CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 85 "Security Risk!"A collection of poetry
24 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hello Sue! I'm delighted you entered this contest and your entry is a great one! Your story is so cute and I bet you still talk about his ride down the White House banister. Best wishes in the contest and thanks again for submitting this great nonet.
Indy :>)
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Hello Sue! I'm delighted you entered this contest and your entry is a great one! Your story is so cute and I bet you still talk about his ride down the White House banister. Best wishes in the contest and thanks again for submitting this great nonet.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - Funny story about your trip with the kids to the White house. Funny how kids think about those things we revere. Enjoyed it. Charlie
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Sue - Funny story about your trip with the kids to the White house. Funny how kids think about those things we revere. Enjoyed it. Charlie
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from Karen B.
This is a cute and well done story in a nonet, made me smile. He will always be able to brag that he did something at the White House that few have ever done, lol. Good luck in the contest! Karen
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This is a cute and well done story in a nonet, made me smile. He will always be able to brag that he did something at the White House that few have ever done, lol. Good luck in the contest! Karen
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good morning Sue
Kids do some silly things, hahah! I can picture that in my mind. No wonder we now have homeland security. A good read and entry, thanks! Load
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Good morning Sue
Kids do some silly things, hahah! I can picture that in my mind. No wonder we now have homeland security. A good read and entry, thanks! Load
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue
A fabulous memory put skillfully to a nonet.
Hilarious tale that I bet you've had loadsa lughs tellin.
I bet Ryan is well proud of his adventure now - how many people have done that?
Great the way ya relate his laid-back reaction ta all the commotion. LOL. Good luck, Ray xx
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Hi, Sue
A fabulous memory put skillfully to a nonet.
Hilarious tale that I bet you've had loadsa lughs tellin.
I bet Ryan is well proud of his adventure now - how many people have done that?
Great the way ya relate his laid-back reaction ta all the commotion. LOL. Good luck, Ray xx
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Not many have done it except kids in the White House and their friends, I suppose. Who knows, maybe Old Abe even had a go! HA!! Thanks for the great review, Ray. xx Sue
Comment from Judian James
Well you told your story well in this Nonet. Oh, I have so many memories and funny stories from that age with my kids as well. The word "runt" is a little harsh I think.
Wouldn't "guy" or whatever other name, work just as well and be more loving sounding? just me perhaps
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Well you told your story well in this Nonet. Oh, I have so many memories and funny stories from that age with my kids as well. The word "runt" is a little harsh I think.
Wouldn't "guy" or whatever other name, work just as well and be more loving sounding? just me perhaps
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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You are so right! In a larger context, runt would not sound as harsh. But, "guy" makes the reader more sympathetic towards him. Thanks again for another excellent suggestion. I always appreciate your honest reviews. And thank you for this one. :-)) Sue
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Just changed it and it is much, much better! Thanks again.
Comment from starkat
Cute story well told in nonet format. I like the non-fiction aspect that this actually happened..;) I'll bet the secret service were a bit upset. But Ryan's age makes the whole affair totally understandable and humorous.
I got a big laugh out of this story.
Great job. Good luck in this contest!
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Cute story well told in nonet format. I like the non-fiction aspect that this actually happened..;) I'll bet the secret service were a bit upset. But Ryan's age makes the whole affair totally understandable and humorous.
I got a big laugh out of this story.
Great job. Good luck in this contest!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from Curt Mongold
I see, I talk about my cat so you gotta bring in the big guns with the kids! That's almost too cute!! How can I win against this?
Mine still rhymes though!
LOL!
Curt
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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I see, I talk about my cat so you gotta bring in the big guns with the kids! That's almost too cute!! How can I win against this?
Mine still rhymes though!
LOL!
Curt
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Ok, the gloves are off! I'm going back to make mine rhyme!!! Take that! - LOL!!!! You're so funny. "the big guns"! HA!! Crackin' me up , Cuz - thanks for your fun review!
Comment from Hitcher
I think I like young Ryan, my kind of tearaway! OH to of been a fly on the wall, moments like that are precious and you can derive pleasure from them forever because they are priceless. Another great nonet Sue, well done friend.
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I think I like young Ryan, my kind of tearaway! OH to of been a fly on the wall, moments like that are precious and you can derive pleasure from them forever because they are priceless. Another great nonet Sue, well done friend.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from Jazh
Very, very cute...I enjoyed this a lot. Aussie kids are great - they teach you Americans some perspective on things!! It's a great story and well-written. Good luck with the contest. :)
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Very, very cute...I enjoyed this a lot. Aussie kids are great - they teach you Americans some perspective on things!! It's a great story and well-written. Good luck with the contest. :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009