A Leaf on the Wind
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Comment from badaner
A very powerful and well written chapter. How dreadful that a simple thing like a glass of water, which we can none of us live without, can conjure up such horrific childhood memories.
I'm sorry but I was too engrossed to notice if there was any SPaG.
badaner x
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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A very powerful and well written chapter. How dreadful that a simple thing like a glass of water, which we can none of us live without, can conjure up such horrific childhood memories.
I'm sorry but I was too engrossed to notice if there was any SPaG.
badaner x
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Thank you very much for your review. While I encourage suggestions and corrections it is encouraging to know you were too engrossed to notice....
Comment from Arkine
I take it Valerie was sexually abused by her father, resulting in, what sounds like genital herpies at an early age. Cranberry juice and anti-biotics would have been better for the bladder infection. Heck, I don't think I've seen a doctor about a bladder infection in several years because of cranberry juice...needless to say I don't like the taste of it much. ;) Anyhow, this was a good, though disturbing chapter, I haven't read the others so it sounds like I missed some of the worst parts. Great job, I didn't see any errors.
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I take it Valerie was sexually abused by her father, resulting in, what sounds like genital herpies at an early age. Cranberry juice and anti-biotics would have been better for the bladder infection. Heck, I don't think I've seen a doctor about a bladder infection in several years because of cranberry juice...needless to say I don't like the taste of it much. ;) Anyhow, this was a good, though disturbing chapter, I haven't read the others so it sounds like I missed some of the worst parts. Great job, I didn't see any errors.
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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This was in the early 50s and unfortunately, cranberry juice hadn't been discovered yet. Maybe that's a good thing, I like cranberry juice and having to drink three quarts a day may have turned me against it....Thanks for your positive review.
Comment from RaymondJohn
The last sentence is one of the most powerful I have ever read. At least the abuser had to leave the house. I cringe every time I read this kind of story. Well done. Ray.
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The last sentence is one of the most powerful I have ever read. At least the abuser had to leave the house. I cringe every time I read this kind of story. Well done. Ray.
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. I sincerely appreciate your comments.
