CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 88 "Pit Stop"A collection of poetry
38 total reviews
Comment from kassey
I really enjoyed this entry for the contest, I love the format of the vers beaucoup andd like that you have included some humor in the work.. Excellent Kay
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I really enjoyed this entry for the contest, I love the format of the vers beaucoup andd like that you have included some humor in the work.. Excellent Kay
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from mindseye
Another well crafted poem that does not seem forced. It is hard to fulfill such a structured poetic form and still have a natural flow. Well done.
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Another well crafted poem that does not seem forced. It is hard to fulfill such a structured poetic form and still have a natural flow. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hi 60skid,
Good description of a race. In my mind I could see all the things you depicted. As they say, a picture is worth a thousand words. I looked over the rhyming format. You did quite well fitting all of it into place. For that you get an "A".
Ray
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Hi 60skid,
Good description of a race. In my mind I could see all the things you depicted. As they say, a picture is worth a thousand words. I looked over the rhyming format. You did quite well fitting all of it into place. For that you get an "A".
Ray
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from Brandenpaul
First of all, good luck in the contest. Next, loved it. Made it seem like we were there at the track. Number 8? Dale? Anyway, following rules in writing is challenging to say the least.
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First of all, good luck in the contest. Next, loved it. Made it seem like we were there at the track. Number 8? Dale? Anyway, following rules in writing is challenging to say the least.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
This was truly a fun poem to read. It was my pleasure to read your quirky rhyming verses. This should do well in the contest. I found no errors.
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This was truly a fun poem to read. It was my pleasure to read your quirky rhyming verses. This should do well in the contest. I found no errors.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from Joan E.
Even without looking at your kind list, your poem was very clear because it was pushed along by the format and rhymes. You immediately had us feel, hear and see your race. Well done.
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Even without looking at your kind list, your poem was very clear because it was pushed along by the format and rhymes. You immediately had us feel, hear and see your race. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from FredCollingwood
Great poem. You're quickly becoming one of my favorites. I've loved all of your posts.
One thing:
Got green light( - )hold on tight! > em dash--two dashes--no spaces.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Great poem. You're quickly becoming one of my favorites. I've loved all of your posts.
One thing:
Got green light( - )hold on tight! > em dash--two dashes--no spaces.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Fred, thank you for your most wonderful compliment! I'm very humbled by your remarks. And I did change those dashes! Much better! Your review is very much appreciated... Sue
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - The snow must be deep and the temp plunging. You a NASCAR fan? LOL. Nicely written for this structured format. You are one creative and prolific poet. Charlie
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009
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Sue - The snow must be deep and the temp plunging. You a NASCAR fan? LOL. Nicely written for this structured format. You are one creative and prolific poet. Charlie
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009
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Formula 1 and European/Australian Touring Car Racing! I love circuit track races. Not ovals. Thank you SO much for your great compliments! Keeps me so encouraged to just keep on writing! With regards, Sue
Comment from debskatz
Hey Sixteezkid,
Good one! Did a very good job with this type of poetry. And I got an education about racing! If you like racing I'm sure you've heard of Talledega. I live about an hour's drive from there.
Thanks for sharing this racy poem with us!
smiles,
deb
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Hey Sixteezkid,
Good one! Did a very good job with this type of poetry. And I got an education about racing! If you like racing I'm sure you've heard of Talledega. I live about an hour's drive from there.
Thanks for sharing this racy poem with us!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
Comment from DreamChaser
This poem grabs your interest at the beginning and holds on to it until the end. I couldn't wait to get to the next sentence. Nice ending. Excellent entry for the contest. I've always watched the Indy 500 on television, but last year I finally went for the first time. We had amazing seats and I loved every second of it!
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This poem grabs your interest at the beginning and holds on to it until the end. I couldn't wait to get to the next sentence. Nice ending. Excellent entry for the contest. I've always watched the Indy 500 on television, but last year I finally went for the first time. We had amazing seats and I loved every second of it!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009