The Enchanted Toyshelf
a modern sonnet about fairies at bedtime90 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,
sounds like anoter great poem for children to read when the have fears and hear strange sounds near
Love the images of all the cheerful toys that can bring joy.
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Hello Brooke,
sounds like anoter great poem for children to read when the have fears and hear strange sounds near
Love the images of all the cheerful toys that can bring joy.
Gert
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Gert, thanks so very much for this wonderful response, Brooke
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smiles
Gert
Comment from Firefly54
How totally sweet this poem is! And the image too,which supports it without taking command.
All one can suggest i personal favourite lines:
"Her luminosity lightens my room"
"Her unearthly voice gives chase to all care- "
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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How totally sweet this poem is! And the image too,which supports it without taking command.
All one can suggest i personal favourite lines:
"Her luminosity lightens my room"
"Her unearthly voice gives chase to all care- "
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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thank you so much for this gracious response - glad you like those lines! Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
this would make a very pleasant piece of poetry for children to read as well as adults I liked everything about this well written verse.This was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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this would make a very pleasant piece of poetry for children to read as well as adults I liked everything about this well written verse.This was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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John, I thank you so much for kind thoughts on a gentle poem, Brooke
Comment from wierdgrace
I love faires and how they are written in poems, I wrote one and posted for a while, but I must admit, this is poetry, excellent, and enjoyable, thank you for sharing such talent.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I love faires and how they are written in poems, I wrote one and posted for a while, but I must admit, this is poetry, excellent, and enjoyable, thank you for sharing such talent.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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You are most gracious - thank you so much, Brooke :-)
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thank you too.
Comment from Joan E.
From A to Z to a lovely sonnet; you're the renaissance woman!
I liked the turn of phrase "dark shadow fears" and your use of alliteration. You convinced us that you and your toys should "close your eyes" in the safe presence of the fairy.
Glad to be back from Chicago, where it was 28 Degrees and snowy.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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From A to Z to a lovely sonnet; you're the renaissance woman!
I liked the turn of phrase "dark shadow fears" and your use of alliteration. You convinced us that you and your toys should "close your eyes" in the safe presence of the fairy.
Glad to be back from Chicago, where it was 28 Degrees and snowy.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I see you're from Malibu -my nannying daughter sits there sometimes, so I know you're not a snow bunny! Glad you and my daughter are at least enjoying good weather. Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from justmade
I believe we still get that feeling no matter how older we get. I believe it never leaves and it is one of the reason we can understand when children have that feeling.
I liked this I like the part of life your poem touched.
I think it is impressive.
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I believe we still get that feeling no matter how older we get. I believe it never leaves and it is one of the reason we can understand when children have that feeling.
I liked this I like the part of life your poem touched.
I think it is impressive.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Justmade, your comments are so perceptive and gentle - thank you so very much, Brooke
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Adewpearl ....
This is a very pleasant Sonnet providing plenty of vivid imagery for your readers. I enjoyed reading what you have written and compliment you on the beautiful picture at the top.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Hullo Adewpearl ....
This is a very pleasant Sonnet providing plenty of vivid imagery for your readers. I enjoyed reading what you have written and compliment you on the beautiful picture at the top.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Nanette Mary, thank you so much for your gracious response! Brooke
Comment from mmichelle97219
It is a very loose rhyme, and it causes some minor meter issues (fears and near for example) that I would fix before considering to send it to a publisher. For just a personal write it it great.
Happy writing
Michelle
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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It is a very loose rhyme, and it causes some minor meter issues (fears and near for example) that I would fix before considering to send it to a publisher. For just a personal write it it great.
Happy writing
Michelle
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I have absolutely no problem with fears/near, which is, by the way, the only rhyme that is not exact, not an example of others, but thank you for your input, Brooke and you truly consider fears/near "very loose" rhyming????
Comment from Maurice WA Johnson
Awwwe, Brooke, you soppy thing you.
Welcome to the club.
Though for me, the charm 'gainst the night terrors is my teddy bear. He's fifty years old now, and still my regular companion. Though he's looking the worst for wear now, think we've got some kind of Dorian Grey think going. Guess I would be the painting! lol.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Awwwe, Brooke, you soppy thing you.
Welcome to the club.
Though for me, the charm 'gainst the night terrors is my teddy bear. He's fifty years old now, and still my regular companion. Though he's looking the worst for wear now, think we've got some kind of Dorian Grey think going. Guess I would be the painting! lol.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I have a Steiff Rudolph the Rednosed Reindeer from 1951, the year of my birth that is a bit grungy by now, and most of the red is rubbed off his nose - but I love him dearly. You're my kind of guy!! Thanks, Brooke :-) And I'm sure you look a tad better than that dreadful painting!!
Comment from unidian
Ah your fairies, Brooke. I see they not only dance and play in enchanted forests, but take care of their little girl during the dark of night. A wonderful piece, perfectly evoking solace in the gloom. Tom x
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Ah your fairies, Brooke. I see they not only dance and play in enchanted forests, but take care of their little girl during the dark of night. A wonderful piece, perfectly evoking solace in the gloom. Tom x
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Tom, thank you - offering solace seems such a natural behavior for my little friends! Brooke