erupts provides many images in ones' mind.
Good luck in the contest. - Thesis
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Your volcano haiku is very descriptive. I can visualize the red lava flowing down the mountain after it's cap has blown off.
The fact that it was dormant and erupts provides many images in ones' mind.
Good luck in the contest. - Thesis
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
Comment from K-Patrick
I'm voting on the 'VOLCANO Haiku' contest and as always, I am reading all entries before deciding. The number of entries and need to stay employed prohibit a more detailed review, but you never let me down when it comes to showing beauty with words. "Red river flows" just awesome.
I wish you the best in the contest.
The only problem
with Haiku is that you just
get started and then
~ Roger McGough (UK Poet)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2009
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I'm voting on the 'VOLCANO Haiku' contest and as always, I am reading all entries before deciding. The number of entries and need to stay employed prohibit a more detailed review, but you never let me down when it comes to showing beauty with words. "Red river flows" just awesome.
I wish you the best in the contest.
The only problem
with Haiku is that you just
get started and then
~ Roger McGough (UK Poet)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2009
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Now THAT's a great haiku! HA!! Great to include that in your review! Thank you very much for your lovely compliments and review. Very much appreciated. Sue :-))
Comment from c_lucas
This brought the Yellowstone to mind. A gigantic volcano that is over due for eruption. Good imagery and descritptive scheme.
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This brought the Yellowstone to mind. A gigantic volcano that is over due for eruption. Good imagery and descritptive scheme.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
Comment from The Cowboy Poet
I never really know how to review short poetry such as haikus, but this one I like for its imagery. It comes down to painting a picture with a minimum of words which calls for strong figurative language. The personification is very well done. The personification and alliteration in the last line create a strong image. The form is correct.
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I never really know how to review short poetry such as haikus, but this one I like for its imagery. It comes down to painting a picture with a minimum of words which calls for strong figurative language. The personification is very well done. The personification and alliteration in the last line create a strong image. The form is correct.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
Comment from Just2Write
Hi Sue - It true that a dormancy of 100 years is nothing on the grand scale of volcanos. Just a nap, really. Mt. St. Helens was proof of this. Great haiku. I really enjoyed your entry. Rose.
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Hi Sue - It true that a dormancy of 100 years is nothing on the grand scale of volcanos. Just a nap, really. Mt. St. Helens was proof of this. Great haiku. I really enjoyed your entry. Rose.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
Comment from jmkenpo
This is a very good sounding haiku. I like the way the two entries I have read both chose red as their background to really drive home to message. Good luck in the contest. - Jmkenpo
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This is a very good sounding haiku. I like the way the two entries I have read both chose red as their background to really drive home to message. Good luck in the contest. - Jmkenpo
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
Comment from fictionwriter
The poems about volcanos are really scary. I loved this one, especially the red river part. It truly describes what you think of when you think of volcanos. Great job.
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The poems about volcanos are really scary. I loved this one, especially the red river part. It truly describes what you think of when you think of volcanos. Great job.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
Comment from enjoi
I'm thinking this is one of the best haiku to be featured on this site in a good long while. You hit all the right notes of the confining little format. The description is rather top of the line. Really, just a solid, good piece.
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I'm thinking this is one of the best haiku to be featured on this site in a good long while. You hit all the right notes of the confining little format. The description is rather top of the line. Really, just a solid, good piece.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009