CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "A Summer Fling"A collection of poetry
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Comment from fictionwriter
What a great picture you have to go along with a marvelous poem. Again I love the poems about animals and nature. This is truly a grand sight to behold. Great job.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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What a great picture you have to go along with a marvelous poem. Again I love the poems about animals and nature. This is truly a grand sight to behold. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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fictionwriter, thank you for your very kind review. Regards, Sue
Comment from Adri7enne
"feathered bedroom eyes." Priceless line. So apt, so perfect, so unexpected, it made me laugh. An interesting subject, since the peacock has always represented the epitome of male sexual display. Lovely art work, great presentation.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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"feathered bedroom eyes." Priceless line. So apt, so perfect, so unexpected, it made me laugh. An interesting subject, since the peacock has always represented the epitome of male sexual display. Lovely art work, great presentation.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Adri7enne, so glad you enjoyed this haiku! And thanks for your very kind compliments and review. With regards, Sue
Comment from XR15
Hi Sue
Peacocks are truly wonderful birds - they make one hell of a racket too.
I liked your "August" haiku
Cheers
Chris
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Hi Sue
Peacocks are truly wonderful birds - they make one hell of a racket too.
I liked your "August" haiku
Cheers
Chris
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Ha! One reason that stopped me from getting a couple to hang around the house! Thanks for your very cool review! :-)) Sue
Comment from adewpearl
feathered bedroom eyes - now that is just one of the best satori thingies I've ever read in a haiku - it's witty, and it is a perfect image!!! This is simply grand - I would so give you a six if I had one, and that is so sincere. :-)
courtship's august adornment is also pretty damned good - august, have not heard that beautiful and elegant word used in a while - you've outdone yourself with this one, lady. Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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feathered bedroom eyes - now that is just one of the best satori thingies I've ever read in a haiku - it's witty, and it is a perfect image!!! This is simply grand - I would so give you a six if I had one, and that is so sincere. :-)
courtship's august adornment is also pretty damned good - august, have not heard that beautiful and elegant word used in a while - you've outdone yourself with this one, lady. Brooke
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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I'll take your sixer in my heart, Brooke! You're right..."august" is a lovely word, isn't it. I am SO glad you enjoyed this haiku! - now, where's yours again? :-)) Thanks for your awesome review! Sue
Comment from Minglement
This is just lovely and a creative entry for the haiku contest. I love the imaginative last line! Who would think of that! Only you. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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This is just lovely and a creative entry for the haiku contest. I love the imaginative last line! Who would think of that! Only you. Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Marcia, thank you so much for your lovely compliment! I am working so hard with haiku. What an exercise in learning brevity!! Thank you for your great review, also. Always, Sue
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You're so right! Haiku hones the skills on brevity for itself and other work. Do try it. M
Comment from Joan E.
Your 5-7-5 faithfully follows the haiku form and includes a fascinating satori with those "bedroom eyes". There is so much going on here, with the double meaning of "august" and the use of alliteration. The picture is magnificent especially to one who used to keep peacocks in Pomona eons ago.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Your 5-7-5 faithfully follows the haiku form and includes a fascinating satori with those "bedroom eyes". There is so much going on here, with the double meaning of "august" and the use of alliteration. The picture is magnificent especially to one who used to keep peacocks in Pomona eons ago.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Joan E, that is so cool that you used to keep peacocks! You would have seen it all. Thanks so much for your very generous review. Always appreciated, Sue
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Yeah, hard to believe, now.
If you want to make a quick "buck," read my 6-word story "Not Famous, Just Toast."
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Great poem. Great photo. Good luck! I have always loved the peacock and have been amazed at it's brilliant colors. A great choice for the poem. Loyd
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Great poem. Great photo. Good luck! I have always loved the peacock and have been amazed at it's brilliant colors. A great choice for the poem. Loyd
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Really glad you enjoyed this poem, Loyd. They are gorgeous creatures! Thanks for your lovely review. Sue
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My pleasure Sue, Loyd :)
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Where we live there are a family of wild peacocks. They go from grove to grove and it is a real treat when they visit us. You are right...the mating dance can be heard echoing for miles in our canyons. Very nice word painting and artwork.
Dave
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Where we live there are a family of wild peacocks. They go from grove to grove and it is a real treat when they visit us. You are right...the mating dance can be heard echoing for miles in our canyons. Very nice word painting and artwork.
Dave
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Aren't YOU the lucky one! I'd love to witness that regularly. A beautiful sight. The noise must be something else. Thanks so much for your review and sharing your story! :-)) Sue
Comment from jeslaf
LOVE that satori, girl--sexy, funny and educational all in one! It's hard to impress me with haiku, but this one did. Bravo!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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LOVE that satori, girl--sexy, funny and educational all in one! It's hard to impress me with haiku, but this one did. Bravo!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Ah! A convert over to haiku side! LOL!! So glad you liked it. Thanks for your lovely compliments and review. Sue
Comment from jaeladarling
The male peacock is one of my favorite birds. I love the colors! I like the last line, "feathered bedroom eyes". What wonderful imagery. Thank you for sharing, and good luck to you!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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The male peacock is one of my favorite birds. I love the colors! I like the last line, "feathered bedroom eyes". What wonderful imagery. Thank you for sharing, and good luck to you!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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How could we not be entranced by that magnificent display! Thanks so much for your very kind review. :-)) Sue