CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 78 "I'm 5 and a half"A collection of poetry
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Comment from LauraKathryn
It's so adorable,and happy. It seems you had a pleasant childhood,I don't see anything that needs changing, but I love the improper English! It sounds as if a child were saying it.
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It's so adorable,and happy. It seems you had a pleasant childhood,I don't see anything that needs changing, but I love the improper English! It sounds as if a child were saying it.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
Comment from Johnny Carwash
I loved how closely you wrote this as a child, right down to the misspellings and whatnot. Very clever. Definitely adds to the authentic feel of the piece. Good luck in the contest.
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I loved how closely you wrote this as a child, right down to the misspellings and whatnot. Very clever. Definitely adds to the authentic feel of the piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
Comment from jeslaf
This reads as if written by the child herself, except the rhyme and meter are too precise to have been written by one so young! Very good, and I'm so glad your memories are sweet. :)
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This reads as if written by the child herself, except the rhyme and meter are too precise to have been written by one so young! Very good, and I'm so glad your memories are sweet. :)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Yes, those sure were sweet memories! I enjoyed writing it because they came flooding back. Thanks for your very kind review! Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good morning Sue. I enjoyed your poem as written from a little girl's perspective. As far as I understand the rules, then you did very well.
Loyd
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Good morning Sue. I enjoyed your poem as written from a little girl's perspective. As far as I understand the rules, then you did very well.
Loyd
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Loyd, I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. I loved writing it, as the memories came flooding back. Thank you for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
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Sue you are most welcome and thanks again for your help. Loyd
Comment from XR15
Hi There
Difficult to put yourself in the mind of a child and you achieved a great result.
This reads like it was written with a five and a half year old in terms of language - but with an adult perspective in terms of depth. A good read - I enjoyed it very much..
Cheers
Chris
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Hi There
Difficult to put yourself in the mind of a child and you achieved a great result.
This reads like it was written with a five and a half year old in terms of language - but with an adult perspective in terms of depth. A good read - I enjoyed it very much..
Cheers
Chris
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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XR15, I certainly did have to go back a few years! HA! But, when set out to write, I did have so many fond memories to draw from. Thank you so much for your very kind review and compliments. Very much appreciated, Sue :-))
Comment from DreamChaser
A delightful read. It's so well written I can almost see a little girl reciting it. Barbies, hopscotch, lightning bugs, and Disney movies, those were the days. It sounds like you had a wonderful childhood. Great poem, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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A delightful read. It's so well written I can almost see a little girl reciting it. Barbies, hopscotch, lightning bugs, and Disney movies, those were the days. It sounds like you had a wonderful childhood. Great poem, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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DreamChaser, I did have a very serene and full, happy time at that age. So many memories came back while writing this. I'm so glad you liked reading it. Thank you for your lovely review and compliments. With regards, Sue
Comment from BLACKDYKE
Lovely poetry Sixteezkid. Now I know you from my own childhood. I am a simple writer there fore I like simple poetry, our's is easy on the ear. Children are the reason to live and you must have a busy life! Keep up the good work.
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Lovely poetry Sixteezkid. Now I know you from my own childhood. I am a simple writer there fore I like simple poetry, our's is easy on the ear. Children are the reason to live and you must have a busy life! Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
Comment from ulster3
Hi sixteez.
Another well done work. I love this child's voice. Great imagery that leaves a clear picture in the mind. Best to you with this. Fondly, rebecca
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Hi sixteez.
Another well done work. I love this child's voice. Great imagery that leaves a clear picture in the mind. Best to you with this. Fondly, rebecca
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Rebecca, I sure do love that little girl! She had so much fun. When I wrote this, it sure did bring back some great memories. So glad you could see them! Thanks so much for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
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Hi sixteez.
Some think it a challenge to let go of the child ... I think the true challenge is to keep the child near. Fondly
Comment from jaeladarling
Is there anything you CAN'T write about? I doubt it. Once again, you've showed those poet wannabes how it's done. LOL I love the nostalgia you've captured. Does anyone catch fireflies anymore? I used to love doing that.
Anyway, wonderful poem - nice work!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Is there anything you CAN'T write about? I doubt it. Once again, you've showed those poet wannabes how it's done. LOL I love the nostalgia you've captured. Does anyone catch fireflies anymore? I used to love doing that.
Anyway, wonderful poem - nice work!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Stop it!!!! I'm blushing!! Just want to stay diversified and not get pigeonholed into one genre or subject! There is a never-ending, eternal supply of material in life to write about! And that's what I want to do. Thank you SO much for your most kind review and compliments. AND , for the encouragement you bring. With warmest regards, Sue :-))
Comment from Joan E.
You faithfully followed the rules, while capturing the voice and focus of a five year old. I appreciated your clever childlike pronunciation of "Ehop" age appropriate sentence structure. I bet, as a child, you actually enjoyed many of the experiences described in your poem.
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You faithfully followed the rules, while capturing the voice and focus of a five year old. I appreciated your clever childlike pronunciation of "Ehop" age appropriate sentence structure. I bet, as a child, you actually enjoyed many of the experiences described in your poem.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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I enjoyed them all! Just writing this took me back to so many wonderful memories. Yeah, had to throw Ethops and "bestest" in there for a little fun. Thanks very much for your very kind review. With regards, Sue :-))