CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from skye
Strong images, retelling the plight of so many.
The artwork is very well chosen to highlight your words.
The reasons are all unique, the tragedies so familliar and common.
Last line is exceptional....
we are all only 1 choice and 15 minutes away from prison or homelessness at any given time.
Well done.
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Strong images, retelling the plight of so many.
The artwork is very well chosen to highlight your words.
The reasons are all unique, the tragedies so familliar and common.
Last line is exceptional....
we are all only 1 choice and 15 minutes away from prison or homelessness at any given time.
Well done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from adewpearl
be on there minds should be their
the largest growing demographic in the homeless clients our local shelter where I volunteer serves is middle aged women who used to be middle class - your poem speaks to a growing problem - most don't have stories as interesting as being married to an embezzling/corrupt businessman - but many were dumped by businessmen for their secretaries, etc. Strong rhyming quatrains, a fascinating story, and a lesson to be learned by those open-minded enough to listen. Brooke
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be on there minds should be their
the largest growing demographic in the homeless clients our local shelter where I volunteer serves is middle aged women who used to be middle class - your poem speaks to a growing problem - most don't have stories as interesting as being married to an embezzling/corrupt businessman - but many were dumped by businessmen for their secretaries, etc. Strong rhyming quatrains, a fascinating story, and a lesson to be learned by those open-minded enough to listen. Brooke
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from dewley11
Hi,Sixteezkid,You speak for a large number of people all over the world.It must be an awful shock to those who thought they had a secure job and now find themselves on the street.Your poem captures the feelings of such people well and reminds us that this wil go on for quite a while and no-one knows what the final toll will be,especially in countries which are already poor,
Yours Chris
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Hi,Sixteezkid,You speak for a large number of people all over the world.It must be an awful shock to those who thought they had a secure job and now find themselves on the street.Your poem captures the feelings of such people well and reminds us that this wil go on for quite a while and no-one knows what the final toll will be,especially in countries which are already poor,
Yours Chris
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Brandenpaul
Awesome! My 11 year old complained we were poor over christmas time, so we took a ride downtown and saw the homeless lying on the street under their donated blankets. There were children there as well and the impact it had on her was huge. She realized just how lucky we really were. I realize just how easy that could be us. You did a really great job, I think I just may have her read your poem.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2009
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Awesome! My 11 year old complained we were poor over christmas time, so we took a ride downtown and saw the homeless lying on the street under their donated blankets. There were children there as well and the impact it had on her was huge. She realized just how lucky we really were. I realize just how easy that could be us. You did a really great job, I think I just may have her read your poem.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2009
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Wow! You did the most amazing thing for your daughter!! She will never, ever forget it. Knowing we don't have to go to some 3rd world country to see the homeless most definitely hits home in a big way.
So honored to receive your 'exceptional' review.
From my heart...Sue
Comment from fictionwriter
I love this poem. People don't realize the mentally ill have such a hard time dealing with real life. And the criminal justice system doesn't help. Great poem.
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I love this poem. People don't realize the mentally ill have such a hard time dealing with real life. And the criminal justice system doesn't help. Great poem.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Firefly54
"From soft shell I came to this hell." I think a lot of vagrants suffer from this problem. It must be so hard to make the change. Excellent poem, shame you missed it, silly girl!
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"From soft shell I came to this hell." I think a lot of vagrants suffer from this problem. It must be so hard to make the change. Excellent poem, shame you missed it, silly girl!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I like the words of this poem. It is a pathetic story that also contains some hope. The rhymes are beautifully done as is characteristic of your poems. kudos
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I like the words of this poem. It is a pathetic story that also contains some hope. The rhymes are beautifully done as is characteristic of your poems. kudos
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from NightWriter
"Victim to Vagrant" is a creative and well written poem that speaks volumes of truth. It can happen to anyone. Perfect rhythm and rhyming and perfect ending. Well done.
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"Victim to Vagrant" is a creative and well written poem that speaks volumes of truth. It can happen to anyone. Perfect rhythm and rhyming and perfect ending. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Ragnar
Very good work and from a completely different perspective...one of helpless "ignorance."
You're absolutely right about all the different reasons for being homeless, but mental illness and drug addiction cover about 95% or so.
Your take on financial crisis was very thought provoking, albeit rare.
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Very good work and from a completely different perspective...one of helpless "ignorance."
You're absolutely right about all the different reasons for being homeless, but mental illness and drug addiction cover about 95% or so.
Your take on financial crisis was very thought provoking, albeit rare.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from amada
This is a very human and well written piece of members of our society, so lost in an abysm of pain and destruction. Your sense of compassion brightly shines in this piece.
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This is a very human and well written piece of members of our society, so lost in an abysm of pain and destruction. Your sense of compassion brightly shines in this piece.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009